Reviewer: narisajt38 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 31 2025 10:26 PM Title: Inside the Depths of a Tormented Macrophile’s Mind: Act II: A Bloodthirsty Crowd and a Televised Execution

So here it is act II of Anura mind of madness. First, I will like to stated that you, or more precisely Anura, have a very fuck up mind that, for some reason, like's to use its fantasies to torment and traumatize you and him, as if your own mind hated you and wanted to make you feel insignificant, LoL.

Honestly, a live interview studio isn't the first or last thing I will expect to be the next stop across Anura's mind of madness, LoL. Still, I like how basicly you parody a dystopia, and instead of a talk show, it was a live execution show, which reminds me to dystopian stories by another authors that we could find on the page.

I'm surprised by how you write about Catholicism in this chapter. Normally, most authors, when they talk about a religion, which is usually Catholicism or Christianity, mean it more as a critique or mockery of its fanatics and the horrible things it has done over the years in the name of its god. I was surprised by how Sebastian started reciting biblical prayers like a believer, because I never thought you would write about Catholicism and Jesus' parables in that way, and you would use Buddhism more, since you told me you follow that religion. In Antopia, you it can found some Buddhist elements, although they are also mixed with Catholic elements. Although I don't know if it's more of a reference the whole Sebastian pray think to the book “1984,” since I've never read it.

I feel you have a thing for animals: first footslave, then the female dog waiting in the pub, and now this female whiskas cat. Honestly, not many authors use the animal troupe, but I'm glad you did because it also shows us that not only humans are dangerous in their big size but also animals, which they used to be able to domesticate because of their large size over them, but now they see them as a prey.

I liked the nameless host, its the first time that I read about someone using cannabis for an interaction instead of the classic cigarette troupe that you usually like to write, I think it is a fresh change. I also found curious and baffled that you didn't put her a name and only refer to her as the host, considering that this is a dream making her had a name wasn't necessary because her would fuction was to be the host of this execution talk show. Although I'm kind of curious if Anura actually asked her her name, before her mind could give her one the host would basically have a solid minute of existential crisis by the simple fact of don't remember her own name and basically never having it before LoL.

Honestly I belive at first that Elsa character would be Carly Johnson herself or another Antopia character which I thought would be Sophia Jackson (aka the popular girl that Lucy is following behind) make her debut here, considering that you say that the story would have references and some old characters had already be mentioned. Still, I liked Elsa especially the second name you put her “Coldstone” that basically tells everything she is from the inside, and basically how you dress her as a Disney Princess to show a kind saint exterior and you also give her the name of one of their most famous princess related to cold.

Personally I felt this would chapter is basically a macrophile parody of an episode of the Twilight zone about a dark dystopy, which I will not be surprised if I found another story with a very similar world building around the page.

I would give this chapter a 9/10.

Author's Response:

Hi thanks for reviewing 

The late night talk show broadcasting a live execution in a size fetish scenario is reminiscent of dystopian society where there is a mob mentality where society just goes along with the government and everyone else without having any critical thinking skills of their own. 

I went to a catholic school for 6/7 years even though I am not catholic myself. While I am not a very religious person in general I do think exploring religion in terms of morality and historical relevance and trying to relate it to the modern day interactions is very interesting which is why I had Sebastian recite Bible prayers and talk about Jesus. I think there are good things to learn from Christianity. Also many death row inmates have requested for Christianity counseling services or clergies in their final days which is why I thought it was relevant to include it since this is about the nature of capital punishment. 

I actually studied George Orwell's book 1984 in year 12 English which was a very interesting political dystopian novel about government which is I thought it was relevant to include it here since this is a dystopian audience. 

I think giant animals are underused heavily and should be focused on since they are just as dangerous to tinies as humans and yes I think its interesting how domesticated animals who they used to see their humans as their masters now view them as prey at their new reduced size. 

Yeah me not bothering to name the female late night talk show host was kind of funny, but given the fact that is a nightmare it would kind of make sense, since many imaginary unnamed people appear in people's dreams. Using cannabis to influence people's actions and  behaviours was interesting as well since many people talk about legalising cannabis all the time. 

I decided the executioners should be new characters and not characters from previous stories and ones he personally since this is Anura's dream and I feel like his mind would create new random people rather that people he knows in this particular scenario since the executioners would be selected from the government and would be more likely to be random people. The name Coldstone is a reference to the sisters personality, bubbly and pretty on the outside but cold and hard on the inside. 

Reviewer: zhangkui Signed [Report This]
Date: June 21 2025 9:35 AM Title: Inside the Depths of a Tormented Macrophile’s Mind: Act II: A Bloodthirsty Crowd and a Televised Execution

An absolutely wonderful chapter.

Author's Response:

Glad you liked the chapter :) 

I have actually written half of this story. If you want further details of the next chapters and what I have in store please visit my Kofi page to see the details and get early access to any of them by buying me a coffee for just $5AUD. :)

Reviewer: GGTT Signed [Report This]
Date: May 28 2025 5:27 AM Title: Inside the Depths of a Tormented Macrophile’s Mind: Act I: Young Blood

Hey LBP, been a while.

Contrary to the comment below mine, I believe Chapter 1 is quite peak, in fact, probably one of the best chapters you've written on this site. Some of the pop culture references you include are neat little period-appropriate references hehe and most of the times a reflection of your characters' mind, so, what they're thinking about. I'm afraid the set-up in Chapter 1 had me quite excited, not gonna lie. 

Maybe a bit too excited because I feel like Chapter 2 in the contrary was a bit more of a slow burn. It was by no means a terrible chapter but I just felt like the nightmare sequence was a bit too much and could have trimmed down a little bit. Like, I want to get to the action with the unaware Isabella and tinies, already.

Character development and exposition is definitely important but I feel like the sequence in Chapter 2 could have been shortened a little or you could have made this long nightmare a recurring thing instead.

Looking forward to what you have in store, next.

Author's Response:

Hi there :)

Thanks for noticing the pop culture references. The universe that this story takes place in is basically identical to the readers/ ours which is why put references to Joker and AFL that line up with the appropriate time period. Mentioning Mckenna Grace, one of my favourite celebrities was fun to do as well and I do have a cameo appearance with her later on in the story. 

The dream sequence was actually supposed to be one chapter but it became too long which why I split in into 4 parts which is why there is the Act 1, Act 2, Act 3, Act 4 to avoid the issue with the 120,0000 word chapter of Antopia where people told me they kept losing where they were reading off from. All acts have been already written and I will be releasing slowly over the next several weeks. 

There are actually 2 other nightmare sequences and one cute cuddly dream sequence with his first crush Charlotte that will be released that I have already written  and will become relevant later on in the real life pub sequence of story which Anura will be drawing from from his dreams as you will see which is why it will become somewhat recurring. The dream sequences will be just as exciting as the pub sequence. I have actually planned this story out from start to finish and have a range of pub interactions as well.   

Character development for Anura will be detailed to be honest since this character is basically me. I inserted myself in my story lol. 

Divya will be making an appearance later on in the story as well    

If you want early access to the next chapters weeks or months in advance you can buy me a coffee for just $5 AUD on Kofi. I would really appreciate it. :) 

Reviewer: narisajt38 Signed [Report This]
Date: February 28 2025 9:07 PM Title: At first you don’t succeed try, try and try again

Hi once more :)

This is not a review but i wanted to put here all the easter eggs that i found throw this chapter, i felt that is necessary because nobody in the reviews has catch or mention the easter egg that they found and what's the point of the easter eggs if nobody found them and let it know.

The first from antopia are Anura cousin and her redhead friend that this 2 are divya and Lucy, then Is the would thing abouth Max and the mention of his parent Robert as a real estate agent, which i found a little weird that he would organice a rent outside of Melbourne where he lives unlest he move to mildura with his family, but i don't know much a lot about real state agents so i don't know.

From Is just a bug, is basicly everything that they mention abouth Emma and Olivie here.

For the Harry Potter fanfiction, i don't know. The true is that fanfic Is not my cup of tea and i didn't see anything related to world of JK Rowling. I guess the joker trailer which Is made by Warner bros the same company that made the movies.

I guess that's everything i found, i was expecting that the easter eggs would be somenthing like the pizza planet truck or the A113 from Pixar, but i liked how you reference most of the stories here.

Also considering that Anura Is loosely based on you, i'm sorry if you have a very rough past, i know that you change a few stuffs but still if you got a hard time i'm sorry and i want you to know that i also have troubles with my emotions and anger and i can understand a little.

But anyway that's all the easter eggs that i found, i don't know if there is more but if there, just let me know and i would deep here once more :)

Author's Response:

Hi there 

Yes Anura is Divya's older cousin and the main focus on the story will be on him though Divya will have some minor appearances in flashbacks which links this story with Antopia. Divya's red haired friend is obviously Lucy, lol 

Real estate in Australia works state by state so since Mildura is still in Victoria, like Melbourne so Robert could organise rental places in regional areas from the central Melbourne office that covers the entire Victorian state sometimes. 

It's just a bug is set in the same universe as Antopia as well which explains why there was a talking ant in that story.

The Harry Potter fanfiction is not related to this story at all since it takes place in the fantasy world of J K Rowling. However in this universe it is important to remember that is identical to ours which is why I put a lot of pop culture references including the Joker trailer and the release date lining up with September 2019 just like real life.

There will more Easter eggs throughout the story which relate back to Antopia where I have scattered so be on the look out for future ones to hunt in future chapters :) 

Yes Anura is basically the fictional version of me in terms of his entire character. A lot of his memories are based on some of my real life experiences as well  

I have written and completed around 185,000 words which is basically half the story now which I will releasing in 6 parts over the next coming months. The first part will up by the end of May publicly once I proofread it so prepare for a steady big release or if you want early access you could buy me a coffee on Kofi for $5 AUD. :)

Reviewer: narisajt38 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2024 5:39 AM Title: At first you don’t succeed try, try and try again

Hey, well i just finish reading this and i liked.

I liked Anura, i could identify with him in a few issues like the lack of friends during school and anger issue, although i never get into a fight i understand his anger, i fell that Anura is more a version of you in that universe instead of Max.

Speaking of Max well, a thing that i din't like was that you can of spoil his ending in the main story, yes we know that he would not die because you say it in the reviews but i fell that putting that abouth Max in here it kind of ruin what will happend to him and let us suspect what will happend to him during the end of it and it was a thing that i was fearing that you will put here.

Speaking of Max book “1001” pages it doesn't fell enough to cover the full story, i fell that maybe Max din't write all the details of it because it could be a lot strong . Speaking of it, i suspect that he probably change his name and his family also in the book so avoid the similitudes, also i will not surprise if he din't write abouth Christine or he did it but have to censure a lot of her.

I surprise that the news and the police instead of just looking for Max din't also go to contact his parents, i know that Robert and Rebecca din't write the book but the authorities could belive that they have some influence on his son writting, also considering that in the main story you have teased that Rebecca will find out what happend to Max they could really know a few things.

Abouth the aphids apart of they deaths, i'm surprised that they could ride a ladybug, considering that is a predator to them this make me curious if the aphids could tamer a ladybug or they just jump to his back, if the aphids could tamer one of their predators i can of curious if the ants could due it with a small bird.

I'm surprised that you adressed everything that happend after Olivia and Emma, i belive you will put somenthing like Anura saying “i din't see Emma since his boyfriend disappear”. I'm also surprised that you din't go by the path of Emma shrunk his sister for rage because for the reviews i fell that you will go to that path, i don't know if it was my review saying that instead of shrunk her by rage Emma will just tell her and see the mental breakdonw that she have but i'm glad that you go by that path. 

A thing that i din't like was somenthing in the tags list, you see at the same like Anura i fan of somenthing that start with the latter V, so i can of curious if we will have some V in the story, i liked how you write V in antopia and i can of curious i you will do it her considering that you will focus on unaware humans instead of insects.

Also a thing that you think can due is......  you think that considering that you make that the essedon bombers won the 2019 ALF you think that joker 2 could NOT make to the light of day, because if Anura saw that movie he will have the same reaction when i saw the episode 9 of star wars.

Author's Response:

Hi there

Yeah, I will say that kind of spoiled the ending bit with Max in Antopia by revealing he lives through his ordeal. However, the things that happen to him throughout his ordeal will remain a mystery so you can imagine all the crazy shenanigans that happen to him.

As for the book Max wrote about his ordeal (1001 pages) you are right in the sense that he changed his name and the names of his family and friends. However, all the events that he depicts in the book are based on real events. It is important to remember that the world and wider community believe it’s a completely fictional story that he imagined and doesn’t know that these events really happened. In this sense, he doesn’t censure the strong ‘graphic’ details since fictional depiction lets the author write as disturbing as possible and results in his book being classified as an adult novel (18+).

As for the Police, I will have to spoil it a bit, yes, the police do get involved after Max’s parents call them after realising their parents realise, he is missing. Obviously, they look in the wrong place far and wide and the police don’t find him but I guess we will have to see who discovers Max in his shrunken state…….

Yeah, at first it is believed by the police and the wider community that Max went in hiding in the countryside or joined a street gang however they start to become suspicious of this assertion especially when his book is published and start noticing the strange accuracies to real-world events and wonder where his ideas have come from

Orange ladybugs are not carnivorous at all, they feed on sap so in this sense they wouldn’t be considered a predator to the aphids at all. Also, they haven’t tamed the ladybug, they have just hitchhiked on its back, similar to how birds ride on the back of elephants and rhinos.

I feel like the human instinct is to lash out using violence. Emma was in a moment of rage and resorted to punching her sister several times in the face rather than picking up her shrink ray and firing it at her. Had she been a bit more collected she probably wouldn’t done that however, she didn’t have time to shrink her after this since the police came shortly after this.

Vore comes later on in the story.

Apparently, Joker 2 is trash but I am curious now to see just how bad it is. 

Reviewer: Barkinis Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12 2024 11:41 AM Title: At first you don’t succeed try, try and try again

 I like slow-paced stories like this one where everything makes sense more than stories written without caring about the story. I'm still eagerly waiting for your posts from Turkey :) 

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review 

Yeah, I think setting a concrete storyline is a lot better than those messy action one-shots with no coherent storyline or development which are essentially porn while I prefer to write erotica. 

Chapter 2 will be out in a few weeks hopefully and I am 50% through it. I only have time to write on the weekends these days due to full-time work. 

Also, I think you accidentally posted your review twice.