Date: March 01 2019 4:00 PM Title: Chapter 8: Unchained Monster
Looking forward to the rest of the story, hope you finish it!
Date: January 04 2019 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 8: Unchained Monster
In addition,
I do like how in the pervious chapter you added a convo between Dan and Al where Dan said we forced her to kill him while Al said they couldnt force her to do anything.
She didnt have too kill him, but she did because she also wanted too, which was evident when she derived pleasure from taunting him. Perhaps its a coping mechanism, where she doesnt blame herself at all. Would of also been an interesting physcological card if Dan couldnt cheat death, to try to bring her down to "his level" of murdering an innocent.
Again, nice work.
[Report This]Date: January 04 2019 6:08 PM Title: Chapter 8: Unchained Monster
Wow, shit went from 0-100 real fast...
The Dan part was scary! Not all the memories of them together in the world could even spare him from her. Of course, she had to destroy his dignity by saying his love for her was sickening.
I was suprised Dan didnt try to talk himself out, putting it on Al scarring him, bargining that he could be her slave for life, or saying he regreted it. Not even using the fact they were friends to try to buy himself a quick death, or that he didnt want to die as enemies with her.
I guess he thought he didnt deserve Mercy... oof...
While these chapters are coming out fast, I am happy to see the quality hasnt been affected. It's only getting better.
Nice work.
[F] for Dan.
Author's Response:
Let's say her state of mind wasn't exatly clear, both the hunger and the feeling of betrayal at the sudden revelation basically transformed her in a wild beast.
I thought that (consciously or not") "lowering" the tinies to a grade that was beneath her, so "food" or "playthings", would have a lesser effect on her psyche, which was already messed up for he feelings of guilt. It's meant to be a self-preservation mechanism, or at least that's what i meant it to be. Well i'm no psychologist but i'm pretty satisfied by this explanation.
From Dan's point of view, he was as well hurt by guilt, so when he let himself be eaten, it was probably a form of final punishment he had to take, in order to wash the sin of hurting his friend/crush.
I'm happy you're liking it!
Author's Response:
Let's say her state of mind wasn't exatly clear, both the hunger and the feeling of betrayal at the sudden revelation basically transformed her in a wild beast.
I thought that (consciously or not") "lowering" the tinies to a grade that was beneath her, so "food" or "playthings", would have a lesser effect on her psyche, which was already messed up for he feelings of guilt. It's meant to be a self-preservation mechanism, or at least that's what i meant it to be. Well i'm no psychologist but i'm pretty satisfied by this explanation.
From Dan's point of view, he was as well hurt by guilt, so when he let himself be eaten, it was probably a form of final punishment he had to take, in order to wash the sin of hurting his friend/crush.
I'm happy you're liking it!