“Is it because I’m overwhelming?”

This is an incredible line of dialogue. Without any description of her tone or inflection, I can almost literally hear the playful brattiness with which it's being delivered. It's a confidence bordering on condescension but with an inviting love at the same time. It's hard to describe exactly what I hear in my mind as I read that line, but I can absolutely hear it!

And while Quinn's actions immediately after saying this fall in line with that tone in my head, I feel like they're more an affirmation than something necessary to understand the intention of her words. Those words just jumped off the page as I read them, hence two whole paragraphs of me harping on them!

You also did an amazing job of having the reader feel Bailey's new size. In particular, the way you described how Quinn's torso was like a table for him (and the sensual yet casual way she shifted him around up there a couple paragraphs later) and how he felt like he was a schoolbag for her during the piggyback ride really provided a good mental image of the size difference (and, again, the graphic at the end of the chapter is always nice as well).

I really like how, despite our budding couple just beginning to explore what this new relationship means for them, there was still plenty of that sibling dynamic sprinkled in throughout this chapter. The banter between them, like the way she teases him about being unfit or the back-and-forth about him being jockey-sized, feels like it's between a brother and sister, very different from the way you would expect a new couple to address each other. There's just a familiarity and comfort between them that just isn't there with normal couples.

But then, there are those flirty moments as well, like Quinn asking Bailey if she makes him feel small, only to say that she thinks he's cute. Or the way she breaks down his defenses at the end of the chapter (which, again, incredibly well done!). This stuff is well blended with that sense of familiarity mentioned above, giving the them a unique presence together.

So Bailey's need to take things nice and slow is clearly driven by the lingering doubts he has about the change in his relationship with Quinn. It's obvious from the start of the chapter how desperate he is for her, but, even after letting her know how he feels (well, mostly, but it might take a bit coaxing before Quinn can pry those deep, dark fantasies out of him) I still think he's a little unsure of how to proceed. And I think that the way he got excited over reliving that memory of piggybacking on Quinn's back shows that a part of him still wants to keep things how they were before, or at least is afraid of losing that if things move forward between them.

I know he said midway through the chapter that he had no fear of taking this next, sexual step, but I feel like if you have to tell yourself something like that, then it can't be completely true. Also, almost in the same thought, he notes how he's "on the verge of having a sexual relationship with my stepsister," with that language still conveying, at least in my mind, that this is still a big deal for him. Not to mention that he said that his "walls were getting thinner and thinner" the more time he spent with Quinn, and that she was breaking holes through them. The fact that there were walls and that she was able to make opening in them with her gradually elevated teasing throughout the day makes clear that there was some hold up in the first place.

And I love Quinn's response to that hold up. She backs off, "abiding by your rules." Again, like last chapter, she doesn't come at Bailey too hard with the size-related teasing, although she does pepper some in here and there early on, only to ramp it up when she finally makes her move. Instead, for most of the chapter, she's sweet and uses her much larger body to love on him rather than tease him (even though you can tell she really wants to let all of that sexual mischievousness out). The way she took him into her body when he was struggling in the water is a good example of this.

However, after a while, she decided to chip away at his willpower with a soft, gentle aggression, I think due in equal parts to her own waning willpower and her frustration at the nice and slow approach.

But holy shit, for him not lasting very long, that hand job scene was intense! It was so satisfying to see her break him down and even use his own words, "Nice and slow, right?" against him like that. And, like I said above, the way she laid on this size teasing so thick as she was working him (especially when she realized how close he was) was just perfect. And the implication of what's coming at the end of the chapter ... I just hope Bailey can keep her properly fed.

Not only that, but I enjoyed how you emphasized his perspective of Quinn as she stood up in that last paragraph. I'm not sure how small you plan on the virus making Bailey, but perhaps this was a bit of foreshadowing as well? I know it's not in the size tag for this story, but I, for one, would welcome a pocket-sized Bailey, and I think that Quinn would as well (and maybe even Bailey himself, if those dreams of his are anything to go by)!

Lastly, I love the small payoff from the conversation Quinn and Bailey had in their childhood days back in chapter 1, with his whole hand now actually only being as big as her palm alone. It wasn't a huge thing, but I enjoy little touches like that.