[Report This]Date: February 08 2015 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 12. Breaking news
The news crew angle was genius. This allows you to provide an almost constant "tiny perspective" while moving the story along seamlessly.
The way Kelly discovered Marla and Stu's van was perfect(only wish you'd have described the footprint's size in more detail in correlation with the van). I also like how Kelly played on the reporter's ambition with that 'exclusive story' bit(almost like she subconsciously didn't give Marla a choice in the matter). The honking was a nice touch as well. And I'm still fascinated when Kelly just uses her normal voice it shakes the glass(very much enjoying your attention to detail throughout this story).
But my favorite part would have to be was when she gave her ground rules, absolutely loved them.
I feel bad for Ron seeing as he really liked her and now feels betrayed. Hope he gets the chance to confront her. Would also like to know what Lisa thinks of these new developments.
I was initially sad that Casey wasn't in this chapter but the news van was so unexpected and fit so beautifully that I don't need my Casey fix.
I like how Kelly makes it clear to not piss her off. I can only wonder what will happen when they do.
aaron
PS I know from the time they've grown till now has only been a few hours if that but what will happen at nighttime? Also, since they have enhanced strength(and breath) will we find out if anything else is extraordinary besides the obvious of course.
As always great chapter and I can't wait till next weekend.
Author's Response:
Thanks. I'm glad that you liked it. To be honest, this was a risky chapter. I've always loved the idea of a giantess using the media to get her message through, and I've toyed with it in some unfinished stories, but I was afraid that it could be too cheesy (as Kelly herslef will say in the next chapter ;)). I'm happy to see that it came out well enough.
Of course, Kelly was not going to let Marla and Stu decide what they wanted to do. It was a good thing for them that they decided to accept her "offer". She was eager to set the ground rules, so I'm happy you liked them :)
It's true that Ron feels betrayed and that it's easy to feel bad about him. I do, sometimes, as well. But let's not forget that while he is basically a decent guy and most of what has happened to him has been out of his control, he has not been completely honest either. We will learn more about him and what he feels in the coming chapters. And he will have an important role throughout the story.
Casey hasn't been there in the last few chapters, which were mostly about Kelly. But let me tell you that her trek to Hollner is almost done, so you should be expecting to see much more from her really soon. And with Casey will come chaos, of course. She is nothing like Kelly, as Hollner will unfortunately find out. I think that you will have more than enough of Casey as the story progresses. This chapter barely marked the story's equator.
Oh, and Kelly will get pissed off at the people. Very pissed off. You'll see how she reacts.
Cheers!
PS: I'm afraid that answering to your last questions would give too much away on what will happen and what will not. Right now only a few hours have gone on since the wome grew, but the story still needs to go ahead for a while. As for their enhancements: The women are clearly bigger (that one was obvious ;)) and much stronger than they should be. There will be at least one additional side effect popping up before the end of the story...