Too much exposition is a problem I always face when trying to write a story, so I admire those who can write concisely, directly, without compromising the quality of the storytelling and its characters. And April is such a endearing character. You just can’t hate her because she is not evil, she is just stupid. An idiot, but not a bad sister. She thanks Billy for caring for her feet and, as I said before, I think that is the point: she is just too happy and elated her brother seems to like her and especially her feet (elated… here is another word I think April would strugle with kkkkk).

I think if Billy just try to relax and think clearly he might enjoy bonding with April. Didn’t April fanced herself a princess? And didn’t he observed she isn’t very good at taking care of her foot? He could play along and offer to clean and paint her toes, to be, not just any servant... her feet's knight/hero! Doing it maybe hard but it would make her feet less smelly while also making April even more happy with him and, therefore, more inclined to listen.

Again, thanks for writing and sharing!

PS.: some work came up and I might not be able to comment as much TT_TT 

Author's Response:

Thanks for another great review!

April may be slightly more evil than you think, so I hope the planned upcoming chapters don't turn you away from the story haha. I do like this dynamic though and if I write stories in the future I might return to it because it's more fun to write than I thought.

No worries if you don't get around to leaving further comments, I just hope you are able to keeping following along with the story when you have time and enjoy what comes next.