It's a good story I like it :) i will say though it does seem to jump to differamt things very quickly. For example in min he's sleeping in her pussy then in the suddenly in the toilet. Other then that it's good :)

Author's Response:

Thanks again :) I felt like it did jump a bit too fast, I'll probably change that around in the next few chapters, haha once you get to writing this stuff sometimes it's hard to stop ;)