Reviewer: NRawkGTS Signed
Date: September 16 2018
Title: Chapter 1: Shrunken Bully Sticks it to his Teacher’s Ass
This was a great story, I really liked the overall flow of events and in my humble opinion there can never be enough butt stuff lol
I do think there are some descrepencies in the narrative, like how Ms. Wilson essentually bullied Garrett after shrinking him or how quickly his mother gave up on him, but those are minor, and the only eye-rollingly contrieved line for the sake of the story was Garrett saying he could still kick Ms. Wilson's ass just for her to misunderstand him. Again, they were still funny and everything, just didn't feel organic, if you know what I mean.
My only real point of criticism does however come after Ms. Wilson accidentally sits on Garrett. Why is it that the principal isn't aware that reduced students could survive being flatten but Ms. Wilson does? Like, she didn't seem surprised that Garrett was still alive when everyone else just assumed him to be dead. Maybe I missed a line or something, but still not a deal breaker.
Otherwise, this looks like it will be a great series and I hope we get some tiny students servicing their lovely teacher's (or possible fellow students who have somehow gotten their hands on the shrink ray) asses!