Date: November 20 2014 10:10 AM Title: Was it Worth It?
This is some very solid stuff. The idea feels original, and the balance of Josh's emotional vulnerability weighed against his new physical vulernability adds a lot of good tension. The character personalities are well-illustrated as well. Keep it up.
P.S. Not to be a nitpicker, but I'm guessing the potective in the story summary is supposed to be protective?
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks! It really cool to know that you like it. It definitely means a lot. Really glad to know the characters are effective. Characters seem to be the backbone of my stories.
Also yes, that was supposed to be protective. Fixed it.
[Report This]Date: November 20 2014 2:34 AM Title: Was it Worth It?
First off, I'm glad that nothing was rushed. There was a lot of detail.
The mother, Heather, sounds very comfortable to talk to. She would make a good counselor. I wonder will her reaction be when she sees Josh.
I thought it was interesting how Josh was on some T-shirts instead of some underwear. That's not a bad thing. It tells me that you value story first and sexy stuff second. I think it's fits great with this story.
1 inch tall is very small. Most stories have like 3-6 inch tall men. But this isn't most stories. This is a one of a kind masterpiece in the making. (Ok, I'm probably exaggerating a bit).
But I really enjoy this story and I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Heather's pretty fun to write with what I've got so far. She has to kinda be super approachable to her already independent daughter since Annie's the one people usually come to for help.
I probably would have never even considered panties as an option, especially since sex would probably be the last thing in either Josh or Annie's minds. As for Josh being an inch tall, it makes him a lot more helpless and dependent on Annie. Anyways, I'm really glad you're liking this story, and thanks for the review.