Date: October 01 2016 5:42 PM Title: Chapter 15 ... 8-12-16
"Everything is much bigger than you now, Mike. And I mean everything.”
Whoa! Simmer down, mom.
I hope you haven't given up on this story. Love the duality of mom's nourishment vs stepsister'a torment.
Author's Response:
That line by Mike's mom was walking the 'seductive line' of how she normally acts. I might continue this story in the future. Thanks for noticing the duality between 'nourishment' and 'torment'.
[Report This]Date: August 19 2016 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 15 ... 8-12-16
Huge fan of this story, love the direction and relationships between the characters. Hopefully you carry on writing this as I'm sure there's a lot more that can be explored.
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot for your comments. I'm glad the characters are interesting.
Date: August 12 2016 6:14 PM Title: Chapter 15 ... 8-12-16
*gulps*
Author's Response:
Thanks. I'm not sure what will happen for Mike, but hopefully it will be entertaining.
[Report This]Date: August 12 2016 1:45 PM Title: Chapter 15 ... 8-12-16
This dynamic that is playing out in this family is great! KEEP IT COMING, FRIEND!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your comments. I'm glad the story direction is interesting.
[Report This]Date: August 12 2016 9:59 AM Title: Chapter 15 ... 8-12-16
I love Colleen!
I think she knows that Mike has a boner and she just wants to expose him like that.
Hopefully, this leads into some even better teasing where Mike won't be able to avert his eyes.
Why didn't Mike hide behind something in the cage? If he really wanted to not let Olivia know where he was, he should have hid behind something. He doesn't need to see them talking. Listening to them is all he needs to do and he can determine where they are by the sound of their voices.
Yes, I would love a new story from you. I love Colleen's character and Mike's character. Olivia kind of annoys me, but other than that, this story is fantastic and I hope I will like your next one.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like the character of Colleen. She balances out Olivia's character dynamic. I guess Mike was too frozen in fear to hide behind something at that moment when Olivia entered. Thanks for your comments.
[Report This]Date: August 12 2016 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 15 ... 8-12-16
And, in the process of that walk, the true depth of his feelings for Colleen will be...exposed.
*Insert opening bars of DRAGNET theme, here.*
Author's Response:
That would be apt music right then. Exposed indeed. Thanks for commenting and reading.