Date: February 24 2020 10:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great job on your first story! I'm not a huge nose guy but I think others will really appreciate your contribution to the nose fetish content. I know that I'll write some here and there but it won't be a main focus for me. So I think you should continue this. As for tips, a good spell checker can make grammar a lot easier to keep the story flowing smooth. Good luck on chapter 2!
Date: February 24 2020 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice start. I am surprised Hannah would lick her boogers off of his bottom half. It would be nice if Hannah shove his head up her nose and let him dangle from there for a bit.
One thing you may want to work on is your grammar. One such example is your use of commas, there is a space between a comma and the following word. Another example is starting a sentence with a lower case letter rather than a capital letter. Do these things take away from your subject matter? No, they do not. Though they do take away from the ease of reading your story.
Keep it going. This is great work for a first story.
Date: February 24 2020 6:29 AM Title: Chapter 1
Omg I absolutely loved this I've always had a fixation with nose stuff but there have barely been any stories and I loved the way you described it absolutely amazing. I seriously can wait for you to continue this story