[Report This]Date: March 17 2009 8:32 AM Title: Chapter 20 - Escape
AWESOME! A slam-bang conclusion; just the way I like a hard-boiled mystery to end. And, while I'm not surprised that Jayne got away, I have to wonder about Angel's disappearance.
I mean; I'd like to think that she was further shrunken, to micro size, by Leila's re-enlargement. What FULL METAL ALCHEMIST calls "equivalent exchange." But, in the immortal words of jazz legend "Fats" Waller:
"One never knows. Do one?"
[Report This]Date: March 17 2009 8:23 AM Title: Chapter 19 - Chiaroscuro
I don't what caused the backfire, either. But, if O.H. doesn't complain, I won't either.
[Report This]Date: March 17 2009 8:18 AM Title: Chapter 18 - Face to Face
As Norm Crosby might say: "The fit is about to hit the shan!"
[Report This]Date: March 17 2009 8:14 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Disaster
(Referencing previous review)
Ah! That's why.
[Report This]Date: March 17 2009 8:08 AM Title: Chapter 16 - Ascent
Why am I suddenly thinking about frying pans and fires? ;-D
[Report This]Date: March 16 2009 3:03 PM Title: Chapter 19 - Chiaroscuro
THat was great! I really appriciate your haste to get the story finished, that the scale isn't that much of a problem. I also like bad people to get their comuppance, and this story does that very well. Good job sir. If it's any consilation, you get my seal of approval.
Zalrus IX's Seal of Approval
Author's Response: :D Thanks. It's not quite over yet. But it's a good spot to take a break.
[Report This]Date: March 16 2009 10:41 AM Title: Chapter 17 - Disaster
Good story.
Date: March 15 2009 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Atonement
To answer your question, I don't know. I think she really means it, but if cornered, she will probably act like she says Nicole will do in this situaltion. But, to be honest, I don't think she has a choice. She can't go back, and that's that. So it isn't logical... but niether are people. So I don't think so, but I won't be suprised otherwise
I like where this story is going. A gold star for you.
Tighten up the scale and I hope to see you work soon.
Zalrus IX
Author's Response: She's definitely caught between a rock and hard place. The question is whether or not she'll be willing to risk her life for absolute freedom or sell out our protagonist (again) for survival (would that even work?). To be honest, I haven't decided yet. I need to think about her character some more and hopefully let *her* make the call. She is the title character, after all.
[Report This]Date: March 15 2009 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 15 - Atonement
*Reviewer does imitation of "Arnold Horshack" from WELCOME BACK, KOTTER...including frantic waving of upraised right arm.*
"Oh! Oh-oh! Oh-oh! I trust her! I trust her!"
[Report This]Date: March 15 2009 7:57 PM Title: Chapter 14 - Clearing the Air
Sounds like Angel's groups always have to have a ruling triumvirate. Like the Witches in MACBETH, and certain goddesses in pre-Greek mythology.
Ah, well1 Off to the last chapter pro tem.
[Report This]Date: March 15 2009 9:22 AM Title: Chapter 13 - Opportunity Knocks
Very Good story. I enjoyed it immensly and hope that you update it as fast as you have. One thing, though. Are you sure on your scale? I think two inches may be too large for you size comparisons, but mabye not. All in all, one of the storyies that I acually want to read more of. Bood job, sir!
Author's Response: A good point about the scale, I'm not sure, really. This is my first attempt at a GTS story, so I wouldn't be surprised if I make some scaling mistakes. I'll take another look, but I am also very open to suggestion. Thanks for reading.
[Report This]Date: March 14 2009 11:34 PM Title: Chapter 10 - Angel
One word: ewwwwwwww!
Author's Response: LOL! Yes, "Angel" is definitely the one to avoid. That may be the apex of the graphic chapters... maybe.
[Report This]Date: March 14 2009 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 9 - Post Mortem
Hmmm! Will he try to blackmail Jayne? Or, directly fink to Angel? Obviously, I have to go to chapter ten and find out!*
*See? I told you I couldn't wait!
[Report This]Date: March 13 2009 9:21 PM Title: Chapter 5 - Taken For a Ride
Oh, yeah! I _definitely_ want to see a chapter 6. Because, there is no denying that you are doing a great job, here.
In fact, your story is better than the one I used to have here, called "Mystery of the Black Diamond."
[Report This]Date: March 13 2009 9:10 PM Title: Chapter 4 - The Set Up
It's a pretty safe bet that he's going to press "yes." On to chapter 5!
[Report This]Date: March 13 2009 9:04 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Closing Out the Tab
What the Private Eye said.
Btw; are these girls wearing regular form-fiting jeans, or shorts? Just pruriently interested.
Author's Response: I like to leave the details to you ;)
[Report This]Date: March 13 2009 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 2 - A Small Problem
This is getting good. On to chapter 3!
[Report This]Date: March 13 2009 8:58 PM Title: Chapter 1 - The Lonely Tavern
Heh! Whatever happens to Hotshot and his friends? They're probably gonna deserve it. Nice opener!