Reviewer: Curvograph Signed
Date: January 09 2019
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1: Blood and Mud
The bad: minor spelling mistakes.
The good: pretty much everything else. Maybe that is the reason why even tiny imperfections stand out?
I have not written a review for quite a long time but your story demanded immediate attention. I have been following your other project from the beginning, it is one of my all-time favourites, so my expectations were very high. Fortunately, you served your readers a gripping pilot chapter and disappointment was the last thing on my mind upon finishing the read. I particularly like the way you balanced environmental details and fast action. The scene, although short, is extremely immersive and easy to visualise, the reader feels as though they had witnessed the events first-hand. And that is a feat rarely accomplished even by 'professional' authors.
The Prince is indeed a likeable character, a capable leader haunted by family issues and past he would rather not revisit... lots of potential for future development. Although we know nearly nothing about the Lady, I suspect she is not just a bloodthirsty monster who whimsically massacres encountered soldiers. Nevertheless, the relationship between these two is up for a rough start.
To sum it up, a great beginning to a new story. I am already looking forward to reading its next installment. Good luck!
C
Ps. English is not my native language, so I would like to apologise in advance for any mistakes you might find in my reviews. It is only fair, as I have just pointed out the few and unimportant ones in your work
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your in-depth review Curvograph!
I always try to write imperfect characters, and the reserved Eliphas is no exception. You'll probably have already found that I tend to write people more complex than the typical requirements for a story, but I enjoy exploring what makes people wh they are, especially their faults and what drives their motives. Thanks so much again for your review, and though its been nearly a year, I hope you're well and still enjoying what I submit.