Reviewer: Flaming_Heart Signed [Report This]
Date: October 18 2014 10:09 PM Title: 'Zena's House'

She doesn't seem that bad,
Nice chapter.

Author's Response:

Thanks!  Although,... Never judge a journalist by her 'cover', she might lead a double life.  ;`)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2014 1:29 AM Title: 'Zena's House'

It sucks. I thought this was the chapter that Zena gets rough with him.

Nah, I'm kidding it was a good chapter. I still wanted the sexy stuff this chapter tho. The good news is that you put so much detail into this "setup" chapter, that I can't wait for the next ones.

You spent like 1/4 of the chapter talking about Max's struggle with pissing. I thought some of it was unnecessary.

The chain removal scene was great becuase it allowed Zena to gain Max's trust.

I was surprised that Zena didn't have any sexual feelings this chapter. Instead there was one statement that didn't sound sexuall but it defiantly was meant to be. The part about Max holding his breath. That was the first instance, and I think maybe when Zena was holding him in her hand that maybe she could start getting some feelings of sexual control.

I also like the relationship of luxury that you put for Zena. As a reporter she was wearing something fancy. Then here you mention that her house was fancy, and lastly her robe.

Some random details I enjoyed: Feeling the metal chain to see if it was connected to anything. That fact that he pissed before eating or drinking. That was his priority. Looking to see his reflection on Zena's fingernail. Nice touch.

As always, a nice chapter, and I can't wait for the next one!