[Report This]Date: May 08 2025 8:59 PM Title: Chapter 17
Not to nitpick (I'm loving this story!!!)
Chapter 17 had some paragraphs that are repeated. Not sure if you want to remove them. (It's in the section with the ice cream bar).
Keep going, it's great!
Author's Response:
Sorry about that. I have removed the redundant paragraphs.
Date: February 02 2025 6:42 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm surprised there are not more comments. I am very much enjoying this story, so please keep at it.
Are you also listed as "Breastclimber" or is that another author?
Author's Response:
Thank you for writing a review.
I am very much enjoying writing this story, so I intend to keep at it. Right now I'm estimating that there will be 24 or 25 chapters in total.
Breastclimber is my husband.
Date: October 29 2024 10:39 PM Title: Chapter 1
Like this, its setting up to be really interesting with a unique bit of world building. This is greatly enjoyable to read!
Author's Response:
It's been greatly enjoyable to write too. I'm working on chapter 9 now.
[Report This]Date: October 14 2024 7:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
Pretty good. Will there be more chapters?
Author's Response:
Yes. I'm just about to post chapter 2 and I'm currently working on chapter 5.
[Report This]Date: October 08 2024 12:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
Good start. I'll admit that some of Kristi's behavior and actions felt forced to me, and I was willing to overlook that because her and Rory's interactions were very hot and well-written, but then the cliffhanger ending completely justifies her "porny" mannerisms. I did not expect where this chapter was going, and I'm curious to see where the story goes from here.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're enjoying my story. My motivation for writing this was to justify the beginning by the end of the chapter.
Date: October 08 2024 12:18 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love this setup, excited to see where that cliffhanger leads to
Author's Response:
Thank you for your interest. Chapter 2 is available now.
[Report This]Date: October 08 2024 5:46 AM Title: Chapter 1
Great start, looking forward to seeing where it goes.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your interest. Chapter 2 is available now.