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Reviewer: MarsV2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 31 2024 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 1: Deadbeat Daughter

Really like the concept, hope you keep this story up!

Reviewer: MarsV2 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 31 2024 1:15 AM Title: Chapter 1: Deadbeat Daughter

Really like the concept, hope you keep this story up!

Reviewer: Babulbi Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 26 2024 7:03 AM Title: Chapter 3: Breaking the Illusion

I'm very pleased at how creative the story is. Keep it up!

Reviewer: CameronArrow Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2024 7:50 AM Title: Chapter 1: Deadbeat Daughter

I really hope you post what you have at least. I do kinda love the potential idea of her eventually getting eaten by her younger sister after she finds out she witnessed it. But regardless of where it goes I definitely want more. I actually read this when you first posted it, but forgot the title and hadn't favorited it, so I couldn't find it again. So happy to see the update so I could rediscover it



Author's Response:

This is so nice of you to say! I'll avoid spoilers but I am actually excited now to start sharing more of this story, now that I know there are people who have been waiting for it. Thank you and I hope you enjoy!

Reviewer: Slaww99 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 25 2024 5:10 AM Title: Chapter 1: Deadbeat Daughter

Hi Alumni, I just discovered your story but I really like it so if you want to do more chapter, I will be here and read each one of them ;)



Author's Response:

Your wish is my command! You can expect to see more chapters in the coming weeks o7!

Reviewer: TFWNoGiantGF Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2022 1:02 AM Title: Chapter 1: Deadbeat Daughter

Really cool to have so many perspectives here. It's pretty ballsy having built up the dramatic tension here, and having the ONLY size interaction in the story seen through a small gap. It gives me the sensation of looking at unintentional fetish content in other media and letting my brain run wild.



Author's Response:

Why thank you! It was a difficult decision to come to, but ultimately I realized there was simply no other way to introduce the shrinking mechanism than as such. It could only be through Alexis's clandestine observation. And I'm glad it was evocative!

Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 06 2022 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 1: Deadbeat Daughter

This is a fantastic story, but you have a lot of grammatical errors that make it hard to follow.

May I suggest writing out a chapter, then waiting a day before you post it in order to proofread it?  Rereading your story, which is quite good, will give you a second look at what you wrote in order to correct any mistakes {i.e. "he" instead of "she" or visa versa}.

Looking forward to your next chapter.  This has the foundations of a great story.



Author's Response:

I appreciate your compliments. That said, I'd have to have some concrete examples of the grammatical errors you're referring to, here. By no means do I consider myself infallible -- I expect to notice and correct mistakes in most of my works. But I sincerely don't know exactly what you're talking about, especially since not only have I reread this multiple times, but I've had a friend (who is in many respects a superior writer to me) read it multiple times as well.

Is it possible what you recognize as mistakes are merely the vernacular of Alexis's first-person narration?

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