[Report This]Date: March 26 2025 3:12 AM Title: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
Alright, I was able to read another chapter tonight!
I like the tone set by the opening scene with Ada. Duncan has been pretty accepting of his reality, and this is the first real look we're getting of him getting frustrated with his lack of physical agency. I have a feeling that as he gets more intimate with Callie, this will be a more common occurrence - not necessarily Duncan losing his cool, but him coming up against barriers that he can't overcome with effort.
Great introduction to date-mode Callie. I'm glad she's letting Duncan treat her. For same size relationships this could result in a power imbalance, or cause friction over financials, but given the physical power imbalance, this is a good way for them to even things out on a different scale. I'm glad Callie is conscious of the expense, but still willing to let Duncan treat her. Also, poor Alyssia is the but of so many jokes that I'm glad she got some of her revenge last chapter, and got a great start to a passionate night of self-guided relaxation. Also, the chauffeur's uniform is an excellent gag. Absolutely love it, especially when she points to dinky Duncan and claims he "forced" her to wear it.
The car scene was delightfully spicy. I know it's not the fist time you've used it in this story, but referring to her breasts as "girlflesh" still feels like a new descriptor to me. It's self-descriptive, yet exotic, and I find it strangely evocative. Absolutely love it, and I cannot promise I won't steal it at some point. Still, that wasn't the only spicy bit, and Callie's unquestioning determination to "fuck Duncan's brains out" is a promise I fully intended to see fulfilled. I was thinking to myself, "there better not be a bait and switch, dammit!"
The setting for the dinner is absolutely perfect, and I'm glad you managed to incorporate the entire cast into the date. I'm also really glad that Ada is officially part of the group; she's not just physically present, but she's been accepted by everyone. I also want to mention that I love Monica's use of manila folders for sensitive information almost as much as I hate what you do with them. The teasing, the foreshadowing, the mystery all up in my face! It is not okay! Well, I mean, it makes the story and the reveal just that much better, so I won't count it against you, but know that those folders you use grant you great power. Continue to handle such scenes with the great responsibility they deserve.
The discussion over the entre gave us a nice look at Duncan's past, but there's something going on with the Brenadines and Duncan that just isn't jiving for me. You have dropped a bunch of hints and left clear indicators for this, so I feel like I'm just following along thus far with the slow unveil as intended. If I had to make a leap of story logic forward, I would assume that the boy whose injury was blamed on Kristie was really injured by Duncan while he was with the Brenadines. What's not clear to me is if Duncan is actually a blood relation of the Brenadines as well, but I see it as a possibility with the mysterious past before Duncan turned 4. I'm also wondering if the injured boy (who I believe to be a Brenadine) or one of his family members targeted Duncan and Kristie as revenge for the incident. That I do feel is rather likely, though I could see them being targeted as a matter of convenience, rather than the shrinking tech being developed specifically for Duncan and Kristie, and whomever else might end up affected.
Sorry, right, this is a review. I'll take off my tinfoil hat now, and stop wondering if one or more of the girls will end up shrunk, with the new dynamic shaking up Callie and Duncan's relationship before the end.
So, right, where were we? Oh, dessert! Oh my god, the chocolate fountain was an inspiration! I love Callie's seductively devious mind. The two of them are an awesome couple, and this scene bares that fact to the world (or Monica at least) in all its sexy glory. I love how well you direct Callie's use of her entire mouth, and how Callie makes use of her understanding that Duncan has a taste for rougher play. Callie's power, the sensuous descriptions, and Duncan's perseverance made this scene hot as hell, but I think my favorite part was the confluence of a flustered Callie, a cool cat Duncan, and a wide-eyed Monica when she caught them in the act. "Theck pleath" shall forever be associated with this scene. Goodness, i was so happy with this chapter, that was a great way to end it, ready to pick up where they left off in the next chapt- er...
HOLY HANNAH, IT'S NOT OVER YET!
I may have yelled that aloud, much to the displeasure of my neighbor in the apartment next door, but holy shit did Callie and Duncan hit the bedroom running! Everything from the action to the pillow talk to the full on couple's banter was on point, and I laughed my ass off at the reference to the couch incident (which I suspect was not a 1 time thing...) Once again, I have to praise your graphic descriptions of movement and details, and I love how much agency Duncan had with pleasuring Callie, rather than being used as a masturbatory aid. Great scene, 14 out of 10. And then to end it with both of them satisfied, content, and best of all, at peace? *Chef's kiss* Simply magnificent!
Date: February 18 2025 1:56 AM Title: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
The date was cute! It was really nice to see all of their friends come together for them, and that Duncan still has the ability to impress Callie at this size (with some help).
The chapter as a whole felt a little slice-of-life? Very formulaic. They plan the date, they go to the date, they have sex. The story doesn't advance much, but their relationship did develop a little.
Not that it's a bad formula to follow! The sex scene was worth waiting all these chapters. It was great to see Duncan conquer his past trauma.
[Report This]Date: October 10 2024 12:34 PM Title: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
As I look back at the entire story, there are intense imageries, forever etched in my brain, that’ve keep reminding me how engaging and charming the story is. 1) Callie's face coming into view during Duncan’s video call to the medical scientist. 2) Ada’s awkward mouth-play. 3) Callie grabbing Kristie for the first time while tempering her anger. 4) Callie struggling with her choice of going to the club or not.
Wanna know what imagery imprinted in my mind in this chapter? Huh? Guess … It was when Duncan slathered chocolate on the tip of Callie’s nose and her jokingly saying, “You little shit.” *swoon* Legitimately brought a smile to my face. And I know that’s special, because GW stories don’t make me smile until after I … Ahh, never mind.
After reading the chocolate fountain bit, I get the impression you’re not into mouth-play? Kinda just skimmed through it, huh? Lol, got ‘em! The mouth scene was amazing. Callie just going for it, and dipping her man in chocolate and then giving him two explosive climaxes, was great to see and well deserved for both characters. And it kept going! In detail! I treasured every moment and was thrilled when Callie dipped him for one last time and shoved his entire being into her mouth. So good!
I shouldn’t gloss over the romantic dinner. That’s a new one for me. I’ve been in this community all my life, and have been reading stories for the last two decades straight. I’ve seen nothing like this before. That dinner was romantic asf, made all the better with sous chef Ada at the kitchen’s helm. I think what would’ve made things better, for me, is if Duncan threw that ball of dough at Ada, just to see it harmlessly bounce off her, lol. I, too, cook a lot and have used Food Network and YouTube as places of inspiration. Needless to say, I felt a genuine connection to Duncan here and was rooting for the guy. His ability to impress the fuck out of Callie was practically me impressing the fuck out of Callie, haha.
Already made some jokes with you through DM about the last scene in this chapter. Something I want to point out is Callie’s comment about normal-sized dicks not gonna do it for her anymore. Imma push horny-brain out of the way, because I want to talk about this casual line, that might hold more weight than first impressed upon. IF Duncan were given the option to grow back to normal … would he do it? What would Callie’s reaction be? I mean, he can tele-work and provide his fair share of funds to the family. He and Callie have proven that, not only, size doesn’t matter, it heightens their lovemaking. So, what now? If he were to grow back, how would the dynamic of their relationship change? A fucking lot it would. Not personality-wise, but they obviously share something unique that comes with the extreme size difference. It’s a real thinker.
Dunky™ huh? This is easily the best nickname for him I’ve heard yet. Dunky™ and Callie, sittn’ on a tree. F, U, C, K, I, N, G. First comes tongue’ing, then comes insert’ing. I like it. Love this couple! With Dunky™ and Callie cemented, I’m super curious where this story will go. My attention goes back to Kristie, and now I wonder if her history has anything to do with the shrinking. I wonder if Kristie was the actual intended target, and not Dunky™. Given her reaction to her manilla file and the secrecy surrounding her family, this is where my mind is. But anyway, I can’t wait to read more about Dunky™, Callie, Ada, Monica, and Kristie. I got them all, right? Yeah, I’m sure I did!
Author's Response:
Shit! I didn't expect you to actually trademark Dunk ... that nickname. It's too good, though, so I I guess I have to figure out how to transfer those star-based royalty payments your way. Damn it!
Oh, and you forgot Alyssia in your list at the end there. That was an accidental oversight, I'm sure. Maybe I need to include Aly more so that she's not so forgettable? Oh, I know! Maybe I can write a single vore scene for the story and have her do the eating! Sounds great, right? What do you think?
In all seriousness, though, I do love how certain scenes (and not always the most obvious ones) stick with you. When you told me about how her poking her head into Duncan's video call, I loved that so much! It was such a small part in the grand scheme of things, but it's great how things like that can have such an impact. And, believe it or not, the chocolate on the nose scene was what I would have guessed (if, you know, you would have actually given me time to guess!). I felt that same kind of vibe when I wrote that scene, and I'm so happy that someone singled it out! I'm not sure why you didn't "never mind" at that part, though. Do you not have a chocolate nose fetish?
As always, it means so much to hear any compliment relating to mouthplay coming from you, as I know that's your thing (well, the first part of your thing, anyway; can't get to the stomach without going through the mouth, after all) and you've provided some fantastic vore and mouthplay scenes to never mind to (that scene in Echoes where Jen eats half the bar is one of my favorite vore scenes of all time, by the way; I don't know if I've mentioned that before). I'm glad you enjoyed all the detail and that you found that anatomy diagram to help you through it!
I love you centering in on that romantic dinner. You've never seen anything like that in the community before? That's fucking awesome! It feels great to hear that I've actually introduced something kind of new (or at least rare) with this story.
You know, I actually wrestled with the idea of Dunky (I'll start making payments now, I guess) throwing that dough ball at Ada instead of the backsplash. I agree that seeing it bounce off of her would have been a cool moment showing the scale of weakness the size disparity has left him with, but I ultimately decided that, even though he was upset, it would have been too much of a dick move for him to have thrown it at her, even if it wouldn't have hurt her (it's the thought that counts, or whatever the negative equivalent to that phrase is).
Reading that you made a legit connection to Duncan here and felt like him impressing Callie was you doing it was so satisfying, especially since a lot of giantess/shrunken man story male protagonists tend to get lost in the shuffle and come off as a bit generic at times. I really didn't want Duncan falling into that trap, and seeing a reader actually being able to relate to him is incredible!
The question of what Duncan would do if given the chance to get his size back is a good one. Before he met up with Callie, he had long since given up on the prospect of returning to normal, electing just to try and survive instead, but he started to regain hope since making/reuniting with some regular-sized friends. So, now that everything is seemingly going perfectly for him, how does he feel? I don't know if he's devoted a lot of time to thinking about that lately, which may or may not be telling in and of itself. Then again, the prospect of finally being able to hold Callie in his arms and giving her a proper kiss (and fuck) has to be appealing to, right?
I'm intrigued that you immediately went back to Kristie now that our lovely couple are finally together. Obviously I'm not going to give you a straight answer, but I will say that we'll find out more about Kristie's history in the next chapter. Whether or not that has anything to do with what happened to her (or Duncan, for that matter) remains to be seen.
[Report This]Date: October 09 2024 10:45 AM Title: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
For starters, an amuse-bouche if you will, I love the chapter title. Best word choice and use of alliteration yet.
Moving on to the hors d'oeuvres, Duncan embodying Gordon Ramsay in the kitchen with Ada was hilarious. I love their almost Ratatouille dynamic of him using her to cook his dishes (and the frustration at her not following his exact instructions. Again, hilarious.) The detail later that he learned everything from watching the food network was the cherry on the sundae and elevates this scene even further for me lol. Also, what's with the menu's crustacean theme? Did I miss/am forgetting something, or does Duncan just really like shellfish?
Now for the appetizer, the dialogue throughout this chapter was pretty much perfect. It's so sweet seeing Callie and Duncan openly in love. Like, it makes my heart hurt with sheer adorableness, I think this chapter gave me diabetes lol (which, believe it or not, is very much a compliment). There's so many good lines in this chapter it's impossible to pick out favorites (both the cute and the "Jesus, I didn't know words could be this sexy"). No, wait, I think "I'm enjoying it for the both of us" is the winner. Either that or "I didn't even get to taste it. Like, what kind of dessert is that? Looks like I'll have to try it again." Or actually, maybe it's ... No, nevermind. I'll be here all day at this rate. Also, the narration now referring to them as "his girlfriend" and "her boyfriend" is so satisfying. That's one of those elements of the slow burn that really hits hard when the time comes. Speaking of coming ...
The entree. That chocolate fountain scene. Oh Lordy, you had me tugging at my collar and fanning myself. The decision to go limb by limb was fucking choice. The levels of detail, all the things Callie can do with those lips and tongue, I couldn't believe what I was reading, like how can a human being write a scene this powerful. And then she goes in for seconds! I'd have run out of things to describe after the third limb, and you're out here running laps like it's nothing. And then the full body mouth play. Impeccable. The "Again?" after Callie missed out on the cum shot had me guffawing, like the ugliest laughing. That was so good! This whole scene was so good!
And yet here we are, at the main fucking course. In your most recent Twin Sizes review, you complimented my depiction of scale between Heather and Javi, so I need to return the favor because you fucking nailed it with Callie lowering her panties with Duncan in them. A detail I really love in mixed-size sex is that at any point the big can make themselves unreachable to their partner. It's a dynamic unique to size smut, where one partner can be completely cut off at the other's whims and have no way to grab and pull them back. I don't know why, that shit's just super hot to me. Also, the way you describe her wobbliness as she enters the room, her buckling onto the floor, her arching at orgasm and how all that was like a roller coaster to Duncan was excellent. Later, when business is finished and he's lying on her chest and he can feel her chuckling and laughing and raising with her chest, yeah, you absolutely nailed depicting that sense of scale here.
And finally, dessert. Dunky is a cute nickname. Best one he's gotten yet and so quintessentially "Callie". I'm so happy for these two, and I love how Duncan's size is seen here as a positive and not a constraint. I've long wondered what a "happy ending" for this story would look like. See, if this were a traditional story, one would expect Duncan returning to normal size would be the obvious conclusion (like Beast returning to human form at the end of Beauty and the Beast). But this is a story written by a size fetishist for size fetishists, so that's not really a happy ending by our standards, so I'm very curious with what you have in store and Callie's comments about how he ruined regular dicks for her adds some delicious wrinkles to that. Also, "It kinda smelled like my couch in there" might actually be my favorite line. How many times has she masturbated with his couch, and why is the image of that so hot to me?
If I could give this chapter 11 (or six?) stars, I would. It more than lived up to the hype. Great job. The amount of details throughout were phenomenal. Like, every other sentence I was hit by "I never would have thought of that!" So good. My review can't do it justice. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the compliment of the chapter title. It's my favorite, too!
Also, I love the "theme" of your review here!
I'm glad you enjoyed the kitchen scene so much! It was so much fun to write. I wanted to show some of the frustration Duncan felt at not being able to handle something so important to him himself (the date, not the cooking on its own, of course). He spent most of his time tiny just trying to survive (and thus not thinking about his limitations) and most of the previous month-plus with Callie helping him find ways to still feel normal (I mean, they even built a fucking gym!), so, surprisingly, this was the first time he's really felt like his size was holding him back. But yeah, his whole interaction with Ada here was pretty funny, too! I also liked the idea that he was self-taught through TV, and it gave me a chance to delve a little deeper into Duncan's past.
As for all the shellfish, once I decided on lobster ravioli, it was just a matter of figuring out what paired best with it. Crustaceans beget crustaceans, apparently!
Complimenting my dialogue always means so much to me, as I'm really picky about writing it and even then, I'm not always happy with how it comes out. And seeing you debate which line is your favorite from the chapter is so gratifying for me to read! So thank you so much for highlighting that here!
And I agree, seeing Duncan and Callie just being free and open with their feelings for each other is so awesome to see! I know you said in a response to one of my review of Twin Sizes that you're not really into the slow burn, so I appreciate you sticking with this one and finding it so rewarding now. You pointing out how hard-hitting something as simple as them referring to each other as girlfriend and boyfriend can be makes me so happy! I doubt I've converted you to "the burn," but again, it's great to see you buying into it here!
Also, you're welcome for the diabetes! Happy to help!
The chocolate fountain scene was "the scene," one out of the three I envisioned before starting the story and the one that made me decide that I had to try and put this thing to paper (metaphorically, of course). And, while I appreciate you saying so, I was most certainly not "running laps out here like it's nothing." That shit was hard, and it makes me feel so good to hear such high praise about the scene! It was so tricky trying to not be redundant and make every part of that scene feel different and special. And I can't even find the words to express my gratitude for this line:
"I couldn't believe what I was reading, like how can a human being write a scene this powerful."
Holy fuck do I appreciate you saying that, especially given how big a fan of yours I am. That means the world to me, so thank you so much!
I'm glad you found Callie missing the money shot the first time so funny, too! She was going to enjoy her dessert, dammit!
I agree 100 percent on the "make themselves unreachable to their partners" thing. I love that particular type of teasing. I thought that was the perfect way for Callie to "punish" Duncan for being a bit mischievous there with the overstimulation (that'll teach her to not get him off twice in a row, right? Wait, why is that a bad thing again?). It also gave me a chance to emphasize how long Callie's legs are (I'm a leg guy). But yeah, making him ride slowly down her legs, using her panties as an agonizingly slow elevator, was so great when I pictured it in my head that I had to find a way to include it in the chapter. And thanks for the compliment on conveying her scale, especially with the examples you cited with her wobbling, falling to her knees, and arching her back as she came; I'm glad Callie's size as compared to Duncan shined through during all that. I'm always wondering if I'm doing enough to sell this aspect, and you saying this makes me feel so much better about it here.
I wish I could take credit for Dunky, but the reviewer above you already has it trademarked apparently! I do agree that it fits Callie so well, though.
I also often wonder what a happy ending looks like in these size fetish stories, and it can be a hard question to answer sometimes. I find it interesting that a couple of people, yourself included, really focused in on that "ruined dicks" line. Was that foreshadowing or just a throwaway line? Who knows (well, other than me)?
Thank you, thank you, thank you for catching that couch line! I wasn't sure if people would remember that bit from the previous chapter, but I thought it was pretty great. It's both funny and really, really hot, when you think about it (as your questions implies you have)!
I'm absolutely thrilled that you think this chapter surpassed the hype. I was a bit worried that I was building things up only to have this chapter be a bit of a letdown, so this means a lot to hear. Thank you again for your incredibly generous review! You may not feel like it did the chapter justice, but I feel like it did and then some!
[Report This]Date: October 07 2024 10:24 PM Title: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
It's not just satisfying to finally see Callie and Duncan fuck, it's satisfying to finally see them enjoy have an official relationship. Every time the narration referred to Callie as Duncan's girlfriend or vice versa, my heart melted.
Wise choice to not start off with the sex scene straight away, because as enjoyable as they can be, there are many other ways to write intimacy between characters in this fetish that can be just as good. Not everyone will agree, but in this case, Duncan and Callie having a romantic dinner together is just so cute and enjoyable! It sets the mood very well.
I like that we got some more details of Duncan's somewhat tragic backstory. It's sad, but it's not too sad. Strikes the right balance and is realistic enough. And I know it will be obvious to anyone who's read 9 chapters and 100 000 words of this story, but it does definitely not have the "male protagonist is too generic" problem that other stories are said to suffer from. Duncan and Callie are every bit as interesting and compelling as each other. It's one of those things this story does so well you don't even notice it.
When Callie tells Duncan about her family, however, it's sort of glossed over, and I presume this is because we already read about it in Chapter 3. I think it would have been nice to see exactly what she said to Duncan anyway, just because I like these characters' conversations and interactions so much. Hard to believe I'm asking for more when the chapter is so long already, you've spoiled your readers lol.
Alyssia dressed as a chauffeur is quite funny, and so were her interactions with Duncan and Callie. It's nice that she can not only put her little rivalry with Duncan aside, but go all the way in supporting him. I also particularly like the contrast in Duncan thinking it's rude of Alyssia to ask if he and Callie are going to fuck, but then, later on, going so far as to have sex with Callie in the car while Alyssia's driving.
All other stories about dipping tinies in chocolate are now obsolete.
While writing smut, there's the persistent issue of what words to use. Either they sound too clinical, or too vulgar or too silly, etc. I'm not normally very sensitive about that kind of thing, but the word "girlflesh" really rubs me the wrong way. Everything else was great, except for that one word. It reminds me of cannibalism, and not in a good way lol. Maybe the word "femcum" too, I don't like that one either.
But I love everything else, and I certainly see why this is your favorite chapter so far. Even the ending is sweet, with no unexpected troubles thrown at the characters. Just some relaxing, peaceful sleep.
I have to say though, Callie's comment about not being able to go back to normal-sized dicks makes me wonder if Duncan will eventually get his size back or not. Especially the way his reaction is described: "It made any lingering doubts he may have had about his size not being good enough for her melt away for good." If this story is going to have around 12 chapters, then we're getting closer and closer to the ending. I am very interested in whatever happens next!
Author's Response:
This review was so enjoyable to read. You hit on a lot of stuff that I've been trying to do/set up for pretty much the whole story, and it was truly satisfying to see that some of these things stood out to you!
I love that you're into not just the smutty stuff but are actually enjoying just Callie and Duncan talking or even them thinking of each other as boyfriend and girlfriend. It makes me feel really good about how I built their relationship. So thanks for saying all that!
I was also thrilled with your comments about building up to the smut, starting off with the prep and dinner beforehand, instead of jumping right to the "good stuff." You using the words cute and enjoyable to describe the dinner made my day, too!
Thank you saying that Duncan isn't too generic of a male protagonist. I try really hard to make him stand out and be a little different, as, especially in this fetish, it's easy for guy main characters to kind of get lost in the shuffle and just be there to give the giantess someone to play off of (or with). That comment about it being done so well that you don't even notice it was a pretty high compliment. Finding that balance of making Duncan stand out but not obnoxiously so can be tricky sometimes, and I'm not always quite sure I've pulled it off. So you basically saying that this feels natural enough that it blends into the larger story really made me smile!
Also, I like that you found his story "sad but not too sad" and "somewhat tragic." I didn't want this to be over the top, but I wanted it to make the reader feel something at the same time. Also, I've known some foster kids and seen the way some foster homes take advantage of them the way a lot of them did Duncan, so I was happy to call a little bit of attention to something that I find pretty disgusting, even if it's not technically abuse.
Yeah, I figured people already got an idea of what Callie's family life was like during that call back in chapter three. It means a lot to me that you actually wanted to hear that part and just enjoyed them hanging out and talking, though. By that point, I pictured everyone screaming, "Get to the fucking already!" so I appreciate that you care about the characters that much!
Alyssia's rivalry with Duncan is a playful one. I think I've said this a bunch, but in case I haven't, I kind of pictured Monica to have something of a big sister dynamic with Duncan and Alyssia a little sister dynamic with him. Not that I'm saying they're family or anything but rather in how they view Duncan (i.e. Monica acting protectively and Alyssia acting a little bratty toward him but really caring about him at the same time). So of course she was going to do what she could to help Duncan out, especially if it led to opportunities to tease him and along the way! She wants this to succeed for him and will do what she can to make sure it does, but when there's an opening that won't mess things up for him? Oh, she's going to give him some shit!
In Duncan's defense, he didn't actually have to face Alyssia in that hypocritical moment on his part! He left that to his girlfriend, who was in too blissful a state to be too embarrassed at the time!
Sorry for ruining all other chocolate tiny dipping stories for you. I swear I didn't mean to! But thanks for the awesome compliment!
As for those words you don't care for, your first sentence nails the reason why I used them. It is tricky to find the right word to use and, almost as importantly, not overuse. Girlflesh and femcum obviously don't bother me like they do you, but I can see where you're coming from here. I can't promise I won't use them again if I get desperate (we're certainly not done with smut between our two protagonists yet!), but you've made me think about this.
I wanted to end the chapter on a sweet note, rather than throw a twist their way or just end on pure smut. I'm glad this resonated with you!
I can't comment on the issue of Duncan's long term future or what size he'll be in said future. Please direct all questions to my nonexistent attorney. I am glad those two lines got you thinking, though.
[Report This]Date: October 05 2024 11:05 AM Title: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
Man I love this story, was so worth the buildup
Author's Response:
I really appreciate your continued support! You saying that this was worth the buildup is probably the highest compliment you could pay to this chapter. I have to admit that, after all that waiting, people were just going to go, "That's it?" once this chapter hit. So thanks for letting me know it worked for you!
[Report This]Date: October 04 2024 8:01 PM Title: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
This was amazing, 11/10, 6/5 stars 110 % thank you for finally bringing Callie and Duncan Together the unresolved sexual tension was agonizing. Very much enjoyed this
Author's Response:
Damn! It looks like I broke the scale! Thank you for your extremely generous rating of the chapter!
You're welcome on finally bringing our two leads together. Thanks for sticking it out! You saying that the wait was agonizing makes me happy, though, as it means I did my job! I'm glad the payoff was worth it for you!
[Report This]Date: October 03 2024 9:01 PM Title: Callie vs. the Delectable Date
That was the longest date scene I've ever gotten to read!
First off, it was interesting to learn about Duncan's life in the foster system. He mentioned he had a little sister, and I immediately wondered if that might be someone we get to see eventually or if his latest foster family won't be a part of the story. Either way, I always find it a fun thing in stories when a sister gets to see her sibling, related or not, in a tiny state.
I'm curious to what it exactly was about the info that had Monica all shaken up. Seems like things will get pretty serious now that the date is over, and Callie and Duncan are finally together. I'm wondering if any of the girls will fall victim to the shrinking before they get to resolve things too, since there's still that threat looming over them, not to mention Monica and Alyssia are snooping around quite a bit lately. But I'm just theorizing here.
Lastly, I hope Kristie will learn to become a better person out of all of this somehow. She's done terrible things, but as noted in one of the chapters, there was a reason why she pushes people's buttons so much. I hope that will all come to light too at some point!
Great chapter as always! Very much looking forward to see where the story goes from here and how they'll deal with the person that shrunk Duncan and Kristie.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I really wanted to take my time and set things up with the date before we got into the smut. I figured people have been waiting this long, what's another 4,000 words or so. I'm choosing to interpret that exclamation point at the end of your sentence to mean that this was a good thing. No one can tell me different!
I probably shouldn't comment too much on Duncan's last foster family either way, as leaving it open rather than confirming or denying their involvement kind of ruins the little mystery I've got going on. I find it interesting that you were immediately drawn to his foster sister, though, and I can agree that there can be something wholesome and sweet (or not, based on a lot of the stories on this site) about a tiny dude confronted with a foster, step, or blood-related sister. I mean, the teasing possibilities alone are endless!
I will say that what Monica saw in that folder will come out in the next chapter. It just made more sense to me to tease it here and build up the reveal for later. We'll get some more snippets of plot in the next couple chapters, but there's still a lot of smut I want to get to. I've been building this up for so long, I want to stretch that payoff out a little bit. You're not wrong about that looming threat, though.
Like with the Brenadines (Duncan's foster family), I'm not going to say too much about Kristie here. I will confirm that we'll figure out exactly what makes her tick at some point, though.
Thank you for the review and the kind words! As much as I enjoyed your story, I'm glad you're still enjoying mine as well. I guess we'll have to see about whoever it was that shrunk Duncan and/or Kristie, won't we?