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Reviewer: carnaj2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 09 2016 5:43 AM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16

I'm really enjoying your story. Glad now that the mother is finally aware of what is happening and getting involved.

Your characters are believable, which is always good in any story. They speak like REAL people: always a plus. Nothing detracts from the enjoyment of a story (at least for me) is a character that speaks in archaic proper English. Real people say 'it's'... NOT 'it is'. Things like that; the little things you note just make the story better.

Olivia definitely has a cruel streak and seems to love tormenting her step-brother. And now his mother knows what's going on and what seemingly makes Mike shrink. She seemed rather unconcerned at his predicament and actually amused, placing him in a hamster cage. I think poor Mike's in even more trouble now.

Your writing is good and the story flows well leading the reader along at a good pace. No complaints over grammer or punctuation - no glaring mistakes that detract from the story. Looking forward to the next chapter with anticipation. Keep up the Great work!

Carnaj



Author's Response:

Thanks for the kind review.  I'm glad the characters have some believability and reality to them, at least on some level.  I'm glad you like the story so far, and thanks for reading.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2016 1:53 PM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16

I really liked this chapter. The details you provided were perfect. His step-mother's stunning beauty to her exceptional physique down to the sunflower seeds and raisons' size. Really put the atmosphere into perspective for me.
I really loved Colleen's attitude towards Mike being very playfully nice but still motherly. I wonder if maybe she'll not be concerned with Mike seeing her naked or watching her pleasure herself. She definitely feels extremely confident with Mike now and may try something unexpected(I mean, he saw her naked for a few seconds and instantly shrunk down to an inch.)

I cannot wait to see what you have planned next for Mike and Coleen. I kinda hope she decides to bring him to her work away from Olivia because Colleen doesn't feel like sharing him.

aaron
PS where does Mike go to the bathroom in his terrarium?

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.  I'm glad there was some atmosphere put into the chapter with the description.  I'm glad you like Colleen's attitude so far.  As far as Mike going to the bathroom in the terrarium, I'm not sure.  He could ask for assistance or find a corner if no one is able to help.

Reviewer: Eternal36 Signed [Report This]
Date: August 06 2016 4:08 AM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16

Really liking it so far, well written.



Author's Response:

Thanks for your comments.  I appreciate it, and thanks for reading.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2016 2:07 PM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16

Yeah, I agree. Colleen seems way more exciting than Olivia right now and I can't wait to see what she has in store for Mike.

To solve Olivia's concern, Colleen just has to say that Mike went to school early or something. Just because Mike isn't in his room doesn't mean that he is shrunk.

In the end, Colleen asked Mike if he needs anything. I think Mike needs to get away from Olivia and Colleen should have a "take your son to work" day. That way, he escapes and also Colleen gets to spend time with Mike.

I wonder how sexual Colleen will go with Mike. I hope she goes all the way, after all, she knows that Mike is indeed attracted to her. Since her husband is gone, why not have some fun...

I totoly underestimated Mike's shrinking ability. I thought if he is completely aroused, he will shrink a few feet, but all the way to 1 inch?!! Amazing! And that was just looking at his naked stepmom! What happens when they get physical while they are naked?

A mother always looks at her kids like they are they're her babies. It must feel really good for Colleen to be able to care for Mike once again.

If I were Mike, I would enjoy it while he can. Probably better than being with Olivia since he knows how out of control she can be. Colleen seems like a woman that he can reason with, but I have been wrong before and maybe Colleen will control Mike just like Olivia.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading and reviewing.  Colleen certainly has that motherly instinct, and this is new to her now with an incredibly small son.  One inch is the smallest Mike shrinks, but he's now on the 24-hour clock until he re-enlarges.  Yeah, Mike should enjoy it while he can.

Reviewer: LJin Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2016 11:27 AM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16

I said I wanted more Olivia and Mike, but now I can't help to be so curious for him to spend some time with his 'Mommy'! :o



Author's Response:

Thanks for your comments.  Mommy-time is another twist on the family relations.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2016 9:11 AM Title: Chapter 14 ... 8-5-16

Next up: "The Return of the Spoiled Beeyotch."

Author's Response:

LOL.  I like it.  And it has a Star Wars theme too.  Bitches can be a lot of fun in these type of stories.  Thanks for commenting.

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