[Report This]Date: June 29 2022 10:07 PM Title: July (End)
Amber redemption arc spin-off when?
All kidding aside, when I initially read the story's description, I wasn't sure if I should check it out, but I am so glad I did, The character dynamics and relationship growth between our protagonists was really enjoyable and I think the more long form month-a-chapter format really helped to give space to explore that, about halfway through I realized I was moreso reading for said dynamics and the plot than the smut lol (Not to say the smut was bad.)
In other thoughts, I enjoyed this conclusion, it had a nice feeling of sentimental finality if that makes sense.(Also I really enjoyed Amber's karmic justice lol.)
Looking forward to reading whatever you write next, whenever that may be.
Author's Response:
Sentimental finality was exactly what I was going for with that ending, a final wave goodbye if that makes sense. Glad you liked it!
[Report This]Date: June 29 2022 9:00 PM Title: July (End)
Wish we got an extra chapter of Laurie slightly bullying Amber with a stinky sock or something like that lol
Loved this story so much man. Can't wait to read your next one.
Author's Response:
Almost did something exactly like that lol but I wanted a slightly more subdued tone for the final chapter. Thanks for reading!
Date: June 29 2022 5:55 PM Title: August
Here's a dumb idea for a spin off, that idea that tiny 'juices' could heal and extend lifespans gets shown to work which plays a role in the lives of several couples, introduces motivation for tiny hunting to continue despite being illegal, and spurs police departments into getting a specific section just to deal with tiny specific issues like that.
Great story; it has good plot, world building, and smut all together in one enjoyable package.
Author's Response:
That's not a bad one at all, I like it a lot actually
[Report This]Date: June 29 2022 5:55 PM Title: July (End)
Alright, here's how Laurie can still win;
Kidding. Great story. It was satisfying watching Eve gain confidence as the year went by and start living according to her own beliefs instead of others. Evan getting his mojo back that's been missing since he shrunk was a similarly feel-good character arc.
The bit of revenge they got against Amber at the end is probably great for her in the long run. It was a real crash course in how awful it feels to be dehumanized like that, which should really let her empathize with other tines in a way she couldn't before. Her apology seemed sincere, so as sappy as it sounds, I'd like to believe she eventually becomes good friends everyone.
Laurie's confession was handled really well. It's refreshing to see both parties behave like functional adults for once in that kind of situation. I still think Evan is a bit crazy for not having developed romantic feelings for her, but hey, the heart wants what it wants. I feel bad for her, but I doubt she'll have problems finding a special someone in the future.
Author's Response:
As much as I like harems it didn't feel apropriate for this one, and Laurie probably will easily find someone, almost certainly a tiny lol.
I don't know if Amber would ever really become friends with everyone but I think she'd find some kind of peace and probably be happier someday.
Date: June 29 2022 4:45 PM Title: August
@Greenanon An anthology or one shots could both be great. One shots fleshing out the relationships of Warren/Deandra and Charles/his partner, and an anthology exploring the tiny Black market in various places around the world would both be great to see at some point down the line. For now though, just focus on resting. You certainly deserve it!
Author's Response:
Deandra and Warren seem an obvious place to start, probably one on Dr. Nicole and maybe Amber
[Report This]Date: June 29 2022 4:02 PM Title: June
Breathtaking
Author's Response:
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: June 29 2022 4:01 PM Title: May
Amber is a bitch, but so is karma
[Report This]Date: June 29 2022 3:38 PM Title: August
Absolutely outstanding story! Rare to see something that can seamlessly incorporate an engaging plot with the kinky stuff. In the future, would be amazing to see a spinoff in this setting. Would personally love to see something exploring the lives/backstories of Warren and Deandra or Charles and his wife. The overseas black market could also make for an interesting spinoff
Author's Response:
Like I said I'm not opposed to revisiting this world but I don't know what that would look like, maybe an anthology or some one shots. Glad you liked it!
[Report This]Date: June 29 2022 2:35 PM Title: August
What a great 12 months.
Seeing Eve go from a tiny hater( mostly because she was a follower a good chunk of her life) to slowly falling for one months later and then finding her own footing and confidence along the way makes this worth the read alone.
I liked that despite harboring feelings for Evan, Laurie was respectful enough to let things be when the feeling wasn't totally mutual with Evan. She also makes one hell of an ally to have in your corner.
I honestly figured Eve would subject Amber to do an "apology tour" which would include revisiting the spa they went to.
But seriously though, go rest. Your fingers have to be tired from the constant back to back uploads of chapters.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading, glad the character arcs worked well, it's got me a little down saying goodbye to them lol.
And yes I'm resting lol, I've got some ideas but I'm taking a few days off before starting any new ones.
Date: June 29 2022 11:00 AM Title: July (End)
I said most of the things in my previous review, but once again I have to say I loved this story! the pacing was great, the settings were clear and properly written, and most importantly (in my humble opinion) it was regularly updated! I love many authors on this site but some people do take a while to update their stories. Everyone has their own pace, but I definitely appreciate the more often updated ones!
Looking forward to your next story!
P.S. I gotta say, with as many times as Evan ventured into Eve's nether regions, let alone finished inside them, I somewhat expected a pregnancy plot twist at some point in the story xD
Author's Response:
I really wanted to keep it at 1 month daily to help people follow it easier. I tried to lay a lot of foundation and outlining before I did the first chapter to make it possible, glad it paid off
Author's Response:
I really wanted to keep it at 1 month daily to help people follow it easier. I tried to lay a lot of foundation and outlining before I did the first chapter to make it possible, glad it paid off
[Report This]Date: June 29 2022 10:12 AM Title: July (End)
Phenomenal work. Thanks for a great story!
Author's Response:
You're welcome! Here's to many more!
[Report This]Date: June 28 2022 9:58 PM Title: August
The pure novelty and humanity of the very concept is remarkable.
There is humor, suspension, some good exposition and world building... All good tings!
But in the end, as with most good storytelling; it's the interplay between the characters, and the details of their personality that connects the most.
This story is entertaining from the start and just when you think the character's have plateaued their development, a side interaction or surprise twist reveals hidden depths.
As for the intimacy; it gets emotional, it gets sexual and, at times, it gets cruel.
While featuring, and sometimes allowing the reader to revel in, cruel acts or fantasies, the story always keeps us ground with reality - taking care to portray the harm that can be done. Not only does this bring maturity to the work, but it makes those acts all the more tantalizing.
A great read, and one to remember - heck I've archived it!
Minor spoilers ahead:
If there is any room for growth here I'd point towards the main protagonist who never quiite transcends into being something more than a vehicle for the plot, though it's a close call at times!
My recommendation would be to hint through some interaction at Amber's private feelings - we almost always see her through the lens of Eve. As such it's never quite clear if it's about status, fear, pleasure, or all of the above.
A single, unfettered, scene showing Amber as she is in private before going of the deep end would really drive the character home I think.
Thanks Greenanon!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind words. I'll take the criticisms under advisement, they're all pretty fair. I will say we will see a bit of Amber in the final chapter, though obviously far her height, no pun intended. Overall I'm really glad that people enjoyed this one, it was a bit of a different one for me since most of my stories are fairly goofy over the top adventures or straight gentle stuff.
[Report This]Date: June 28 2022 7:43 PM Title: August
Evan, you should definitely be a role model to shrinkees. you took on 4 hunters and managed to walk away hardly phased? That's guts, man.
Author's Response:
If every tiny was as skilled and brave as Evan yeah the whole Tiny Hunter thing wouldn't have lasted very long.
Date: June 28 2022 4:22 PM Title: June
Well that was a really well done climax, probably one of the most action packed ones I've read in your stories. Aside from that, I really appreciate how this story feels like it treads new ground for your stories(like with its month-a-chapter format, minor male antagonist, shrunken female character, etc). I think that's partially why its quickly become one of my new favourites of yours(aside from your great writing/character dynamics, of course).
Author's Response:
I wanted to break out and try some new stuff with this story, it's really nice to see it noticed, thanks!
Date: June 28 2022 2:48 AM Title: May
Two things to point out, one in chapter 9 you use Laurie's name in place of Eve's
“Keep him overnight,” Laurie said with a grin as she walked out the door with Evan."
the other was in an earlier chapter when Even wasn't willing to jump out of a tree because of breaking a bone, even without the enhanced durability a shrinkee shouldn't suffer harm from a fall regardless of height for the same reason as squirrels and other small animals. Their low mass means that even at fast falling speeds in excess of terminal velocity the impact won't have enough energy to damage them, mass is just as important as speed in determining how hard of a landing something has.
Pedantic nitpicking aside it's a great story, hopefully a match up with tiny hunters he doesn't have to hold back the awful traps against will help rebuild Even's confidence.
Author's Response:
I went and fixed the typo.
As for Evan and lengthy falls, in any size story physics just go out the window at some point. That said, I imagine shrinkees to be slightly denser than other creatures their size, which is why they're relatively strong compared to say, rodents. Not enough to stop an incoming high heel of course, but enough that they have an edge over anything they're going to encounter the same size as them. Evan still isn't going to get any kind of serious injury from a fall from a tree, but he could get a minor one that could slow him down just enough for Eve to catch him, even if he'd be fine a little later that day.
Overall though I'm glad you're enjoying it, my sophomoric grasp of the sciences aside. Evan is definitely going to get to see the measure of himself by the end of this one.