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Reviewer: Leedor M Signed [Report This]
Date: May 15 2022 9:57 PM Title: The begining

Godzilla earht de 300 pies y marugori de 270 pies serían capaces de acabar con estás gigantes fácilmente ni siquiera Cassidy tendría oportunidad 

Reviewer: HardWords Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 13 2020 11:56 AM Title: The begining

I found the concept here very interesting, and the execution equally so, but more tantalizing than anything.  The characters are very likable, with intelligence and size only making Cassidy love her smaller, weaker brother that much more (while seeing a woman go crazy with power can be fun, it's equally fun to see this kind of dominance dressed in a gentle demeanor).  I love the displays of strength as well.

I know you said you thought the ending was a bit rushed, but personally I thought it was a great jumping off point for other stories.  Small, weak girls growing in size, strength and intelligence to dominate families or larger groups while still retaining a love for the people around them.  I'm looking forward to seeing you do more with the concept, since it seems like a great setup for other stories.

Reviewer: Darien Fawkes Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 26 2020 9:44 AM Title: The begining

You may remember me from the last story. I didn't know you posted a new one so I only stumbled upon it when I was re-reading the first Growing Closer.

I really liked this one as well. It did some things differently than the original one which I think were smart choices. You didn't have a regressive main character, which made things less awkward when it came to sexual situations. I also liked Cassidy. She was an easy to like character who didn't turn into a jerk or bully when she started growing which too many stories these days do, and that really turns me off from most of those characters. She stayed a loving sister, which I want more of on this site. 

I especially loved the muscle and strength aspects of the story. My favorite being the arm wrestling scene. When James used two arms and Cassidy still wasn't even trying, that was cool (and hot, I won't lie). I encourage you to write more scenes like that. Scenes with young women showing off their strength compared to normal people but in a very casual setting. I don't know why but there's a real turn on when it comes to a woman just doing something casual that she wants to do, and everyone around her is physically unable to stop her. Like Cassidy was only just keeping her arm still and James' entire body was unable to even budge it. Loved it. Do more scenes like that, but keep it in a gentle context.

Towards the end when the drug became available for everyone to use I found a good and bad thing about that. The good thing is that it allows for more spin offs with different characters in all kinds of scenarios. The only thing that may be considered a weakness is that it made Cassidy feel less special in a world where all women are giant, super strong, geniuses. But that's entirely my opinion. Don't base your work around the point of view of one reader. 

I loved what you did, and I can't wait to see what you come up with next my dude. Keep going with your ideas.



Author's Response:

Thank you so much for the thoughtful response! 

I agree about the ending, personally I feel it was a bit rushed. I tend to write these stories all at once and around the end I just want to finish. The idea is to have a "universe" built around this drug. I have some ideas for another story that will look at a slightly different relationship. 

I may also ret-con the whole growing to 250+ feet as I'm not sure how I feel about it in retrospect. 

As always I greatly appreciate the feedback positive or negative!


 

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