[Report This]Date: November 09 2011 5:36 AM Title: Chapter 4 - Entering the Abyss/It was a Nightmare
The ending is quite sudden but I guess it works. The first person you used was a welcome change to the usual third person and I feel it was used effectively
Date: November 09 2011 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 3 - Terrible Realizations
Well this is an interesting twist because I guess he was on Michelle's body. I thought maybe the white stuff was, well let's not go there. You should be putting tags for your story other than just "giantess" which isn't supposed to be a proper tag in any case.
Date: November 09 2011 5:29 AM Title: Chapter 2 - The Light and White-Filled Container
Actually, despite my prevous review I'm still confused as to what the object he's on is. Your story makes me want ot read on and the short and snappy chapters are effective in this case as at first glance extremelly short chapters tend to imply a poorly written story, as leastov n giantessworld anyway. You're doing a good job.
Date: November 09 2011 5:25 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Waking in the Darkness
Wow, this is really interesting. I'm assuming hes looking down at a stomach, or am I wrong?