Reviewer: italykeke Signed
Date: December 13 2013
Title: Chapter 1: introducing the characters
I think alternatives stories are a really good idea! It wasn't used too much on this website and I think it's a scheme there is not something like a choice decision possible. I really think this is a good idea and you should do it if you want to ! It can only be better!
As For my ideas, I'm glad to see you are interested in them !As you ask me for what I had in mind for a an ending here is what I thought of,the story should head to (it's a bad ending for Kate and friends I guess ) , Jess (and Michael if you choose to put him) are captured by Amy and Stacey, they use them to blackmail Kate and convince her to talk back to Emma and act as much as she can to make her mad at her and also clean their name to her. Then when Emma show no sympathy for Kate anymore ( serve her food on the ground, mock her in front of the family, put her back to her place , ignore her etc) and show more sympathy toward her other siblings the two young girls keep her and enslave her just like they did to the others. They treat her so bad ( with ass and feet treatment ) and surveil her so much she give up and beg for the freedom of her friends in exchange of her slavery. Of course the bargain wouldn't be respected and The two others, not ready to give up hope are bound to stay , for Mickael in Stacey's butt and for Jess in Amy's shoes. Kate would undergo both of their ass and feet for the rest of her life until she eventually become so small she disappear for them ( even sucked in a ass or pussy or even crushed underfoot or drown in sweat if she dies ) or she could also be placed when shrunk enough in Emma's or her mother shoes so she'll live in it eating fuzz and drinking sweat.
By the way I truly hope you'll make a scene with the mother, exhausted from work comes home , lie on the sofa and seing Kate not doing anything usefull force her to rub her feet , even yell on her when she refuses at first. As she sees Kate doesn't like to do it at all is amused by that and tease her again.If Emma tells her she shouldn't make her do that her mother could turn the table upside down and convince her daughter that Kate have to find a way to help in the house and if it's helping the hardworking ones to relax it's a good thing and she should encourage her to do more . She could say something like " common , it's even her who wanted to please me cause I had unfairly told her last time she didn't try to do anything useful, now she is willing to do that you want her to stop ? You disagree with her right Kate ?" ( this kind of behavior we will understand where Stacey got that comedian skills ha ha) . If she convince Emma to try it , that it will change her mind, the two of them would appreciate a nice movie while having their feet rubbed. I thing it could be a cool, rational way to have more physical humiliation from those two grown up ones. It will be another strong shock for Kate to handle , after being bossed around by her younger simbling, being talked to like a child and taken care of like a baby , she was now even under her once little sister's huge sole, massaging it while she wasn't even taking care of it and was more interested in the movie and joking with her mom witnessing how she was different and looked more confident and woman than before. I truly think it would be great, the fact they decide to do it any Thursday for exemple with her mother saying something like:" I hope it will be better next week cause you need to study foot massages" then Emma "Don't worry sis I'll buy you a book with any kind of massages so you will be the best tiny masseuse of the world", would make it common sence and if one day Kate decided to revolt and refuse then she would be scorn by her younger sister and punished after being forced to do it anyway . (Of course it wouldn't only be foot massages, it would be whatever you like and there is no need to write about it all the times she had to do that so this could be an event happening in one chapter)
Another thing I saw was breast feeding , it would be a really hard humiliation but it seems difficult to find any possible way it could happen, if you think about making one I only see a few way it could work , if you make a chapter were Kate has to stand against her too-drunk sister or mother. (there is another way: milk was found out to heavily slow down the shrinking desease)
Well I hope I inspired you a bit more, of course I detailed a lot the scenes but it's of course just to justify how the rest happened and try to be as clear as possible, then again take what you think is good !
Author's Response:
Thankyou once again for you suggestions, they have given me a lot to think about. I'm afraid I probably won't use your ending as I don't find that it would work but I would most likely make a variation of it as an alternative. But your other suggestion were very helpful.
I like how you expanded on your idea of the mother forcing kate for a foot rub and you gave me a few examples I could use to humiliate her and even bring Kate in on it. It would work well because then everyone in the house would be against her but in their own different way. This idea I will most definitely use. =)
The suggestion I like the most is your idea about breast feeding. I wasn't going to include it because it just didn't fit with the story but your ideas are brilliant. I could write about how the mother/ sister get drunk and combine that with the fact that breast milk slows down the shrinking process. This would give the drunken women the crazy idea that if they breast fed Kate then she would stop shrinking and would result in total humiliation for Kate. The only problem is that Emma shouldn't have the ability to lactate as she doesn't have a child. Breast milk developed when a womans body in subjected to hormones when she is pregnant and causes her to lactate. But I could just forget about that and make it happen anyway =)
All your ideas are good and I appreciate your input. If you have any other suggestions please don't feel like you'd be annoying if you gave them.