Date: September 04 2023 1:41 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Any chance of a Jacobs Nightmare chapter of Blaire's mom and Grace?
Author's Response:
Not a bad idea! Interesting concept especially for what I have planned so I'll keep this idea in mind! :)
Date: August 13 2023 1:29 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Response to-Author's Response:
Think you accidentally double posted a review! Just in case, pasting my response again to make sure you see it :)
Not sure what is happening with the site as it has been sketchy as of late. Creating some hard to read font color as well as now double posting.
Thank you for responding and I would like to chat some time on discord. I just have to figure out my discord as it seems I have been unable to join some discords not sure why. This has been a conundrum I haven't been able to overcome so have actually sadly given up on trying. LOL I'll try one more time though.
I only have 1 thing to say.
"This makes you wonder will Jinshin ever face the judgement from Alec"
You may or may not have unveiled the plot for Nefarious 2... ;)
This is interesting for sure, I just hope Jinshin has been helpful enough to alleviate harsh punishment.
Lol, I look forward to continuing Alec's development. Sadly, and admittedly, you may not see him again for a while...
As I am starting to like his interaction and judgement sprinkled through the story I like the plot twists and turns you have created with the earthly characters more. I say earthly characters only because we just don't know yet who this Alec is and where he originates.
Would love to chat more if you are interested or have time! Reach out to me on Discord sometime if you can :) would love to get more detailed in your thoughts and was curious on ideas on how to improve the story wherever possible!
I would love to chat more through Discord if I can just get it working. LOL I will try again tonight and see if it works, I just lost interest in the hassle is was giving me and gave up on it.
[Report This]Date: August 07 2023 7:08 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Once again, I've managed to catch up with this still heavily enjoyed story. What more can I give other than my encouragement here on its continued development. As the story's progressed I've found myself enjoying the characters more and more, though none more so than Jinshin (Apologies Deita my dear, you've been replaced). Her own conviction of beliefs is something I enjoyed more than I thought I would have. Learning she was just repeating the sins of her past tormentors was a certain treat to read through.
Also quite liking the characters both introduced and explored on it volume 2, though again the spot of my number 1 goes to Jinshin. That said, Annie's proving quite the force to be reckoned with as well, selling home that she's every bit the monster Jacob can be. It'll be fun when those two eventually come to blows.
Icing on the cake for me still is how the story is planned out, intended to be more than just another fetish tale on the site. Always enjoyed stories that actually had a story to tell. Solid work here.
However, and this is only my personal idea, I feel Deita's lustful revelations could have been allowed to cook longer. Greater hints prior to the reveal, and maybe even extending that over the course of a few entries in the story. Doesn't take away from my overall enjoyment, but it is just a thought of mine.
Keep up the incredible work!
Author's Response:
Regarding Deita, I couldn't agree more. Which is why I have a lovely idea that I believe should more than make up for some lacking and justly due content hehehe
Thank you so much for reading!
Date: August 05 2023 9:44 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
I'm so grateful Liz survived! 😭
I am emotionally attached to her 😊
Author's Response:
She managed to be rescued in time before she was eaten, but Jinshin still has to somehow escape with the two of them!
Guess we'll see what fate awaits them in the next chapter ;)
Thanks for reading! <3
[Report This]Date: August 05 2023 3:57 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Wow! I finally got around to reading this and I'm HOOKED. The cruelty is insane and rare for a story on this site. The extreme themes and writing are all top notch. I really hope Ben and Liz make it out.. but you did say no one makes it out after an encounter with Jacob
Is there a particular reason you picked Valdez? As someone who has lived in the area it was like getting hit with a flashbang seeing it in a story.
Author's Response:
Sweet! Ecstatic to have you here! :)
I'm really happy you like the story! I have become obsessed with writing it, and am already planning the sequel after I finish the 3rd volume of this first book. As for Ben and Liz, the next chapter will offer some closure on a few plot points I've been holding out for long enough now. I plan on releasing it later today!
Yes, I wanted somewhere remote but still familiar. I found Valdez on the maps and loved its look and appeal. I felt that if I were Blaire, it's the place I'd pick to escape a totalitarian family structure. It also gave me a way to add an additional level of depth to the story I thought.
Looking forward to see your feedback on the next chapter!
Date: July 31 2023 6:30 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Wow I didn't know that I am not sure how that happened or how it could be changed. I did notice that your "Author's Chapter Notes" have become faint and need highlighted to read as well. The rest of the text prior to and after the Author's Chapter Notes are darker print. On my side the text is black with white background.
Author's Response:
Yeah not sure what's happening I noticed that too and have been trying to fix it.
It may be related to mobile users, on my PC everything looks normal.
Date: July 31 2023 4:44 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Response to Author's Response:
My biggest challenge so far was getting into a position to start the development of Annie as a character in preparation for the obvious and eventual reunion between her and Jacob.
(You have done well with this development as there is truly drama between them that keeps the reader on edge anticipating the next turn.)
When I plotted the first volume, it was mostly just unveiling the main cast of characters and slowly showing the reader the contrast of personalities, motives and direction the plot may go.
(For me personally you have created a nice contrast between each character to the point I am intrigued as to what may happen to them. I am anticipating a brutal end to Liz and hoping for a resolution that would keep Ben around and he finally understands under the circumstances he can make things work out positively.)
Now that we are in volume 2, the major shift is how everything begins to unravel. With Blaire now on the path of discovery, how much longer can Jacob keep his secret from her?
(I actually was not expecting Blaire to start picking up on the issues she has found herself in and how she is becoming a decent sleuth.)
With Benjamin having infiltrated the experiment lab, what sort of consequences will he face?
(I am hoping that his punishment isn't fatal and he comes around to understanding his place in the world now that he has been shrunken and has been given to a somewhat caring person at least toward him.)
With Jacob's view of Liz and her soon to be fate, and Ben captured yet again, is her fate sealed and doomed to end in the belly of Deita?
(The anticipation and build up to this climax for Liz has been great although I would like to see her survive I'm assuming her fate has been sealed. Although I would like to see her fate whatever it is be detailed and graphic befitting the build up. I am still holding out for a somewhat positive outcome for Ben.)
Will Annie be able to prove her worth as more than a destructive force of nature? After getting O'Dias to speak at all, will it lead her to salvation and ensure the survival of her task force that she views as family?
(I think the trust has been hurt but hopefully she has proven to be worthy by this interrogation effort and tactic.)
And what about when Jacob and Annie meet? Are they enemies? Friends? Acquaintances? It's clear that because of their past and connection to one another, there seems to be large motivation on both ends that they seek to find each other eventually.
(This will be a very interesting meeting I get the feeling there may be some animosity Jacob has toward Annie as she really turned her back on him.)
As we approach chapter 10 which will be the mid volume climactic, I cannot wait to unveil the next phase of the story as we start to really get into the thick of it.
(I am most definitely looking forward to these new chapters and wondering what we will be witnessing.)
Thanks for reading!
Author's Response:
Hey! Not sure if you realized, but lately your reviews have been showing up the text as dark. The only way to read them is by highlighting the text.
This only started with chapter 7 of volume 2, the previous reviews were all white text as normal.
Otherwise thanks for your thoughts and I'm super pumped for this story!
Date: July 24 2023 6:24 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Liz HAS to live 😭🙏
Author's Response:
She has definitely suffered horribly. I'll admit, I've been drawing the drama out with Liz on purpose.
Ultimately, whatever happens, I hope it's intense and engaging for my readers!
Thanks for reading <3
Date: July 15 2023 12:33 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
I personally am satisfied so far you have brought a story that is very intriguing and can keep me interested for the next chapter. Great job with doing this as it is a great story with vore and sadistic tendencies intertwined within. There are some writers that only get to the vore without the build up which there is a place for those in our community there is also a place for writers such as yourself that brings a story. Don't get discouraged as you are one of the great writers we have here.
Author's Response:
Well I really appreciate that :)
On a positive note, I'm literally posting the next chapter right now lmao. Just finished it!
[Report This]Date: July 09 2023 7:55 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
I've caught up with the story and do have to say I am very much liking it so far. The characters don't just feel like they're placed there for plots sake, they have their own interests and agendas; points of self satisfaction in Deita's case. Safe to say, thus far, she's actually my favorite character. In the case of Jacob however, those thoughts have been shown in previous reviews. A true piece of work that, while being a main character, has no pleasant future in store for them. At least in my eyes. He's well past that point of return even if he tries to do right. Several millions of dollars too late as it were.
Very much looking forward to future chapters!
Author's Response:
At this point I may like to reveal that my inspiration for Jacob and this story came from Better Call Saul and Breaking Bad lol. Jacob has a long, arduous road ahead of him.
Your comment about my characters have their own plots and agendas, that's a big compliment, thank you so much. I'm very much aiming for a world where the characters feel real with their goals, livelihood and outcomes. Nobody is safe, not in a world like this.
Liz for instance, there was no reason Jacob had to shrunk her, but he did it anyways. The same goes for future characters down the road as you'll soon seen.
[Report This]Date: July 08 2023 9:27 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
And I hope the video I linked in the first one was interesting. And what were your thought on it? If you have discord we could have a full conversation on the server.
Author's Response:
It was pretty interesting, I skimmed through the whole thing at different parts. Admittedly I'm more into flip-flops or barefeet, or anything that shows most of the foot. Not as into footwear, unless its entrapment, in which I usually prefer flats with no socks. Though I know heels are immensely popular in the community so I fitted Deita with such. It'll be an important detail in a future chapter.
[Report This]Date: July 07 2023 7:02 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Aw man, I feel bad for Liz, she was too sweet to be done like that.
With that being said, you've really nailed the cruel side of things if you have me feeling that way about a character, especially since I've developed a special hatred for Jacob too. He's irredeemable in my eyes, he's only just met Blaire but he gets angrier at the thought of her getting trafficked than the cook he's been with for a while, what a scumbag. So I hope Blaire at the very least has a satisfying reaction when/if she finds out about his line of work, though I imagine they'll stick together in the grand scheme.
Really excited to see where you take this story, it's a cool concept with lots of room for interesting developments. The organization is cool too, we've only been introduced to two of the members so far, but I hardly believe that's all of them, so I'm looking forward to what other characters come from there too.
And best of all its going to be cruel! Though I am glad you're going to include gentle stuff too, sometimes my brain needs a getaway from all the tragedy ;-;
Author's Response:
Yeah Liz really has an unfortunate position... Chapter 4 will showcase that firsthand.
I have 2 specific chapters in mind that will really drive the horror aspect of this story home, I hope. I look forward to getting there.
Jacob is definitely a pos. That's my absolute intention so glad it's working lol. I'll admit there's more to unveil but for now it's time to finally get a peak and the good shit.
Chapter 4: Deita's Desires ;)
[Report This]Date: July 07 2023 12:37 AM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
My vibe is more like giantess torturing little ones with their feet, but I admit I'm loving it so far! The world you are creating is intriguing to say the least. Hope it continues soon, good job.
Author's Response:
Thank the heavens, because I'll absolutely assure you that torturing with feet is COMING SOON! Deita will likely be the first character to be used for giantess/tiny interactions. I was going for Camilla and Alicia first, but the story adapted differently. I'm almost done setting the stage with the MC's and the world building, so after chapter three we should start diving into the sadistic pleasures of the tiny victims at the hands of their cruel slaveowners.
While I personally enjoy gruesome deaths and torture, I'm going to play it safe at first because I want this story to be enjoyable for all. As I progress, I'll be releasing side chapters that involve the main story but from an alternate perspective to appease certain kinks in the giantess fetish to make sure everyone gets their slice of cake :)
Chapter three should be released very soon! Tonight!
[Report This]Date: July 06 2023 9:30 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Continuing to go well so far!
And while some people and stories do have M/f, even if its not the name of the sit or whats common, thats pretty much entirely up ot you if you want it. But F/f and F/m are all good (plus of course F/ff,F/fm, FF/f, FF/m,FF/fm, and FF/ff).
Personaly recommend wedge shoes for shrunk/tiny dealing, containment/transport (wedge heels give the space to out them in and can act just as much as a wall as non high heels), a large sole/surface area for crushing (like cities or the crowds) which also allows far much better walking stability then most heels (bonus of interest: https://youtu.be/igYwEFN19og).
Plus will have to learn if Jacob’s power worked on inanimate objects, or what other rules apply to it, the shrunken durability, such as range, size control(as in it is a set size or can he make someone 3 inch or one inch if he wanted), undoing it, or even trying the opposite. We shall have to see.
And the only feedback is just formatting, having it double spaced every line can make some sentence kinda janky, like a whole new sentence is starting but its still the last sentence. Easy enough its just to have the sentences or immediately related on clumped more together, the paragraphs can be separated. Almost the opposite problem of the wall of text, its spread out. After that its whatever formatting feels/looks good to you. But that’s literally the only complaint, and there are fare greater formatting and writing errors that can happen.
Could recomend 3 Youtube channels that might be interesting for writing, get into s mental framework to help organize and write, but this is already a long review (thought I have made longer) and it also doesn’t allow hyperlink outside of the site (understandable setup) so if you want just say and I’ll writ up another one with the direct youtube links).
Your the wordsmith and this is your story, keep it up!👍
Author's Response:
Regarding the formatting, I am already quite annoyed that this website doesn't copy over the format as well as in my docs. The format I am using is double spaced, single indentation as recommended by expert novelists after some studying. My transitions (the horizontal lines) was an idea I got from a great series that used such a method to transition character perspectives in a single chapter.
However, I quickly learned that copying/pasting the format over to giantessworld makes it look like a wall of text and very clunky, so rest assured I've already decided to remedy this issue in further chapters. I'll probably fix the first two chapters this weekend, but for now I want to keep grinding the chapters out because I have a very clear direction with the story.
I had a feeling someone was going to say something, I was right, so please be happy to know I was definitely aware of the problem! This website is definitely not keen with the formatting and it shows, so I'll be double spacing my paragraphs in addition to double line spacing to make sure the readers don't get a headache trying to read my content with fluidity.
Thank you for the feedback and I'm glad you are enjoying it! The next chapter is aimed to be released today actually and will finally host some 1on1 F/f content. The following chapter is planned to be the continuation of the fate of Alicia in the hands of Camilla. I'm very excited.
Date: July 06 2023 5:57 PM Title: ~Volume I~ Chapter 1 - Prologue
Well, so far you have done very well at creating a world and brining us along in the journey. I think there is so much potential in your story and look forward to seeing how you build the world.