[Report This]Date: January 28 2025 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 3 - The Ashen Peak
I enjoyed this!
I'm not the biggest traditional fantasy reader, but your style of descriptive writing managed to set up this world nicely in a short amount of time. This goes for the smut as well, which is descriptive without being excessive. And the way you mixed in the emotions provided some nice contrast to highlight the sex.
I also quite enjoyed the character dynamics, Daniel being able to see past Zevna's "tough" facade, yet still accepting her for it, is really cute and a good way to have them get closer.
The only criticisms I have is that A) While I understand they need to be there for the quest, aside from Andrew, the side characters feel a bit pointless, and idk if it would be worth taking time away from the main couple to develop them.
And B) Some of the dialogue reads a bit odd, I think it may be the colloquialisms in this deeply fantasy setting, though that may be a personal thing.
Overall, I would definitely say the story is worth continuing if you want. The two plotlines(the quest and Daniel/Zevna's relationship) are both interesting, and you already have me thinking about where they could go next.