[Report This]Date: March 09 2017 7:58 PM Title: Jo's Gum
Glad to see you're back! Also thrilled to see you took some of my ideas :) Jo really is a mean girl huh? It might be interesting working together with her if he survives this. I'm guessing the mouth puns would never stop xD. Dream stomach fake-out was an interesting maybe preview ;). Lots of opportunity for fun coming up. Club means dancing, dirnking, and maybe even romance? If Jo is closing the cafe herself, maybe she could take some of the alone time to check in with her captive, a progress review.
Lastly, you should consider posting your stuff (or at least have an account for back-up) on another sight like giantesscity.com or writing.com. Would hate to see someone with your talent give up just because of a technical problem <3
Author's Response: Always back for more when it comes to this story, my friend! I feel like, of all the erotica I've written in the past (most if not all of which is long gone), this is my magnum opus. It's really coming together nicely. I wouldn't say Jo was inherently mean, but the dominance she has over our little protagonist brings out this new side in her, and she's certainly enjoying it. Her love of bad puns stems from my own, so don't expect it to stop any time soon! ;D Will definitely fake you up on that review-type chapter; I feel like I can easily transition to it from this one, and I have a good idea of how to do it, too. As for posting my work elsewhere, after this scare I'll certainly look into it, but I feel like nowhere's quite as good as here. We'll see. Until then, I hope to God this place starts open for as long as possible- for all our sakes. :)