Reviewer: Vord Signed
Date: January 19 2007
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1
Well the things I liked about this story is that.... it gives a narrative detail of the protagonist who keeps on shrinking, to the point that his view of his own world became a scary enviroment, espicially when he has to view his sisters as his caretakers and feels much humiliation than a person has to suffer....
Plus I like the in-depth look to how he was seen, when he kept shrinking, which was the best part of the stories, when he became the size of a 6 year old to an infant and than how he sees his step-sister, Missy to be quite attractive, making his state of mind unpleasent.
I do have some thoughts at times of what would it been like if I was shrunken both scary and exciting.
But if there is any chance you'll be making a sequel...I just like to see it as a direct sequel (continuation where the original story leaves off) with more views of how Missy's friends take care of Eric, and then shows him off to other girls. Then later, Eric starts to feel horrific when he realizes that he can become his own dangerous person, than the girls who stares at him, and has some creepy sexual thoughts that worsens his own mind, and plus a more deepen relationship between Eric and Missy, which later results Missy really hurting Eric so badly he might die or something, because of her dominating abuse. Hope these suggestions will give you some ideas for a sequel probably...
Sincerely yours, Vord
