Hi I was reading this story and thought it's a nice and fun story. And the dynamic between Angie and Benjamin is super cute to see written out. And the part where they talk about the dip scene in the latest chapter and Angie saying how there is nothing between a Girl and their appetite, is that perhaps a hint of what is to come in the story in the future and the hijinx of Ben being between a Girl and her food.

Ps. I hope you are having a lovely day when you read this, as you are a very talented writer

That's absolutely fair! That's why I'd even want a Maggie sequence to be totally nice and gentle. Like maybe he gets an employee discount for family or something and knows how hard she's been working and wants to have something nice for her because of her support and work or something 

And no worries on the slower pace, especially if it's consistent. A good build up and anticipation of new chapters is always great 

Hey, you're back! And with a story that's already pretty intriguing at that!

First off, I have to say that writing this one in second person is a bold choice. If you don't mind me asking, I'm curious what led you to go that route with this one.

But me asking that doesn't mean I think it was a bad decision. Actually, despite the reputation second person perspective has, Benjamin already has a person feel as the main character, and I empathize with him pretty deeply even this early in the story. It's awesome that he's so willing to help his family, and he's even willing to do something a lot of people would find degrading in order to give them a real third income ($22 an hour is ridiculous for a high school student!). What a good dude.

I also really enjoy how Angie contrasts with him. Unlike him, she's from a well-off family (at least as far as Benjamin knows), and that makes me curious how she would react to his situation (even just the financial part and not the size one) if she knew. And unlike your last story, these two have an adversarial relationship, so the dynamic between them is going to be very different and should be fun to explore.

But adversarial doesn't necessarily mean spiteful. That line about Angie briefly showing hurt at Benjamin's unintentionally harsh tone already shows that she, at the very least, cares what he thinks about things. Was she hurt because he came off as mean? Or did that line about responsibility cut deeper than Benjamin realized?

I'm also really curious how spoiled or surprisingly unspoiled Angie is going to turn out to be. Obviously she's going to be visiting Tiny Treatments at some point, and Benjamin will get to see a side of her he doesn't normally get to see, one way or another. I'm also left wondering what the rules are for clients as far as treatment of the workers is concerned. Is there a certain degree of "latitude" there, or are things strict in terms of respecting the tiny workers? And what would Benjamin do if a certain blonde-haired rival tried to bend the rules a little (I'm not saying I think she will, necessarily, but there's some fun that could be had there!).

I know the anonymity of your tiny main characters is important to you, and I think having the company protect that for them is a cool angle to use for this. Although that last line for the chapter seems to imply that someone is going to find out before we get too deep into the story, I think. Because someone at school finding out wouldn't mean much if there wasn't the concern of Benjamin being exposed wasn't present (and this itself could lead to some fun same-size teasing situations, as well as someone taking advantage of Benjamin's work hours if he annoys them during the school day. God, there are a lot of possibilities with this!).

Oh, and Morgan sounds fun from what we saw of her. I have a feeling we'll be seeing more of her.

Excellent start! I'm really looking forward to where you go with this one!