Date: March 20 2020 1:20 AM Title: Chapter 23
If (and when) this issue is resolved, part of me kind of hopes there's an alternate ending where Amanda not only succeeds, but Desmond's Mom, exhausted, just resigns to and accepts his fate, like: "It's alright, sweetheart, your sister and I will take good care of you from now on..." *as her curled fingers reach for him, as if to swallow him up into his new life*
Just a thought, lol ;)
Again, can't wait to see what you actually do!
Date: March 19 2020 10:55 PM Title: Chapter 23
Not gonna lie, that last scene is hot.
I can't remember if Desmond has a phone, but if he does, he should've been recording Amanda's every move.
Anyways, I love this story, and I can't wait to see what Desmond's Mom does, like if she finally confronts Amanda, especially now that she's basically guaranteed that Desmond will be one inch tall forever.
Speaking of, I am really curious to see Jackie's reaction. I know she loves Desmond, so Amanda's predictions don't seem likely(I did like her promise of foot action, though!). I guess we'll have to see...
Great work as always! Keep it up!
Date: March 19 2020 12:27 PM Title: Chapter 23
First off love the story, but to me it doesn't make sense that last chapter Desmond tells his mom he "wouldn't trust Amanda not to tell the whole world" about the situation, so they make her stand in the hall. But this chapter they just include her in all the plans leading her to blabbing to the whole world about it.
Author's Response:
Yeah. I know. I made some edits to Chapter 23 that address the very issue you bring up. Thanks for pointing it out. And I'm glad you love the story!