Hey! I don’t usually review on here but you’ve forced my hand with this story! 

I’m in love with the plot and the characters so far! Evan has such a fun personality for a tiny, and you’ve written him and Eve’s gradual progression towards friends (and definitely lovers) so well ;w; 

I look forward to reading what they get up to in the future months of the lease- somehow I get the feeling Amber isn’t fully out of the picture just yet… 

Holy Shit man!

First of all, dammit, I keep meaning to write my review for "Welcome to Hell" and then write a review here to let you know about that review, but apparently you are the most consistently fast typer on this website and I'll just post my review for that story tomorrow, because I don't want you to start the next Act before I get to review this. Man you can give Speedy Gonzalez a run for his money. Honestly, it's unreal. Seriously, what is your typing speed? (also you definitely use keyboard shortcuts right, it's one very useful thing you pick up from programming).

Now onto this review. Take your goddamn crown right now. Not only are you just killing it in enemies to lovers, but you're killing it everywhere. You can see the chinks in Eve's armor really start to form in October when he explains why he watches that movie. As you continue each of your characters' actions make more sense in the greater context and build on the previous character moments. I love that Evan has always had that fighting spirit in him. His heart will take him far. And I keep wanting to learn more about him and Laurie. It's likely that he will wind up with Eve, but from Laurie's interaction with Eve in this last chapter it seems like Laurie might not see him as platonically as he sees her. Overall, just it's awesome.

One thing you could incorporate, if you were willing to go through the hassle, is to Italicize a character's thoughts. One specific place is at the bottom of November you have "It might still be a fun weekend after all, she decided." Instead you could write "It might still be a fun weekend after all." after her previous line of dialogue. The only issue is that this website doesn't correctly copy Italicizations so you have to redo it when you post it here. It's a source of irritation for sure, but I put up with it because I think it works with my flow. I think it's a way to just improve the overall reading experience of a story when this is incorporated, but to each their own. 

Also, I don't know if you saw, but I wrote a story that was inspired by "Sharing is Caring" and I hope you don't mind that I took some inspiration from you.

This dynamic… Wow! It’s so unique and fun. 

I like your writing style. How the dialogue flows, how the characters - and they are all charming, unique characters - grow and change. Skillfully done, I’m invested!

I consider myself a new fan of yours, and I know I will be coming back. Major, major props. Thank you. 

A really good end to Act I. The transformation of the relationship has been clear, but subtle enough, so I think that’s been very well done. 

I didn’t review last chapter, so I will once again point out that Marshmallow is King. 

There were two typos I noticed by they were minor and did not distract from reading. 

Can’t wait to see how Act 2  unfolds. 

I love how both of them can move past the “tiny and giant” thing and call truces. Additionally, Evan under Eve’s foot was absolutely perfect.

Author's Response:

Thanks! They have a very weird set of internal rules to their "game" don't they?

This story might be slowly turning into my favorite of yours not sure yet but I'm just a sucker for the "enemies to lovers" trope and I really love it here.

I’m loving this so far! I can’t get over the great dynamic! I would love two see how the rest of the year goes. Keep up the great story

I think I'm rooting for Evie! Get your prize, girl! A house and a helper!

let more foot and shoe related activities flourish

It is a very nice story, especially the foot scenes are much more beautiful. My advice to you, even it can get stuck in your shoe