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Reviewer: julieshrink Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2014 4:13 PM Title: Chapter 5: Inner Journey with a side of Living

Very mass, continue the story with Adam's discovery.

Reviewer: zephilia Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 16 2014 11:01 AM Title: Chapter 5: Inner Journey with a side of Living

Great story sofar. Your writing is good  all I have to say is becareful of your grammar and spelling. The core of the book is great. You have good ideas and are letting them out in a way that others can enjoy it. Not bad for a first attempmt, even better since most first attempts are only one chapter. Keep up the great work.



Author's Response: Thanks! I realize, especially after I read through it a few times, that I missed quite a bit in my proof read (It was late at the time). Usually a friend of mine reads through it and points things out to men, but he wasn't available when I went to post it and I wanted to get it up. As I've said before this isn't really my first attempt, but it is certainly my most successful so far :) I'm glad you're enjoying it, and I appreciate the critique; There always has to be a moment of pain so we can learn, grow, and adapt ;)

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