Date: June 28 2022 2:48 AM Title: May
Two things to point out, one in chapter 9 you use Laurie's name in place of Eve's
“Keep him overnight,” Laurie said with a grin as she walked out the door with Evan."
the other was in an earlier chapter when Even wasn't willing to jump out of a tree because of breaking a bone, even without the enhanced durability a shrinkee shouldn't suffer harm from a fall regardless of height for the same reason as squirrels and other small animals. Their low mass means that even at fast falling speeds in excess of terminal velocity the impact won't have enough energy to damage them, mass is just as important as speed in determining how hard of a landing something has.
Pedantic nitpicking aside it's a great story, hopefully a match up with tiny hunters he doesn't have to hold back the awful traps against will help rebuild Even's confidence.
Author's Response:
I went and fixed the typo.
As for Evan and lengthy falls, in any size story physics just go out the window at some point. That said, I imagine shrinkees to be slightly denser than other creatures their size, which is why they're relatively strong compared to say, rodents. Not enough to stop an incoming high heel of course, but enough that they have an edge over anything they're going to encounter the same size as them. Evan still isn't going to get any kind of serious injury from a fall from a tree, but he could get a minor one that could slow him down just enough for Eve to catch him, even if he'd be fine a little later that day.
Overall though I'm glad you're enjoying it, my sophomoric grasp of the sciences aside. Evan is definitely going to get to see the measure of himself by the end of this one.
[Report This]Date: June 28 2022 1:09 AM Title: May
Oh man, finally get to see Evan’s anti-hunter traps in action.
Author's Response:
Yep, this is the real deal
[Report This]Date: June 28 2022 12:28 AM Title: August
You can smell the double cross coming a mile away. Don't think a house getting out back on the market will likely happen. When betrayal is on the cards, it's basically Murphy's law at this point.
Honestly though, I wagered that Amber would try to go after Eve and Evan directly instead of hiring hunters.
Author's Response:
Nope, this time she's rolling deep. Obviously the people she's found through her boyfriend are less than scrupulous, and she's still in denial about her... condition.
Date: June 27 2022 6:52 PM Title: May
oh, interesting! I thought Amber might call a hit on our protagonists with her tiny-hunter bf, but I wasn't expecting it to tie into the shrunken Amber plot line. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing where the next chapter goes.
Author's Response: Yeah there's not a lot of hiding that Amber is going down pretty soon, obviously a tiny-hunter BF is... interested.
[Report This]Date: June 27 2022 5:09 AM Title: August
Another great chapter, though I don’t think this is will be the last we see of Amber.
The only critique for this one I have is that it seems out of character for Evan, when he is defending Even to Deandra, to also start to include she likes having sex with him.
Deandra and her husband are strangers to him (and vice verse), and Evan doesn’t seem like the sort of person to just say that out loud to strangers in an office setting.
Author's Response:
Yeah in hindsight it's not a perfect scene. I wanted some kind of icebreaker to show that, in their personal lives, Warren and Deandra are pretty goofy and laid back, if I had to write it again I'd have lead up into it a bit more or had someone else accidentally broach the subject.
Anyways glad you're enjoying the story
Date: June 27 2022 2:33 AM Title: April
Hell hath no fury...
Author's Response:
indeed, hell's coming
[Report This]Date: June 27 2022 1:14 AM Title: August
Where does Eve get these ideas to do with a shrinkee SO? Does she surf on subreddits for ideas?
Also, I did read those other shrinkee stories you had when you released them. I have a bad habit of not leaving reviews for stories I really like. :(
Author's Response:
She probably spent a lot of time doing "research" during the phase when she was trying to catch Evan lol.
[Report This]Date: June 27 2022 1:02 AM Title: April
I don't know why I have a feeling Amber won't sit idly by. Let's see, for now I'm glad those two lovebirds are back.
Author's Response: We haven't seen the last of her
[Report This]Date: June 26 2022 11:51 PM Title: April
Glad I waited on reading the March chapter until after April was out. Would have left me in a sour mood with how the March chapter ended.
Also, some reviewers here have some pretty strange ideas with how they think this will go. You’d think they‘ve never read any of your stories before.
Author's Response:
Looking at the hits and number of reviews this one is rapidly becoming my most popular story, so a lot of people probably haven't read my other ones lol. The March chapter does end on a pretty depressing note, obviously that's not where this story ended or will end, but I'm glad it hit the intended emotional note.
[Report This]Date: June 26 2022 11:17 PM Title: April
This is clearly building up to a finale where Amber swoops in, chips Evan, gets the house, and Eve is forced to stay with them both as a slave by proxy. Gotta say this is a lot darker than your usual stuff but I’m digging it.
Author's Response:
And then she puts the cat down too just for kicks right? Glad you're enjoying the story lol
[Report This]Date: June 26 2022 10:12 PM Title: April
Ok so now Imma theorize that Amber and the gang are gonna try to steal Evan instead of just Amber herself as revenge. In doing so, Laurie may be there and will.be held down by like three or two of the girls and Eve will try and get Evan from Amber. Or they just restrict Eve while Amber is about to do something of Laurie isn't there then they dramatically shrink! Then they get playfully tortured by Eve and possibly Laurie before going to the authorities. That's my prediction.
Author's Response:
I'll say that Amber has not made her last play at our heroes yet
[Report This]Date: June 26 2022 9:39 PM Title: April
Ha! Take that, Amber!
Author's Response:
Pride goeth something something something
[Report This]Date: June 26 2022 4:43 PM Title: March
The tension! It’s tearing me up. Anyways, is this a climax of sorts?
Author's Response:
Of sorts, our protagonists have a few more things ahead of them yet.
Date: June 26 2022 7:05 AM Title: March
between the mechanics of shrunken women in the steakhouse scene as well as the waiver/spa last chapter, and the sneezing this chapter, I can't help but feel a certain someone has a big storm coming, though I could be wrong. Aside from that, I think this has become one of my favourite stories of yours, can't wait to see where it goes next!
Author's Response:
Thanks, we're moving into the final act
Date: June 26 2022 3:09 AM Title: March
I love the slow burn of this story it's the best writing I've read in forever
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm trying to keep the pacing on point in this one.
[Report This]Date: June 26 2022 2:43 AM Title: August
Wow Evan just took a page out of the Rambo book. Starting to think he may be writing his own book on being a Anti-hunter.
Author's Response:
Evan is a nightmare scenario for most cruel giants, luckily for them he doesn't leave the house much
Date: June 26 2022 1:43 AM Title: August
Also how long if you got the virsue till u shrink im just wonder? Also funy even having a cold will going to doctor who told him he had shrinkiees
Author's Response:
You get about 4-5 months, first you get cold symptoms for a week, the nothing happens for months, then for the last few days you get feverish, itchy, and delusional, then boom you shrink pretty much all at once.
[Report This]Date: June 26 2022 12:50 AM Title: March
Didn't expect this one to be as heartbreaking as it is and I didn't expect Evan to go as extreme as he did in the end. Like even if Eve said those things he didn't even try to press her about it before threatening her with murder so he's in the wrong. You succesfully made me feel as empty as Eve in that scene. Can't wait for the next one!
Author's Response:
Evan's response is supposed to be over the top and going too far. He's a tiny guy in a world that's not friendly to them, despite his bravado he's not nearly as secure as he'd like everyone to think, and when confronted with something like this he's lashing out.
Date: June 26 2022 12:28 AM Title: March
Mmmm wondering if ambers got a cold like virus mmmmm also funny shes dating a tiny hunter
Author's Response:
It's probably just the seasonal allergies, right?