For a first attempt this wasn't bad. However that doesn't mean it's good either. You have pacing problems throughout, with the story seeming to jump between certain points, skipping the stuff inbetween, and then the giantess herself jumps a bit, acting kind in one instance, and then suddenly getting cruel, with not really anything to mark the change. It's still better than some for a first attempt, and I suggest you keep writting, as there's a lot of potential here.

You are an artist of the word, D.X. I love most of your stories, though some do end a little strangely, but they're always an interesting read. This one was no exception. I will state I would like to see a bit more vore, but then, that's because that's my thing, and nothing will ever change that.

Still, what you create is always good for a voyuer shrinker like myself. The big characters, even when they notice the little person, are rarely out of character evil like you see in some stories, or so normal that they barely react to the fact that someone's shrunk. They're reaction are great. So a good job, and I hope you keep it up.

Okay, not bad, not bad at all. As an American, I found it hard to place evey dish, though thanks to an anime, I know what Mochi looks like(Monster Rancher). The plot is good, and the characters come off well. I do enjoy the last few scenes too, especially the description of the contents of the stomach sloshing about. All in all, an A.

Author's Response:

thanks for your kind comments!

So far an excellent little read. You've done some great characters, and they are interesting. Still wish for some unaware vore/guy getting made into a sandwich orburger and nearly eaten, but so far, a good way to pass the time.

Author's Response: Hmm I hadn't thought about any unaware stuff for this one am definitely up for exploring that alley sometime in the future. I do have some interesting ideas for the next chapters I hope you'll enjoy. thanks!

I agree with the reviewers. I've been enjoying the story so far. I would of course, try to get you to throw in a scene where she gets stuck inside a burger and almost eaten by someone, but that's because it's my thing(Actually, I would like her to be really eaten, but I don't think you want that, so I'm just throwing it out therE)

Excellent story. As a fan of unaware interaction I very much enjoyed the story itself, and the way it flowed, especailly with the friend not realizing what he was doing to the little guy, even though he knew he was there. Of course, as a vore, I would love some unaware food releated interaction(Like the tiny guy being made into a sandwich and almost eaten while the two are on some romantic picnic), but even without that, this was good.

As said with the last story, not a bad piece of work. The unaware is done nicely, with a good description to everything going on. Still prefer sandwiches/burgers as the medium of being eaten by the unaware person, but drinks work too.

Author's Response: I plan on doing at least one with a sandwich. I'm going for all of the classics and trying to add my own twist to them. I have other stuff I'm working on as well, but the other stories are longer and will take a while.

As a fan of unaware vore, this is probably my favorite of your's. I do, of course, understand why you avoid getting eaten while small, since most of the time, your protagonists wouldn't survive, and you do have them have close calls, but still, nice to see it taken all the way here.

Not bad, the original interactive was Shrinking Down to Size on WDC.