As I read your story, I could visualize every scene and emotion so clearly it felt cinematic. That inspired me to ask: what if we turned it into a comic? I'm a professional digital artist and I take commissions. If you're interested in collaborating, feel free to contact me on Discord: avenia_draws

It may sound crazy, but I still believe in Santa Claus.

All I want for Christmas is the next chapter of your story.

Just dropping by to say, whatever how the story goes, I'll be happy about it, as long as you keep at it.

I know the comments and feedback can be overwhelming, and that you might want to take the story where people are asking you to, or feel like you have to answer to every plot holes, but you don't! It's your story, and a lot of us just want to see it finished with the ending that will satisfy you, so please ignore the noise and keep at it!

I say this as someone who do have hopes for a good ending and retribution for Paul, I'll still be satisfied with a ending that is horrible for him, as long as it ends.

So please, don't lose courage and enjoy writing what please YOU!

Thank you for not giving up on the story, I'm glad you created another chapter. I hope new ones come soon, if possible.

As I said, I reread the entire story to keep it fresh in my head.

I think a story that could give you some inspiration is "The Shrinking of Paul by Benton" from here on the board.

In this story, men and women shrink just like in your world, but there, the normal ones force the shrunken ones to reproduce. This is a logical process that should exist in your world, which would certainly make acquiring shrinkies easier and cheaper.

I know this messes up the rarity and scarcity of Shrinkies, but I think it should be considered as well as other cool things about the story that I mentioned. Especially because the company Shrinkie Haven needs to have more and more Shrinkies if possible to increase its sales...

Regarding the new chapter... I loved Paul's reaction, but I was surprised by Mary and Pam's reaction.

It doesn't make sense after everything they've done to him. I know you say that Mary still has feelings for Paul and that's what you wanted to convey, but even though she pretended to be distant to see if Paul would accept her new life, she's already been confronted several times with Paul's refusal. The conversation in chapter 31 was much more impactful and Mary didn't even shed a tear... She only felt slightly guilty, not to mention the fact that Paul's family was expelled from her life, which was still very recent. (EVERY TIME MARY WONDERED IF PAUL WOULD ACCEPT BEING A SHRINKIE HE SAID NO IN SO MANY WORDS), Mary can have no doubt that he wants to go back to normal.

I learned early on not to trust what is said but what is done! In Paul's eyes, Mary certainly doesn't love him and doesn't like him at most, she likes the object that Paul is now.

This has certainly destroyed Paul's hope.

He certainly feels less than a pet, a toy. After all, he is treated worse than a homeless dog.

I don't even need to talk about Pam. She hates him completely to the point of taking away his humanity and rubbing it in his face with a smile.

Another thing is that since the beginning of the story, at no time has Paul missed or asked for clothes (His reaction doesn't make sense in the story, but I understand the feeling);

Rereading it, I saw that Leslie is the biggest criminal in the story. She knows that Paul doesn't want to remain a shrinkie. Initially, she allowed him to stay out of the lab, which led to Paul being registered as a real shrinkie (which doesn't make sense since the company should be responsible for him, not some random person like Mary, outside of the controlled environment). The simple fact that she didn't see the problem with the company's legal department before leaving is a problem. Just the remote possibility of a lawsuit should make the situation that created the story impossible... Or admitting that it's a plot created by Leslie with Pam as the mastermind, which makes her just as much of a criminal as Leslie.

I'm very curious about the future of the story...

But I'm sorry to inform you that I don't see any real chance of Paul returning to normal. The crimes committed against him are many and serious.

4 Rapes, 3 by Pam and one by Mary;

House arrest while incarcerated in a cage (against his will);

Physical and psychological domestic violence;

Forced slave labor through physical threats;

Among other minors that I can't remember right now.

I don't know about your country, but if he becomes normal again and can access justice, everyone involved, including the company, will suffer greatly.

Leslie, Pam and Mary would get more than 200 years in prison, which in Brazil is equivalent to life imprisonment.

I don't believe that Mary, even if she wanted to, would risk these consequences, and I also don't believe that Paul would forgive her.

This story is written so powerfully that I felt Paul's paul's emotions to the degree I was nauseous ergo AMAZING story. One of the few stories I would give an 11 stars to if I could.

I hope Pam gets full ownership for Paul. I really like like her teasing and dominant behaviour, she should bring Paul into absolute submission.

I’ve definitely been keeping tabs on this story and am always excited when I see an update. 

This story is unique in that it’s focused on the psychological aspect of shrinking. How Paul sees himself vs. how the rest of the world is treating him. Losing his agency, his humanity, his dignity etc. 

id be interested in any of the following scenarios: 

1. Paul visits Carol’s home, is treated almost like a human, and is reminded of himself. His rebellious spirit returns, some major conflict ensues between him and the girls. (Perhaps Carol even lets it slip unwittingly that his shrinking is reversable) 

2. Pam gets her karma. Maybe she even contracts the shrinking virus naturally and soon finds herself on equal footing with Paul. Being stripped of her humanity and being subject to the monster she’s created in Mary. 

3. Things take a dark turn. Paul learns his shrinking is temporary, the ultimate betrayal. But Mary and Pam still decide to keep him shrunken. He loses all hope and does something to make them both regret the way they treated him. 

Keep up the good work! As far as an ending goes, I think it might come sooner rather than later. Sequel / spinoff stories in the same universe are better than the ones that drag on forever and never end, ya know? 

I hope pam gets a bad ending, she needs some karma. Anyways 10/10 story 

Just stopping by to say that I'm excited and curious to read your next chapter.

I'm 100% invested in this story at this point - so take your time, no need to rush to put something out if it isn't up to your standard or you're unsure of where you want things to do. 

I agree that Mary's sudden and violent shift after being yelled at was a little out of character. Being upset is one thing, but it felt like her punishment wasn't proportional to the crime, but then again maybe that's her way of saying she doesn't need to honor things like agency or consent for sexual behavior. But nobody really talks about it afterward, like so much happened in the next 24 hrs that they're back on good terms again. 

So I agree, there should probably be some time shifts to account for the shifting relationship dynamics. But what you've got so far is great. 

As far as the AI writing prompts go, I know there are some "adult" programs out there without censorship or content limitations. You could try looking into those if Chat GPT isn't cooperating with you anymore. Hope this helps!