Reviews For Crushing Cameron
Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: November 12 2018 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Party Night Preparation
Date: November 12 2018 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Party Night Preparation
Here:
"I’ve known her for a long time, and but didn’t know that she was a dominatrix."
I don't think that you need the "and".
Is it interesting that here:
“And who else…oh, Goddess Kristine! I play with her on my softball team..."
She is refereed to as "Goddess Kristine" but later on (in the next chapter, for example) she is refereed to as "Mistress Kristine". I think that is the odd segment out.
I don't see why she needed to stand on Cameron whilst she was drying off but whatever. A detailed chapter. Only some minor discrepancies to note, as I have done.