



[Report This]Date: January 27 2026 11:05 PM Title: PART 39
New chapter this time, the chapter focuses on Rebecca and Trevor, who are in completely opposite situations: one trapped in hell, the other living in paradise. But before we dive into the heavenly situation Trevor is enjoying, let’s talk about the hell Rebecca is enduring.
Unfortunately for Rebecca, nothing has improved since the end of the last chapter. She’s still trapped with Victoria, forced to do whatever that disgusting woman demands.
The chapter opens with Victoria on the phone with Sandra, who once again comes up with an excuse to avoid her. This is clearly a recurring pattern, but for once it doesn’t anger Victoria, because she has something far better to brighten her day: her new tiny slave, Rebecca.
Next, we get a deeper look into what Victoria does to both Rebecca and Naomi. What I really love about this segment is the paradox: even though Victoria has complete control, we can still see just how pathetic she truly is a total loser whose only pleasure in her miserable life comes from other people’s suffering. She torments her own daughter, Rebecca, yet no matter what she does, it will never change the fact that she’s a complete failure whom nobody wants to be around. When Rebecca and Naomi are eventually saved (and they will be, because unlike Victoria, people actually care about them), she’ll end up utterly alone, exactly like the failure she is.
As always, I loved Rebecca in this part. She sees through everything, stays strong despite this hellish situation, and refuses to be broken by such a ridiculous woman. She even finds the strength to insult Victoria and even though it costs her, every insult is another slap in Victoria’s face. The fact that even a tiny woman doesn’t respect her is humiliating.
Unfortunately, Rebecca’s bravery earns her a trip into Victoria’s ass. I have to admit, as much as I hate Victoria, her little joke in that moment made me smirk.
The descriptions, as usual, are fantastic. The scene where Rebecca is forced into Victoria’s ass is incredibly vivid you can feel the full horror of it. The details of Victoria’s daily routine are perfect; they add to her pathetic aura even more. She sits alone in her old chair, eating cheap frozen lasagna, scrolling through Facebook, and getting angry at other people’s happiness. The way she always blames everyone else instead of herself is perfect, it’s such a classic loser trait. Then she stumbles across something that amuses her: the parents of Lucia, the tiny woman she ate back on Azurea Island, still desperately searching for their missing daughter. Of course, pathetic Victoria toys with them, savoring their pain, even fantasizing about shitting on their little house and imagining telling them their daughter is inside her (okay, that moment was good).
After that, she plays with Rebecca again. I especially loved the ending of the segment, when Victoria talks to Rebecca as if she has a successful, fulfilling life compared to her tiny captive. It’s hilarious, she’s the most pathetic character in the entire series and still has the nerve to say that. What a fucking clown.
Then she gets a notification about something she’s been waiting for, and it clearly excites her. We’ll have to wait to find out what it is.
In conclusion, this was an amazing segment that perfectly captures the central paradox. I love the way you portray Victoria, we see just how pathetic she is throughout the entire segment: a bitter woman who destroyed her own life, blames everyone else, and gets off on making others suffer. She’s the definition of a complete loser, and I can’t wait to see her downfall.
Date: January 27 2026 12:38 AM Title: PART 39
Neat Chapter.




[Report This]Date: January 26 2026 11:27 PM Title: PART 39
This was fantastic dude Rebecca and Victoria segment was amazing and the Trevor and the kingdom segment was great too




[Report This]Date: January 26 2026 11:18 PM Title: PART 39
More Victoria i'm so happy (NO)
Date: January 26 2026 11:05 PM Title: PART 39
Oh. My. God.
That was PHENOMENAL!!!
Coming in HOT with the smut between Rebecca and Victoria. Holy it’s perfect. Poor little Rebecca getting absolutely ate up my Victoria’s asshole and pussy. And while there was no farts I do liked how you wrote the Lucia’s parents segment. Was great compensation! I am amused that we got a Milton character now, shitty for him yes but at least he’s making Victoria mad which is good for all of us readers to sympathize on. Fuck Victoria!
And my brother, you could definitely write a god tier book that doesn’t even involve smut with you actual master class story and background descriptions. Felt like I was in some magical fantasy work with Trevor and Mara at the end there!
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
Date: January 26 2026 3:09 AM Title: PART 15
that vore scene was so good omg. have you ever thought about doing a story thats more vore focused?? because i would 100% read that. the buildup you wrote just made it way better honestly. seriously amazing story man, can’t wait to read more!!
Author's Response:
Haha, I’m glad you enjoyed it! Funnily enough, the chapter I’m about to release actually references that vore moment you read.
As for vore-centric stories, I’m not sure I’ll be writing one anytime soon. I wouldn’t really consider vore one of my primary draws in the fetish, though I will say my interest has definitely grown since I started writing giantess erotica, haha. But no worries, there are a few more vore scenes coming up, and you won’t have to wait nearly as long for the next one ;)
Thanks for the kind remarks... they really mean a lot. Please feel free to comment more; it goes a long way in keeping me motivated!




[Report This]Date: January 21 2026 11:34 PM Title: PART 38
There it is the last segment of this heavy chapter, and this one is probably the hardest to read and review in the entire story so much cruelty packed into a single segment.
It starts like S4, with Naomi in the car, but this time she’s going back to the place she ran away from just a few hours earlier. Once again, the description of Naomi’s state of mind is fantastic: her fear of leaving her house and her mom, even though her mother has turned her life into a living hell for years. And then there’s the hold Victoria has on Naomi’s life it’s almost like Naomi isn’t even human anymore. She’s treated like an object, used whenever and wherever Victoria wants.
Before she can break down again, Rebecca comforts her. Then comes the question that has haunted Naomi: why did Rebecca send that email? That single question is heartbreaking. In just that moment, we realize that, over time, Naomi has come to feel like she doesn’t deserve better like she’s not even the victim. She even blames herself, thinking she must have done something wrong to her mother. Thankfully, Rebecca is there to explain that she did nothing wrong at all, she is the victim. There’s something a little funny (but also very realistic) about Rebecca calling Naomi a “little girl” who still is one. And once again, I love the size paradox: even though Rebecca is so small in the giantess hand of Naomi, at that exact moment she’s the giantess the one comforting the little crying girl.
After that, it’s time to enter hell again. The moment describing the silence in the house is great; you can feel all the pressure and every bad thing that has happened inside those walls. Then Victoria welcomes her daughter with questions about where she was, why she came home so late. Once again, you did a perfect job: these are classic questions that would be considered lovely in a normal context, a mother worrying about her daughter. But here, there’s no love. We can feel that Victoria is just waiting for a single mistake so she can strike again. Thankfully, Rebecca is there to help, telling Naomi exactly what to say.
Then comes the second question: where did the jacket come from? It was a gift from Annie, meant to hide Rebecca but also to protect Naomi like armor. Sadly, it won’t be enough. Naomi makes a mistake by mentioning Donnica and the fact that Amber and she visited the school—the exact things that triggered Victoria’s explosion of rage in the first place. Surprisingly, though, Victoria doesn’t explode. Instead, she warms up and acts almost like a real mother… but it doesn’t sound right at all.
She keeps talking, putting the blame for the last day entirely on Naomi. Damn, that moment really pissed me off. She turned her daughter’s life into a living hell destroyed her bedroom, beat her, scared her, even made her think she would die and still put all the blame on Naomi. That part is so uncomfortable to read. The feeling that every word could trigger everything again, the constant tension of having to watch every word you say, every action you make.
Then Victoria offers to have a good time with Naomi, some grilled cheese. Sadly, Naomi makes another mistake: she doesn’t answer when Victoria asks again where the jacket came from. But to her surprise, Victoria keeps smiling and acting kindly, allowing Naomi to let her guard down just a little. Then she can finally go back to her bedroom, where she’s confronted with the true Victoria—not the one she saw for the last few minutes, but the real one who destroyed her bedroom.
Thankfully, Naomi has Rebecca to help her, tell her what to do, and comfort her even though Rebecca is so pissed at Victoria for forcing Naomi to apologize when she was the one who got beaten. Sadly, their talk is cut short when Victoria enters the bedroom, full of rage. She knew Naomi was lying, and she was going to make her pay.
And then comes another uncomfortable moment: the beatdown of Naomi. First, she forces Naomi to show her Rebecca, using violence of course. When Naomi tries to protect Rebecca by lying, Victoria beats her even more without any interruption until Rebecca can’t stand it anymore. No matter her size, she needs to stop this, both for Naomi and for herself, because it reminds her of her own past when her stepfather beat her.
So she yells at Victoria to stop, even calling her a “fucking bitch.”
Sadly, even though she’s brave, she’s still small, and Victoria takes full advantage of that. She brings Rebecca to her mouth, ready to eat her for dinner. Something I really enjoy is the description of that moment, you portray Victoria in such a way that she doesn’t even look like a woman anymore, but like some disgusting monster (which she obviously is).
This time it’s Naomi’s turn to protect her. She begs Victoria not to eat Rebecca, even offering her soul to her mother. And Victoria won’t let this gift go to waste. She starts by demanding that Naomi burn all her black clothes, even the ones not related to her gothic style. That moment is so cruel because it’s not just clothes; it’s who Naomi is her entire identity, her style, her choices in life, and all the effort she put into building her little collection with the tiny amount of money she had. But she has no choice if she wants to save Rebecca.
Sadly, that’s not even the worst part we could almost call it the gentle one. Now Victoria demands that she burn her drawings the ones she came back specifically to retrieve. Her entire history, the things that helped her survive, made her proud, and gave her some happiness in the hell Victoria created. She must do it to save Rebecca. And to be even more cruel, Victoria makes her burn them one by one. That part was so hard for me to read. Because they’re not just drawings, they are Naomi: who she was, who she is, and even who she will become. But all that means nothing to Victoria. She just watches her daughter destroy her most important possessions. That’s how cruel she is. By doing that, she erases who her daughter is completely. At this moment, we can’t call her human anymore she’s a monster. Even Rebecca sees it: the flames give Victoria the appearance of the devil.
After finishing annihilating her daughter, it’s time to play with Rebecca. So, she takes her to her bedroom, and damn, the work on the descriptions is incredible again: the bedroom, Victoria’s body, her face, the comparison with Donnica, the fact that she could look like her in other circumstances but no she’s nothing but a mess. Even the way she gets into bed, all these little details make is even more disturbing. Then it’s time to play, and the fact that she forces Rebecca to have an orgasm is so cruel. She shows that she owns her, that she’s taken even her free will. She demonstrates that Rebecca isn’t human anymore, she’s nothing but a tool to please Victoria.
And that’s how this chapter ends.
In conclusion, a fantastic segment inside a fantastic (but really hard-to-read) chapter. First, I want to say once again that everything is perfect: the descriptions, the work on Naomi’s and Rebecca’s feelings, Victoria’s reactions, and the cruelty. We’ve had a lot of cruel moments in the story before (just like in the last segment), but nothing compares to this. I also really appreciate that you show there are things way worse than violence. From an outside perspective, violence might seem the worst, but it can heal with time. When your mind is broken, though, it can’t be fixed, it leaves invisible wounds that stay forever. We can see that in Rebecca’s character: even years later, she’s still haunted by the memory of her stepfather beating her and her mother. Thanks again for your amazing work. Can’t wait to read chapter 39. I really hope Victoria will finally face the sword of justice in that one.
Author's Response:
"It starts like S4, with Naomi in the car, but this
time she’s going back to the place she ran away from just a few hours earlier.
Once again, the description of Naomi’s state of mind is fantastic: her fear of
leaving her house and her mom, even though her mother has turned her life into
a living hell for years. And then there’s the hold Victoria has on Naomi’s life
it’s almost like Naomi isn’t even human anymore. She’s treated like an object,
used whenever and wherever Victoria wants."
I actually worried about that a lot during final edits… that
the openers of S4 and S5 might feel too similar with Naomi in the car again.
But I’m glad you picked up on the contrast, because even though they start in
the same place, they’re telling two very different stories. One is about
escape, the other about being dragged back into something you know will hurt
you. Same setting, completely different emotional weight.
"Before she can break down again, Rebecca comforts
her. Then comes the question that has haunted Naomi: why did Rebecca send that
email? That single question is heartbreaking. In just that moment, we realize
that, over time, Naomi has come to feel like she doesn’t deserve better like
she’s not even the victim. She even blames herself, thinking she must have done
something wrong to her mother. Thankfully, Rebecca is there to explain that she
did nothing wrong at all, she is the victim. There’s something a little funny
(but also very realistic) about Rebecca calling Naomi a “little girl” who still
is one. And once again, I love the size paradox: even though Rebecca is so
small in the giantess hand of Naomi, at that exact moment she’s the giantess
the one comforting the little crying girl."
This is something I really love playing with in the giantess
space… giving tinies huge emotional presence and then letting that clash with
their physical vulnerability. Moments like this feel especially electric to me.
Tiny Rebecca in Naomi’s palm, completely outmatched in size, yet somehow
holding all the emotional authority in the room. The power imbalance is running
both directions at once, and that tension is exactly what I hope people feel
when they’re reading it.
"Then comes the second question: where did the
jacket come from? It was a gift from Annie, meant to hide Rebecca but also to
protect Naomi like armor. Sadly, it won’t be enough. Naomi makes a mistake by
mentioning Donnica and the fact that Amber and she visited the school—the exact
things that triggered Victoria’s explosion of rage in the first place.
Surprisingly, though, Victoria doesn’t explode. Instead, she warms up and acts
almost like a real mother… but it doesn’t sound right at all."
Yeah, that unease was very intentional. I wanted Victoria’s
sudden warmth to feel wrong… like something poisonous wrapped in the language
of care. We know what she’s capable of, what she’s already done, so hearing her
speak like a loving mother is meant to tighten the knot in your stomach rather
than relieve it. I’m really glad you picked up on that tension.
"Thankfully, Naomi has Rebecca to help her, tell her
what to do, and comfort her even though Rebecca is so pissed at Victoria for
forcing Naomi to apologize when she was the one who got beaten. Sadly, their
talk is cut short when Victoria enters the bedroom, full of rage. She knew
Naomi was lying, and she was going to make her pay."
I loved this part too. Rebecca being that angry feels so
true to her character, you’d expect fear, hesitation, and even
self-preservation being in Victoria’s house… and instead she’s just furious.
Furious on Naomi’s behalf. It’s fearless, and it’s very, very Rebecca.
"And then comes another uncomfortable moment: the
beatdown of Naomi. First, she forces Naomi to show her Rebecca, using violence
of course. When Naomi tries to protect Rebecca by lying, Victoria beats her
even more without any interruption until Rebecca can’t stand it anymore. No
matter her size, she needs to stop this, both for Naomi and for herself,
because it reminds her of her own past when her stepfather beat her."
This might be the most Rebecca moment in the entire chapter.
She’s literally a bug compared to Victoria, completely powerless… and still,
the instant she sees Naomi being hit, she can’t stay silent. She doesn’t
calculate the risk. She doesn’t freeze. She just speaks. Fearless, stupidly
brave, and utterly herself. How can anyone not love her?
"This time it’s Naomi’s turn to protect her. She
begs Victoria not to eat Rebecca, even offering her soul to her mother. And
Victoria won’t let this gift go to waste. She starts by demanding that Naomi
burn all her black clothes, even the ones not related to her gothic style. That
moment is so cruel because it’s not just clothes; it’s who Naomi is her entire
identity, her style, her choices in life, and all the effort she put into
building her little collection with the tiny amount of money she had. But she
has no choice if she wants to save Rebecca."
Yes… this is the moment where Naomi’s love for Rebecca
becomes undeniable. We’ve seen Naomi crush tinies without a second thought, but
for Rebecca? She’s willing to erase herself. To burn her entire identity just
to keep her safe. It’s a horrifying moment, but I also see it as a huge
character beat that shows exactly how Naomi sees Rebecca, and how deeply her
feelings runs.
"Sadly, that’s not even the worst part we could
almost call it the gentle one. Now Victoria demands that she burn her drawings
the ones she came back specifically to retrieve. Her entire history, the things
that helped her survive, made her proud, and gave her some happiness in the
hell Victoria created. She must do it to save Rebecca. And to be even more
cruel, Victoria makes her burn them one by one. That part was so hard for me to
read. Because they’re not just drawings, they are Naomi: who she was, who she
is, and even who she will become. But all that means nothing to Victoria. She
just watches her daughter destroy her most important possessions. That’s how
cruel she is. By doing that, she erases who her daughter is completely. At this
moment, we can’t call her human anymore she’s a monster. Even Rebecca sees it:
the flames give Victoria the appearance of the devil."
That last observation really hit home for me. In Rebecca’s
eyes, Victoria genuinely becomes something inhuman in that moment; the fire
turning her into a figure straight out of hell. For the character, this feels
like a point of no return. And yeah… forcing Naomi to burn her drawings one by
one was brutal to write. If it was even half as hard to read as it was to put
down on the page, then I completely understand why it stuck with you.
"After finishing annihilating her daughter, it’s
time to play with Rebecca. So, she takes her to her bedroom, and damn, the work
on the descriptions is incredible again: the bedroom, Victoria’s body, her
face, the comparison with Donnica, the fact that she could look like her in
other circumstances but no she’s nothing but a mess. Even the way she gets into
bed, all these little details make is even more disturbing. Then it’s time to
play, and the fact that she forces Rebecca to have an orgasm is so cruel. She
shows that she owns her, that she’s taken even her free will. She demonstrates
that Rebecca isn’t human anymore, she’s nothing but a tool to please
Victoria."
I agree… having Victoria coax an orgasm out of Rebecca felt
almost crueler than straightforward domination. It’s manipulative in a deeper
way, using Rebecca’s own body against her. That moment was meant to show a
different, more intimate kind of darkness in Victoria, and to set an ominous
tone for what this captivity really means.
"In conclusion, a fantastic segment inside a
fantastic (but really hard-to-read) chapter. First, I want to say once again
that everything is perfect: the descriptions, the work on Naomi’s and Rebecca’s
feelings, Victoria’s reactions, and the cruelty. We’ve had a lot of cruel
moments in the story before (just like in the last segment), but nothing
compares to this. I also really appreciate that you show there are things way
worse than violence. From an outside perspective, violence might seem the worst,
but it can heal with time. When your mind is broken, though, it can’t be fixed,
it leaves invisible wounds that stay forever. We can see that in Rebecca’s
character: even years later, she’s still haunted by the memory of her
stepfather beating her and her mother. Thanks again for your amazing work.
Can’t wait to read chapter 39. I really hope Victoria will finally face the
sword of justice in that one."
This chapter definitely got very real, and I’ll admit I was
a bit apprehensive about how it would land. But ultimately, I think it added
far more than it took away. These characters feel whole enough to deserve
moments this raw, even if they’re hard to sit with. Hopefully we don’t see too
many more scenes like this… but when they do happen, they matter.
Thank you so much for such a thoughtful review, and yes,
here’s hoping Victoria finally gets what’s coming to her!
New chapter soon ;)
Date: January 19 2026 8:44 PM Title: PART 11
hey! so I finished reading chapter 11 over the weekend and wow... you seriously werent kidding lol, that part was pretty crazy intense. I’m really excited to see where you’re going with everything next.
I just had one quick question. In the notes you mentioned there’s gonna be vore later on in the story, and I was just wondering when that shows up? no rush or anything, just curious :)
thanks for all the work you put into it. really great story so far!
Author's Response:
Happy to hear you enjoyed Chapter 11... like I mentioned, it’s one of my personal favorites, even over 600K words later.
As for the vore, I won’t spoil anything for you, but I can tell you there’s a mini-arc that runs from Chapter 13 to Chapter 16, and it happens somewhere in there. Many readers consider it one of the best vore scenes in the entire story, so I think you’ll really like it.
I’m glad you’re enjoying the story!




[Report This]Date: January 17 2026 9:57 PM Title: PART 38
Fourth segment of this chapter this time we’re with Naomi to discover the hell she has been through these past 4 days with her mother.
Everything starts with just one little sentence: Naomi telling her mom she had already told her about her day off to look for a school, and that she should spend this time with her searching for her future school. This detail is interesting because it’s always this kind of tiny situation just a single word that starts it all. Then we can feel Victoria completely losing it, throwing all the frustrations of her life onto her daughter, especially the fact that Donnica is ignoring her.
After that, the violence begins: first with slaps, increasingly numerous and violent, forcing Naomi to lock herself in the bathroom to escape Victoria. Sadly, it’s only a temporary solution.
The description of Victoria’s rage is incredible, we can feel how dangerous she must look to Naomi. She is clearly on a path of self-destruction and will drag everyone down with her. Sadly, for Naomi, she is the only one close enough to suffer from it.
Something really interesting is the fast change in Victoria’s behavior. It’s exactly what happens in real life: someone can speak normally one moment, and then just explode. This time, Victoria goes from crying about her current situation to destroying everything in her rage again. Naomi becomes scared for her own life, but Victoria “only” destroys a mirror in Naomi’s bedroom. This part is really powerful because the bedroom is supposed to be a sanctuary, a place where you feel safe. By destroying things there, she desecrates that space, making sure Naomi has no place left to feel safe in the house.
Something hard to read but incredibly well done is Naomi’s breakdown—feeling herself lose the last little grip she still had on her life, trapped in this hellish place with her mom, who even blocks the door, making escape impossible. All she knew during this time was threats and violence in a continuous cycle. Victoria took everything from Naomi even her chance to speak.
Then comes the most difficult part: Naomi’s internal monologue when she sees her reflection in the mirror. We can feel her starting to think she is wrong, and it’s probably the hardest section. It shows how Victoria or any parent who is violent toward their child takes a part of the child’s soul. They slowly make you believe it’s all your fault.
Finally, she gets an opportunity to escape this hellish place and takes it, leaving her broken. Then, when she is safe in the taxi, she can only think about what happened over the last few days. A new emotion takes hold in Naomi’s mind: anger, rage, and the need to be in control of something tiny. She needs to crush one to feel a bit of power and control something she has missed her entire life. It’s interesting; I would like to know, in a different context, if Naomi would still want to crush and dominate tinies so badly. If she had been surrounded by love, maybe she would be more like Scarlett. It’s an interesting thing to think about.
I also really like how you handle Naomi when she sees Annie asleep in her bedroom, blaming herself for it while she was the one going through hell for four days. This feeling of guilt is so real and so sad—she did nothing wrong at all and still blames herself for everything.
Then comes the moment she wants to crush a tiny under her foot, to feel this little glimpse of power she desperately needs. But when she recognizes Rebecca, everything changes.
And damn, I loved this moment so much: Naomi’s realization, her misunderstanding of the whole situation, the fact that she believes she doesn’t deserve kindness at all from anyone. The moment both women look at each other is so wholesome—they don’t need to speak to understand the pain they both feel from violence. And when Rebecca asks Naomi if she is okay and Naomi starts to cry, telling her “no,” it’s perfect.
I also want to say how much I love Rebecca. She has also been through hell for days, but she can still only care about Naomi. She is such a heartwarming character, always putting others before herself.
Then Annie arrives, and this moment is absolutely perfect. I loved how natural she is no more breaker, no more control, just her raw emotions. It’s lovely to see Annie like that, realizing how important Naomi is to her. She is not just her apprentice but way more than that she is a member of her family, even if they don’t share the same blood. Annie’s pure rage is also interesting; it’s a good parallel with Rebecca, who stays calm and composed.
After years of torture, Naomi can finally let go and cry because, at that exact moment, she discovers a feeling she didn’t know before: hope for a better life.
Rebecca’s feelings are fantastic too. The fact that, after her awful days, she feels safe with Naomi but also with Annie, I love it. And I’m a bit proud because I told you I had the feeling Naomi would be the key to Rebecca and Annie’s relationship.
The moment Naomi says she loves Rebecca is so wholesome. We can feel, with just that little sentence, how important this tiny email was for Naomi. It may look like nothing, but for a while it was her only light in the infinite darkness of her life. It’s another example of perfect writing because it’s so real—when you’re in a very dark place, these little actions mean the world. Knowing someone cares and thinks about you is worth more than anything. A little detail I also enjoyed is when Annie looks at Rebecca more closely and realizes she is not like every other tiny she has broken before.
After that, it’s time for Naomi to tell her story to both women. I’m so impressed by that moment—everything is perfect. You describe the fear, the struggle, and the reactions of both Annie and Rebecca fantastically. We can feel how important Naomi is to them, but for different reasons: for Rebecca, it’s a mirror of her own past, and she wants to save Naomi like her own mom saved her back then; for Annie, it’s simply love she wants to protect Naomi like the mother Naomi deserved. Something perfect is also Naomi saying she needs days to think and that maybe things will get better. It’s so realistic when someone has that much control over you like Victoria does, it’s incredibly hard to free yourself. But Naomi is not alone now; she has two amazing women ready to fight for her.
Then she remembers the only thing that ever mattered to her, the thing that made her survive all these years: her drawings. This moment is fantastic, especially the reactions of both Annie and Rebecca. We can feel in this single interaction that Rebecca has already been through this she realizes how much the drawings mean to Naomi, while for Annie they’re just drawings; she doesn’t yet understand they were the only thing keeping Naomi sane, and maybe even alive.
Then, with only her bravery, Rebecca tells Naomi to go get them. I enjoyed the conflict inside Naomi’s head so much it’s so hard to finally escape her mom but leave behind the most important things in her life, or to take the risk and go back to get them. The parallel with Rebecca’s own past is brilliant: she was the one who gave her own mom the strength to leave, and now she does the same with Naomi. That made me love Rebecca even more, she is such an incredible character.
After that, it’s time for Naomi to rest a bit before having to face the monster again. So we’re only with Rebecca and Annie again. But everything has changed now Annie doesn’t want to break her anymore because she doesn’t need to at all. Rebecca is a natural slave, a tiny born to be a slave to empower the women around her the opposite of giantesses like Donnica, who are natural goddesses. I loved it; it’s so well done. I also loved the fact that Rebecca is exceptional among tinies, but that makes me ask: is Trevor also some kind of exceptional tiny? It would be interesting to discover. Then comes the moment Annie makes Rebecca bow just by asking her damn, it’s really hot. I loved it, and the slow realization of Rebecca during the whole conversation is astonishing. The slow rhythm you chose for this moment is perfect. I also loved Annie in it she was the one comforting Rebecca, telling her she is special and important. I love their new relationship, even if I don’t really enjoy when she calls her “slave.” I hope in the future she will call her by her name or nickname. And finally, this segment ends with Annie back in the game, ready to work, and Rebecca resting inside the robe pocket of Annie, surrounded by her lovely smell.
In conclusion, an incredible segment. I enjoyed everything you nailed Naomi so well. It’s so realistic; we really feel her pain and every reflex a victim has. The opposition between Annie and Rebecca is great we can feel both want to help Naomi in their own way. The parallels with Rebecca’s past are interesting too, and the “natural slave” part is great. It’s funny (and a bit ironic) to see how easily she accepts it while they spend days trying to break her. Now, time to review S5… more Victoria yes………
Author's Response:
Everything starts with just one little sentence: Naomi
telling her mom she had already told her about her day off to look for a
school, and that she should spend this time with her searching for her future
school. This detail is interesting because it’s always this kind of tiny
situation just a single word that starts it all. Then we can feel Victoria
completely losing it, throwing all the frustrations of her life onto her
daughter, especially the fact that Donnica is ignoring her.
I love that you caught this! I really wanted to capture how
sudden and almost whimsical these outbursts can be… how something so small can
spark something so huge. I tried to mirror that with the ending as well,
letting it fade out just as randomly as it began. It rises fast and disappears
just as quickly, and I think that unpredictability makes Victoria’s rage even
more unsettling.
Something really interesting is the fast change in
Victoria’s behavior. It’s exactly what happens in real life: someone can speak
normally one moment, and then just explode. This time, Victoria goes from
crying about her current situation to destroying everything in her rage again.
Naomi becomes scared for her own life, but Victoria “only” destroys a mirror in
Naomi’s bedroom. This part is really powerful because the bedroom is supposed
to be a sanctuary, a place where you feel safe. By destroying things there, she
desecrates that space, making sure Naomi has no place left to feel safe in the
house.
Yes! I’m so happy that came across… the speed of that
emotional shift was really important to me. And you’re absolutely right about
the bedroom. It mattered a lot that Victoria invaded Naomi’s “safe space” and
tore it apart, smashing the mirror and the nightstand. I wanted it to feel like
Victoria was inescapable, like there was nowhere Naomi could retreat to
anymore.
Then comes the most difficult part: Naomi’s internal
monologue when she sees her reflection in the mirror. We can feel her starting
to think she is wrong, and it’s probably the hardest section. It shows how
Victoria or any parent who is violent toward their child takes a part of the
child’s soul. They slowly make you believe it’s all your fault.
This really was one of the hardest things I’ve had to write
in the whole segment. You describe it perfectly, Victoria is trying to take
part of Naomi’s soul, and in many ways she already has. We see that in how
Naomi constantly blames herself for things that were never her fault.
I also really like how you handle Naomi when she sees
Annie asleep in her bedroom, blaming herself for it while she was the one going
through hell for four days. This feeling of guilt is so real and so sad—she did
nothing wrong at all and still blames herself for everything.
Yes! That moment was meant to underline exactly how deeply
the abuse has affected Naomi. She even manages to blame herself for Annabel
being exhausted and passed out. And you’re exactly right… she did nothing wrong
at all. All she did was survive.
And damn, I loved this moment so much: Naomi’s
realization, her misunderstanding of the whole situation, the fact that she
believes she doesn’t deserve kindness at all from anyone. The moment both women
look at each other is so wholesome—they don’t need to speak to understand the
pain they both feel from violence. And when Rebecca asks Naomi if she is okay
and Naomi starts to cry, telling her “no,” it’s perfect.
I’m really happy to hear you loved this moment so much,
because it meant a lot to me, too. In many ways it might be the most important
beat of the whole chapter; the point where these characters truly connect. I
also love it from a narrative perspective: Rebecca going against Amber’s
wishes, following her heart, and sending that email is ultimately what saves
her here. If she hadn’t, she might have been squashed under Naomi’s foot.
Moments like that are some of my favorite things to write.
Then Annie arrives, and this moment is absolutely
perfect. I loved how natural she is no more breaker, no more control, just her
raw emotions. It’s lovely to see Annie like that, realizing how important Naomi
is to her. She is not just her apprentice but way more than that she is a
member of her family, even if they don’t share the same blood. Annie’s pure
rage is also interesting; it’s a good parallel with Rebecca, who stays calm and
composed.
I think this scene really reframes Annabel’s breakdown as
something healthy. She collapsed into bed completely shattered, but in that
moment she also saw everything clearly, especially how much she truly loved
Naomi. So when she saw her again, she followed her heart with no masks, no
personas, no hesitation… just pure joy and love.
And I’m glad you noticed the contrast between her and Rebecca. Annabel really
is a big softy at heart… well, at least if you aren’t one of her “inventory.” >:D
The moment Naomi says she loves Rebecca is so wholesome.
We can feel, with just that little sentence, how important this tiny email was
for Naomi. It may look like nothing, but for a while it was her only light in
the infinite darkness of her life. It’s another example of perfect writing
because it’s so real—when you’re in a very dark place, these little actions
mean the world. Knowing someone cares and thinks about you is worth more than
anything. A little detail I also enjoyed is when Annie looks at Rebecca more
closely and realizes she is not like every other tiny she has broken before.
Agreed completely. That moment was meant to feel wholesome
and beautiful, and I think it’s the point where we truly know Rebecca is safe (at
least safe with Annabel!) It signals a shift, an acceptance of Rebecca into
this group of characters.
And yes, that final line from Annabel was very deliberate foreshadowing that
Rebecca was more than she appeared. Much more, as we eventually discover in the
back half of the segment.
After that, it’s time for Naomi to tell her story to both
women. I’m so impressed by that moment—everything is perfect. You describe the
fear, the struggle, and the reactions of both Annie and Rebecca fantastically.
We can feel how important Naomi is to them, but for different reasons: for
Rebecca, it’s a mirror of her own past, and she wants to save Naomi like her
own mom saved her back then; for Annie, it’s simply love she wants to protect
Naomi like the mother Naomi deserved. Something perfect is also Naomi saying
she needs days to think and that maybe things will get better. It’s so
realistic when someone has that much control over you like Victoria does, it’s
incredibly hard to free yourself. But Naomi is not alone now; she has two
amazing women ready to fight for her.
I’m really glad you noticed all of that. Naomi’s doubts and
moments of hesitation were important to include, because I wanted to show how
deeply that abusive mindset takes hold. And I love that you pointed out how
Rebecca and Annabel approach Naomi from two completely different emotional
directions… that was something I enjoyed exploring as well. I’m very happy with
how this scene ultimately played out.
Then, with only her bravery, Rebecca tells Naomi to go
get them. I enjoyed the conflict inside Naomi’s head so much it’s so hard to
finally escape her mom but leave behind the most important things in her life,
or to take the risk and go back to get them. The parallel with Rebecca’s own
past is brilliant: she was the one who gave her own mom the strength to leave,
and now she does the same with Naomi. That made me love Rebecca even more, she
is such an incredible character.
Thank you so much for this. I really wanted Rebecca’s
emotions to shine through here and to make it clear where her drive was coming
from. Her own history of abuse and trauma is what fuels her need to help Naomi,
and I think scenes work best when we can truly feel that inner fire pushing a
character forward. I’m thrilled it landed that way for you.
And I always love hearing appreciation for Rebecca…she really is the best :)
After that, it’s time for Naomi to rest a bit before
having to face the monster again. So we’re only with Rebecca and Annie again.
But everything has changed now Annie doesn’t want to break her anymore because
she doesn’t need to at all. Rebecca is a natural slave, a tiny born to be a
slave to empower the women around her the opposite of giantesses like Donnica,
who are natural goddesses. I loved it; it’s so well done. I also loved the fact
that Rebecca is exceptional among tinies, but that makes me ask: is Trevor also
some kind of exceptional tiny? It would be interesting to discover. Then comes
the moment Annie makes Rebecca bow just by asking her damn, it’s really hot. I
loved it, and the slow realization of Rebecca during the whole conversation is
astonishing. The slow rhythm you chose for this moment is perfect. I also loved
Annie in it she was the one comforting Rebecca, telling her she is special and
important. I love their new relationship, even if I don’t really enjoy when she
calls her “slave.” I hope in the future she will call her by her name or
nickname. And finally, this segment ends with Annie back in the game, ready to
work, and Rebecca resting inside the robe pocket of Annie, surrounded by her
lovely smell.
I was honestly wondering how people would react to Rebecca’s
revelation and the idea that she’s special, so seeing you say you loved it is
amazing to read. I was a little nervous about that shift in the narrative, but
your reaction makes me feel like it really worked.
I’m also really glad that whole sequence clicked for you… the
realization, the conversation, and everything around it. I wanted a genuine SMUT
moment there, so hearing that you found it sexy is great to hear.
That scene actually went through a lot of fine-tuning and
rewrites. It needed the right rhythm and pacing so it could land as both an
important reveal and a hot, intimate moment, so I’m thrilled it managed to do
both for you.
And who knows… maybe Annie will come up with her own
nickname for Rebecca at some point ;)
In conclusion, an incredible segment. I enjoyed
everything you nailed Naomi so well. It’s so realistic; we really feel her pain
and every reflex a victim has. The opposition between Annie and Rebecca is
great we can feel both want to help Naomi in their own way. The parallels with
Rebecca’s past are interesting too, and the “natural slave” part is great. It’s
funny (and a bit ironic) to see how easily she accepts it while they spend days
trying to break her. Now, time to review S5… more Victoria yes………
This wasn’t always the easiest segment to write, but it also
contained some of the most tender and meaningful moments in the story so far.
I’m really glad both the light and the dark aspects came through for you.
Unfortunately the next segment doesn’t have quite as many bright spots (it’s a
tough one!) but at least once you get through it you’ll be right on the
doorstep of the next chapter.
Thanks as always for such a thoughtful and detailed review. I really do
appreciate them every time!
Date: January 16 2026 7:40 PM Title: PART 10
Hey so, I’ve been really getting into your story. I’m about 10 chapters in now and I just noticed it keeps going way longer then I expected, which kinda got me thinking. How are you planning to keep this whole premise rolling for that long? Don’t mean that in a bad way at all! I am enjoying the read a lot, I guess I’m just curious how you see it playing out lol
Author's Response:
Oh man, sooooooooo much has happened since Chapter 10. I won’t spoil anything for you, but the story expands way beyond its initial premise... big time. If you haven’t read Chapter 11 yet, that’s really the point where everything starts to open up. Up to then I’d mostly been experimenting with fetish stuff and only half engaging with the larger story. Chapter 11 felt like an awakening for me, and it still stands as one of my favorites. From there, the story grows in a huge way, reaching far beyond where it began.




[Report This]Date: January 14 2026 12:23 AM Title: PART 38
Third segment: time to go back with Rebecca and Annie.
We find them exactly as we left them in S1, even if four days have now passed—four days that have been really difficult for both women. First, for Rebecca, who has been trapped inside Annie’s nylons—the same pair since she captured her. Four days of sweat, filth and odor are now Rebecca’s only company. And for someone who hates feet as much as she does, it’s pure hell. For Annie, meanwhile, the pressure of being in charge of the office has become even heavier.
One thing I really enjoy is the parallel with S2: the most difficult part for Rebecca isn’t the prison itself or even the smell—it’s the fact that Annie completely ignores her, as if she’s not even human anymore. And that’s what pisses her off the most. Another interesting detail is how Rebecca actually feels more comfortable when Annie is in the office. She has a routine again and can estimate the time of day. That’s a fantastic touch because, in real-world prisons, completely disorienting someone by removing any sense of time is a recognized form of torture. It adds even more reality and cruelty to Rebecca’s situation.
After that, Rebecca got kind of lucky: Annie was so exhausted that she didn’t even care about her prisoner. She just wanted to rest her feet, watch TV and scroll on her phone. But that indifference pissed Rebecca off so much that it gave her the strength to fight back. She will not surrender—she will fight. Once again, I loved the work on all the psychological details; it adds so much depth and connects DAW to reality.
Something I also loved so much is the escape. You describe it in such an epic way, while in reality it’s just a tiny girl escaping from ripped nylons. The details about the TV are great too just the fact that Annie turns it on was so powerful for Rebecca. It’s the kind of little thing that adds so much. It helps us realize how the most basic things become overwhelming for the tiny, and how difficult it is not just because of the giantess’s pressure.
The evasion moment is so well done again. It’s described almost like a movie scene, while if you imagine it objectively, it’s ridiculous. But it’s so well written that it becomes perfect. I loved this perspective shift in the segment. Depending on the viewpoint you choose, if it’s Rebecca’s, what she does is incredible but if it’s Annie’s, it’s basically just a bug escaping her nylons.
Something interesting in this segment is also that both characters are in their own prisons. For Rebecca it’s literal—she’s trapped inside Annie’s nylons and shoes. For Annie it’s more of a mental prison she created herself by taking on responsibilities she couldn’t manage. Thanks to that, the power dynamic shifts: Rebecca regains strength by witnessing Annie’s weakness, while Annie loses energy because the one thing she believed she could control breaking tiny Rebecca has been a failure. No matter how many tinies she has broken before, this one is different. While Rebecca keeps her head above water, Annie is completely drowned by all her responsibilities. It’s an interesting parallel between the two women: in theory, looking at the overall situation, Annie should be in complete control… but she’s not.
On a funnier note, I really loved the little moments with Juliette deliberately making Annie’s time in charge even more difficult. The little war between those two is quite fun—they’re almost the same character and I hope to see more of them in the future.
Finally, we learn the truth: all of this is just part of her main problem the absence of her apprentice Naomi. She’s scared for her and misses having her by her side.
After that, in an attempt to regain some control over her life, Annie goes after Rebecca and tries to break her… but it’s useless. She’s not in the right state of mind, and Rebecca is too stubborn to give up like that. Even worse, Rebecca was far from broken, she even had the strength to fight back as if the last few days had been nothing, while all the pressure has almost broken Annie.
After that, Annie continues by bringing Rebecca into the workshop to carry on her mission for Donnica and her family. At least that’s what she tells herself—while the truth is that she’s just trying to escape this terrible reality she’s facing right now. Everything is going wrong and she doesn’t know how to fix anything.
Another things I really loved about this segment is all the work on the psychological aspects of the characters, especially Annie. As a breaker, she says the most important thing is control over emotions… but we see throughout the entire segment that she doesn’t control anything at all. And when she’s consumed by rage, the only winner is Rebecca. Even when Annie shows her precious ruler and uses it to scare her, it’s still useless the tiny woman stands strong, challenging the giantess with her gaze. This tiny woman will not surrender.
The moment when she sees the dirty cage is a cruel reminder of Naomi’s absence, she’s the one in charge of cleaning them. Moments like that are fantastic: those little details that make you remember someone you miss.
On a more personal note, the description of Annie’s feet is perfect. As a dirty-and-stinky-feet lover, this segment was so good for me.
Finally, Annie couldn’t stand it anymore. She gave Rebecca an ultimatum—submit or get crushed—and left the room. But of course Rebecca doesn’t surrender. She’d rather be crushed than submit to Annie. And when Annie believes she can actually do it… she realises she can’t. She just leaves the workshop, broken.
Then comes my favorite part of the segment: Annie’s breakdown. It’s so well written I loved it. Her realizing that everything is about Naomi, that even with all her efforts to improve Naomi’s life, it’s useless because she can’t protect her from Victoria… it’s so powerful. We can feel all the love Annie has for Naomi. And even if we learn the full truth in segment 4, it’s a shared feeling with us readers. We would just love to take Naomi in our arms and tell her everything will be okay… but we’re as powerless as Annie.
To close the segment, Annie is completely broken. She can only go to bed crying, naked. Damn, the work on this moment is absolutely perfect. We can feel every emotion Annie has hidden for years, but Naomi’s absence is just too much. This moment is so intense to read we can finally see the real Annie under the armor of control she’s tried to wear all the time.
And the segment ends with the perfect sentence:
‘’And after days of torture, after pressure and control and cold ritualistic dominance…
Someone finally broke.
But it wasn’t Rebecca.’’
In conclusion, an incredible segment. I really enjoyed the focus on the emotions of both characters, especially Annie—it’s so different from her usual self. The whole chapter revolving around Naomi’s absence is brilliant. Some details are amazing, like the TV one to show Rebecca’s reality, Juliette making things even harder for Annie… this kind of little stuff makes me enjoy the story even more. Also, the mentions of Rebecca’s past with her stepfather (which will come in handy in the next segment) are perfect foreshadowing. And of course, that perfect ending when you describe Annie’s feelings in such an accurate way, plus the opposition between the prisons both characters are in… just great. Now time to review probably the two hardest segments of the story so far.
Author's Response:
"One thing I really enjoy is the parallel with S2:
the most difficult part for Rebecca isn’t the prison itself or even the
smell—it’s the fact that Annie completely ignores her, as if she’s not even
human anymore. And that’s what pisses her off the most. Another interesting
detail is how Rebecca actually feels more comfortable when Annie is in the
office. She has a routine again and can estimate the time of day. That’s a
fantastic touch because, in real-world prisons, completely disorienting someone
by removing any sense of time is a recognized form of torture. It adds even
more reality and cruelty to Rebecca’s situation."
YES!
This was absolutely one of Annabel’s deliberate methods. It
wasn’t just about keeping Rebecca imprisoned, it was about stripping away her
sense of self entirely… ignoring her, erasing her, reducing her to nothing more
than lint between her toes.
…unfortunately for Annabel, it didn’t go exactly as planned.
"Something I also loved so much is the escape. You
describe it in such an epic way, while in reality it’s just a tiny girl
escaping from ripped nylons. The details about the TV are great too just the
fact that Annie turns it on was so powerful for Rebecca. It’s the kind of
little thing that adds so much. It helps us realize how the most basic things
become overwhelming for the tiny, and how difficult it is not just because of
the giantess’s pressure."
Haha yeah, that contrast is one of my absolute favorite
things to write in this space. What’s epic, desperate, and life-or-death for a
tiny can be completely mundane for a giant. I really tried to put that on full
display here… Annabel lounging comfortably, feet propped up, while Rebecca is
fighting for her life to pry herself free from those giant toes.
I’m genuinely thrilled you called this out, because that
exact disconnect is what I was aiming for ;)
"Something interesting in this segment is also that
both characters are in their own prisons. For Rebecca it’s literal—she’s
trapped inside Annie’s nylons and shoes. For Annie it’s more of a mental prison
she created herself by taking on responsibilities she couldn’t manage. Thanks
to that, the power dynamic shifts: Rebecca regains strength by witnessing
Annie’s weakness, while Annie loses energy because the one thing she believed
she could control breaking tiny Rebecca has been a failure. No matter how many
tinies she has broken before, this one is different. While Rebecca keeps her
head above water, Annie is completely drowned by all her responsibilities. It’s
an interesting parallel between the two women: in theory, looking at the
overall situation, Annie should be in complete control… but she’s not."
That’s a fantastic read, and very much intentional. I really
wanted Rebecca’s physical struggle to mirror Annabel’s mental one. Despite
Rebecca’s size and circumstances, she’s somehow managing to endure… while
Annabel, with all her power and scale, is buckling under the weight of
everything piling up around her.
And yeah, Annabel absolutely meets her match here. She’s off
her game, stretched thin by the office, Naomi absences, and the clock ticking
over her head. It does make you wonder how things might have gone if this were
“prime” Annabel, with all the time and focus she usually has…
"On a funnier note, I really loved the little
moments with Juliette deliberately making Annie’s time in charge even more
difficult. The little war between those two is quite fun—they’re almost the
same character and I hope to see more of them in the future."
Yessssss, I’m so happy you noticed this. That little rivalry
was one of those background details I loved planting and wasn’t sure how much
it would land.
Annabel and Juliette have been butting heads since day one
at the firm, and watching them subtly needle each other is endlessly fun for
me. Though… I do wonder how far that tension can escalate before something BIG
finally breaks loose.
"After that, Annie continues by bringing Rebecca
into the workshop to carry on her mission for Donnica and her family. At least
that’s what she tells herself—while the truth is that she’s just trying to
escape this terrible reality she’s facing right now. Everything is going wrong
and she doesn’t know how to fix anything."
I worked really hard to show Annabel spiraling in this
chapter, so I love seeing you articulate it so clearly. She starts the segment
almost floating above it all, cold and distant, ignoring Rebecca… but as it
goes on, it becomes painfully obvious how much is eating at her.
That descent was meant to drive the entire flow of the
segment, so it’s incredibly satisfying to hear that it came through.
"Another things I really loved about this segment is
all the work on the psychological aspects of the characters, especially Annie.
As a breaker, she says the most important thing is control over emotions… but
we see throughout the entire segment that she doesn’t control anything at all.
And when she’s consumed by rage, the only winner is Rebecca. Even when Annie
shows her precious ruler and uses it to scare her, it’s still useless the tiny
woman stands strong, challenging the giantess with her gaze. This tiny woman
will not surrender."
Exactly. Annabel completely loses it here. For someone who
preaches emotional control and indifference, watching her unravel so thoroughly
is almost ironic. And you’re right, the more she rages, the more Rebecca gains
ground.
It definitely raises the question of whether there’s
something more going on with Rebecca, something innate that disrupts control
itself. There’s something about her that provokes desire, fixation… and a loss
of composure.
I wonder what it is…
"The moment when she sees the dirty cage is a cruel
reminder of Naomi’s absence, she’s the one in charge of cleaning them. Moments
like that are fantastic: those little details that make you remember someone
you miss."
Yeah, this was the moment where the real truth finally
breaks through. Up until then, Annabel has been framing Naomi’s absence through
work, duty, and loyalty to Donnica… but here it’s unmistakable. It’s worry.
Fear. Love.
That single detail is what exposes what’s actually driving
her descent this entire segment.
"Then comes my favorite part of the segment: Annie’s
breakdown. It’s so well written I loved it. Her realizing that everything is
about Naomi, that even with all her efforts to improve Naomi’s life, it’s
useless because she can’t protect her from Victoria… it’s so powerful. We can
feel all the love Annie has for Naomi. And even if we learn the full truth in
segment 4, it’s a shared feeling with us readers. We would just love to take
Naomi in our arms and tell her everything will be okay… but we’re as powerless
as Annie."
Hearing this makes me ridiculously happy. That breakdown
went through so many rewrites because it had to land perfectly… it’s the
emotional core of the entire chapter. This is the moment where Annabel finally
sees the truth for herself: it’s always been about Naomi.
Her love, her helplessness, the absolute heartbreak of
knowing she can’t protect her… I’m thrilled that all of that came through as
clearly as you describe.
"And the segment ends with the perfect
sentence:"
Haha, you know how much I love my closing lines :D
Those words were incredibly important to me as part of
Annabel’s breakdown and realization, so seeing them singled out always feels
great.
"In conclusion, an incredible segment. I really
enjoyed the focus on the emotions of both characters, especially Annie—it’s so
different from her usual self. The whole chapter revolving around Naomi’s
absence is brilliant. Some details are amazing, like the TV one to show
Rebecca’s reality, Juliette making things even harder for Annie… this kind of
little stuff makes me enjoy the story even more. Also, the mentions of
Rebecca’s past with her stepfather (which will come in handy in the next
segment) are perfect foreshadowing. And of course, that perfect ending when you
describe Annie’s feelings in such an accurate way, plus the opposition between
the prisons both characters are in… just great. Now time to review probably the
two hardest segments of the story so far."
This segment was very much meant to be an emotional (and
almost spiritual) journey for Annabel. A stripping away of everything until
she’s forced to confront what truly matters to her. I’m really glad that sense
of vulnerability and growth is what you took from it.
And I especially love that you noticed Rebecca’s memories of
her stepfather. That was very intentional foreshadowing, quietly priming what’s
coming next.
Truly an amazing review, you nailed so much of what I was
trying to do here. And yes… you’re about to hit a couple of very tough
segments. I don’t envy you at all, I had to write them, and live in them, more
times than I’d like to admit.
…but I can’t wait to read what you think!




[Report This]Date: January 13 2026 2:58 AM Title: PART 38
Becca stood up to AMBER and her overbearing barrage of crafted by years of soccer foot funk without a flinch so Anna is really going to have to step up her game if she wants to bring Becca low before her. Anyone who can survive the overwhelming foot funk of teenage girls surely won't be broken by mere office funk, like trying to beat Mike Tyson with a feather duster.
I do anticipate the fallout of when Amber/Scarlett find out about these misdeeds however, surely the shitshow Anna found herself in last time will be nothing compared to the firestorm coming her way with this little exercise. I know the Domica axe is always hanging overhead with Becca but this time it might not be enough to quell Amber's rage.
As always you did a good job humanizing the monsters by showing us they are at their core still people inside those terrifying minds. Naomi being back home seems to weigh more on Anna's psyche than anything else at the moment, it is amazing what bonding over a though hundred deaths can do for people.
Naomi's mother seems like she may actually be worse than even Helena and her ilk given what we've recently learned about our mighty dragoness and her ties to Celine. Anna is well within her right mind to try all she can to save her from such a terrible situation before it is too late for her to do anything.
The Secretaries acting braver surely is a byproduct of Domica being away than anything, even if Lillian -was- in the right something tells me she wouldn't have taken that tone had Domica been the one in the chair. I also get the feeling that if the department popped off about the coffee maker Domica would have had them filtering their java through her rank nylons to make sure they remembered their stations.
Anna's gonna be getting it from all sides before and I feel especially -after- Domica returns to take her rightful place in the big chair.
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Amber showing trepidation or even slight kindness to tinies prior to the pedicure really shows some character growth in her, like Scarlett and Becca are getting through to her little by little. Of course by the end Domica seemed to have ground that back down with her talks of dominating Trevor and how easily the towers could be disabled and such.
This was one of those rare times..well rarish where you really felt for the tinies. I know their complaints likely fall on deaf ears due to Domica's connections but this was one of those segments where she actually felt on par with Helena's sense of entitlement and pomp.
The trip being extended really throws a huge monkey wrench into Becca's plight right now but if Amber knew I'm sure she'd rush back to rescue her. I expect Becca to be able to handle her own vs Anna but two weeks is a long time to fend off an adversary who is large enough to encompass your entire world with a foot.
You and your farts ;)
Which brings up once again the odd hypocrisy of Trevor and to a lesser extend Becca's tiny rights movements and rallying against people like Helena and Anna while all the while their beloved Domica and again to a lesser extent Amber are out there bullying hardworking tinies trying to make a living with little regard to any type of repercussions.
I know Trevor will never know about any of this unless he finds out later but you can't find for Celine's freedom without doing the same for the plights of people like Brenda and Nichole. Who knows what...well we do but still what Domica would have done had they stood their ground and by law their rights to not service them or deny them the insane demands they had labeled upon them.
That said the heartfelt moments between Domica and Amber was a nice touch, tender enough to even almost let the dreaded Becca cloud looming over Amber's head but perhaps she was wise not to seeing how her mother treating their tiny pedicurists. I do wonder given Amber's guilt about her feet earlier in the scene if she might slowly and I mean -slowly- moving to the opposite side of the aisle from her mother on tiny rights issues.
I know the GRSP is shit and it's what Bella is most terrified of with her tortue of Becca but maybe said tortue and love of her little lady will be the bridge to bring her to the otherside of the fence which granted is fairly slim now with just seemingly Scarlett and Trevor if he feels like it.
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Kudos to Becca for fighting as much as she did, it couldn't have been easy after spending days immobile under the oppressive weight of her captress but her undying spirit and time spent being broken in by Amber likely helped her withstand the ungodly circumstances she was presented with.
Anna ignoring her escape attempt seemed a calculated gamble on her part to see if Becca would finally yield and allow herself to be fully integrated under Anna's and by extension the family's rule. I kind of expected Becca to make a run for it while she had the chance leading to a cat and mouse game once Anna realized she was gone.
There is a lot on Anna's plate that you forget kind of like Helena...ok we didn't know there -wa- humanity in Helena until recently but that there -are- real people attached to the feet and asses they use to brutalize the lives of those smaller around them.
At Anna's core she's a woman who deeply cares for a girl who suffered as she did and only wants her to be able to escape and flourish without the horrors of her mother waiting like Jason Voorhees at Camp Crystal Lake to beat the fear back into her or worse. Oddly in another world without the horrors of this one knowing what we know about Becca's past her and Anna could have been good friends united in helping girls like Naomi escape their troubled homes and make a better life for themselves.
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I kind of figured they'd end up in the workshop at some point just not with Anna on the frayed ends of her sanity, something more formulaic with Anna slowly trying to break the spirit out of Becca by her own hands and feet and possibly even the suffering of poor bystander tinies whose fates could've weighed on Becca's shoulders and choices of defiance of submission.
To be honest I fully expected Naomi's return here via her accidently stopping Becca's attempt at freedom via a well timed teenage foot step thus leading to them working on her together as a sort of welcome home bonding experience with Naomi and some much needed cathartic release for Anna after everything that had been put on her.
I knew common sense wise we wouldn't lose Becca via Anna but a small part of me thought this might be the moment where a line was crossed we couldn't undo...especially after Amber just agreed to spend another week on the tours with her mother leaving Becca helpless once more even after the nagging guilt. Becca is not out of the woods yet and maybe Anna puts all her focus from now on getting Naomi back possibly full time as her charge given how shitty the system of order seems to be in this world letting her fall through the cracks is not an option for Anna at this point or any other.
I'm not sure where this leaves Becca being alone in the workshop free and clear to cause havoc if she can find a way or Anna's standing with Domica after letting her office fall apart -but- something tells me once Anna has Naomi back beside her safe that this might be the start of a splinter group with the two of them free of Domica and even dealing with people like Helena.
Does this mean they possibly recruit people like Penelope and even Juliette who seems to be a little frayed at Helena's antics in going against the wishes of the table or the sisterhood at times with her rash actions. With Domica and Helena both seemingly set in their ways there is a small inkling ripe for movement be it Amber going to Scarlett's side of tiny rights, Anna breaking rank with Naomi in tow or Juliette standing up and having enough of Helena's nonsense and walking out.
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Despite all the cruelty brought upon the tinies of this world, you somehow managed to make the scariest of all thus far giant on giant. Truly harrowing stuff seeing Victoria's fraying mental stuff on full display for all to see. Naomi managing to escape with -only- a few cuts and bruises is FUCKING MIRACLE in itself.
I definitely think Helena has a fall coming and maybe even Domica to a lesser extent but Victoria might be the most vile thing this story has brought forth yet. For a girl who went out a few weeks ago and murdered several thousands tiny lives to elicit so much sympathy from her mothers sheer monstrosity is a credit to her awfulness.
The new wrinkle of now Naomi as well loving Becca will surely do great things to quell the raging fire that will be Amber once she returns and finds out. I don't expect Naomi to get the full brunt as she was responding to genuine kindness shown to her for the first time in her life but Anna is most definitely getting some fire.
It was heartwarming to see the bonding between the three though, in another world they'd surely be a support group for each other but fate has sent them on different paths in this universe. I trust Naomi and Becca's judgement but I'd hate to be Victoria if something happens to Becca...the fallout would be as biblical as anything we've ever seen in this story or any other.
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Becca like Celine is a rare unicorn in the fact they have all the fire in the world but sadly when faced with the uphill battle of tiny physiology they are helpless to defend themselves against their new natural instincts. It makes perfect sense given how easily Becca overlooks so much of Amber's -tendencies- even with other tinies, she can't fight off her primal instincts when she literally couldn't find off a mouse.
Anna -breaking- her could open up some interesting doors for the future but I think her love for Amber and care for Scarlett is deeper than her lust for Anna's power whims. Anna was coming from a position of power here catching Becca off guard so who knows what will happen now that Becca at least has -some- time to prepare herself.
I understand Becca's self loathing of what she is as we all have that but her escaping her stepfather while being her mother's rock all taken away from her on top of her self defense and autonomy via the shrinking but I also in some way envy her ability to be loved and cherished by the larger folks around her, it's a hard life but she in turn gets protection, love and maybe not as important but all the feet she can handle.
I await whatever comes next when they enter the lioness den.
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That might be the darkest thing you've ever written...hell one of the darkest things I've even seen contributed here.
Though something tells me -this- will be the catalyst for Naomi finally fighting back against her mother, the literal fanning of the flames if you will. I kind of see a darker outcome on -how- she goes about it but something inside me tells me she will not let this go this time especially with Becca hanging in the balance.
Burning the drawings as morbid and depressing as it was for Naomi kind of felt like she was letting go of a piece of herself, the piece that bound her in fear and submission to her past life and mainly her mother. It will hurt her in the short term but in the long run I think it will make her stronger and allow her to finally cut all ties as soon as she can.
Plus now she has Becca as a witness to her Mother's cruelty which I'm not sure the courts would accept being she's tiny but I also assume Anna and possibly Scarlett and even very...very begrudgingly after this Amber as well. Not that Naomi herself did anything wrong but this whole sequence since Anna took her has massive Amber rage spree written all over it.
...
Becca is gonna need a long shower after this ordeal.
Helena is somebody who I have/had a feeling might be part of the supposed final wave of shrinking perhaps in a way to bond her to Celine once more on equal footing...might take moving a mountain but still.
That said if I had to root for -anyone- to shrink in the final wave it would be Victoria, she truly is irredeemable at this stage even if you slip in a bit about her backstory to soften her a bit as with Helena and others. There just does not seem to be a light at the end of her tunnel unless it is massive semi filled with her rage barreling down on poor Naomi.
She definitely has earned whatever Amber does to her once she finishes with Anna, it doesn't seem like it would be pretty or even dignified just raw, brutal vengeance. We've yet to see a man character really perish in this world but if we do my money would be on Amber compromising Victoria -especially- after what she did too her in her bedroom.
I also think little by little we are seeing a shift in the younger group vs the older. I could be wrong and reading into it but Amber's hesitant to subject the pedicurists to her feet earlier and Naomi's warming to Becca after learning what she did for her makes me think the Amber, Scarlett and now Naomi line could be unlikely allies in the fight vs Helena, Victoria, The Sisterhood and maybe even Domica that Becca and Trevor never fully expected...well outside of Amber/Scarlett at-least
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The segment did it's job, she might be a monster but Anna cares for Naomi and her well being knowing what she went through as a kid.
One of the rare times I rooted against Domica a little, she's great fetish wise and really sells the power well but that felt over the line for the little ones involved and that's a lot coming from a sub leaning person like me.
I'm sure Randy Marsh is somewhere greatly enjoying all the fart sequences you've worked into recent chapters
Amber already dominates Becca so I'm not sure how much further she could take it without physically breaking her.
Domica messing with the towers fits perfectly with her character, you would expect nothing less of a woman who is used to getting her way for years now and whom has been shown to be absolutely in love with herself and the power it allows her.
Becca crawling out of Anna's nylon was hot yes, a wonderful showing of power and indifference.
Again it makes sense given that Becca has to stand up to people like Amber whilst Anna for all her power as a breaker is a sub herself at heart. She willingly gave herself to Domica living under her whims and going too far almost for her and not even herself when you really dig into it.
The whole thing:
1. We already knew how fucked up Victoria was, you just finally ratcheted up her terror level from say Little Nightmares to Silent Hill.
2. Becca is of course a natural slave as it seems to really click in the tinies once they are shrunken. Some don't fully get it at first or even stay alive long enough to but folks like Becca, Celine get it more due to the fact they're such fiery personalities that letting go has to feel like a weight off their very put upon shoulders.
3. Becca hates what she is because she's showing weakness at times to monsters like Victoria or women like Anna who want to control her and/or destroy her for simply daring to exist. She spent her life being strong and now can be easily silenced by a teenager's reeking foot, so it has to weight heavy on her during her moments of clarity.
4. Becca submitting is out of love though most of the time, where Celine's submission is out of being systematically broken by a regime who despises her fire and wants to extinguish any trace of it to fit the whims of its tyrannical ruler.
5. The cab ride was fine, it did what it needed to do though I wasn't expecting the full on horrors you had prepared once it arrived. I expected something, maybe a minor altercation towards the end during Naomi's escape but nothing like what we got.
6. Thinking about it now I am glad she made her burn the drawings as it feels like it will be the spark that helps Naomi finally blossom into the phoenix she has been shown to be at times. Drawings no matter how personal can be redrawn or improved upon but the love Becca showed her can not be, she sacrificed a deep part of herself for another person who cared for her...a tiny no less...this feels like a deep character switch for her from victim to warrior.
7. Victoria being an absolute savage in bed much like Domica being a spoiled brat checks for her character, I would've been more shocked after all that if she was a gentle caring lover.
8. I know somebody will save Becca and if they don't then somebody will need to save Victoria and likely Anna once Amber learns of what happened.
9. The chapter landed like a hammer which seems to be how it was intended.
Author's Response:
“Becca stood up to AMBER and her overbearing barrage of
crafted by years of soccer foot funk without a flinch so Anna is really going
to have to step up her game if she wants to bring Becca low before her. Anyone
who can survive the overwhelming foot funk of teenage girls surely won't be
broken by mere office funk, like trying to beat Mike Tyson with a feather
duster.”
Haha, that’s honestly spot-on. Rebecca has already survived
a lot of domination at Amber’s hands (and feet!) over the course of this
story… and it hasn’t always been gentle or pretty. That said, Annabel
approaches control from a much colder, more clinical place, which makes her
dangerous in a very different way.
…though, if we’re being honest, even that doesn’t quite compare to what
Victoria brings later in the chapter.
“As always you did a good job humanizing the monsters by
showing us they are at their core still people inside those terrifying minds.
Naomi being back home seems to weigh more on Anna's psyche than anything else
at the moment, it is amazing what bonding over a though hundred deaths can do
for people.”
I’m really glad that came through, especially so early in
the chapter. Annabel’s worry for Naomi is meant to be there right from the
opening, even if she refuses to consciously acknowledge it herself. I’m so happy
to see that was evident.
“The Secretaries acting braver surely is a byproduct of
Domica being away than anything, even if Lillian -was- in the right something
tells me she wouldn't have taken that tone had Domica been the one in the
chair. I also get the feeling that if the department popped off about the
coffee maker Domica would have had them filtering their java through her rank
nylons to make sure they remembered their stations.”
Oh yeah, they never would’ve pulled any of that with
Donnica present. Not a chance. It is fun, though, to watch Annabel try
to impose her precise, ordered worldview onto a chaotic office that only
behaves because Donnica exists. Whether she can keep it together long enough
before her master returns… that’s the real question.
“This was one of those rare times..well rarish where you
really felt for the tinies. I know their complaints likely fall on deaf ears
due to Domica's connections but this was one of those segments where she
actually felt on par with Helena's sense of entitlement and pomp.”
You know what? I kind of felt bad for them too. A
mother–daughter duo just trying to get by… only to be casually dominated
because Donnica wanted her feet attended to NOW. It’s brutal.
…if admittedly still a little hot.
“You and your farts ;)”
Hey… if the narrative calls for it, who am I to argue?
“That said the heartfelt moments between Domica and Amber
was a nice touch, tender enough to even almost let the dreaded Becca cloud
looming over Amber's head but perhaps she was wise not to seeing how her mother
treating their tiny pedicurists. I do wonder given Amber's guilt about her feet
earlier in the scene if she might slowly and I mean -slowly- moving to the
opposite side of the aisle from her mother on tiny rights issues.”
Yeah, that tension is exactly the point of the scene. Amber
and Donnica’s bond deepens here… but it comes at a real narrative cost. We
finally get warmth between the two of them, but it nudges Amber’s worldview
further down a path she might not fully recognize yet. The big question is how
much this trip ultimately reshapes how she sees tinies… and whether she even
notices it happening.
“Anna ignoring her escape attempt seemed a calculated
gamble on her part to see if Becca would finally yield and allow herself to be
fully integrated under Anna's and by extension the family's rule. I kind of
expected Becca to make a run for it while she had the chance leading to a cat
and mouse game once Anna realized she was gone.”
Oh, Annabel absolutely felt Rebecca climb out of her nylons,
there’s no doubt about that. Ignoring it was a deliberate choice, an attempt to
project indifference and strip Rebecca of significance as a person. It was
meant to be dehumanizing… and ultimately part of the breaking process.
It just didn’t work the way Annabel wanted.
“At Anna's core she's a woman who deeply cares for a girl
who suffered as she did and only wants her to be able to escape and flourish
without the horrors of her mother waiting like Jason Voorhees at Camp Crystal
Lake to beat the fear back into her or worse. Oddly in another world without
the horrors of this one knowing what we know about Becca's past her and Anna
could have been good friends united in helping girls like Naomi escape their
troubled homes and make a better life for themselves.”
I’m really glad someone picked up on that. In another life (another
world) Rebecca and Annabel absolutely could’ve been friends. And who knows… the
story isn’t done with those two yet.
“I kind of figured they'd end up in the workshop at some
point just not with Anna on the frayed ends of her sanity, something more
formulaic with Anna slowly trying to break the spirit out of Becca by her own
hands and feet and possibly even the suffering of poor bystander tinies whose
fates could've weighed on Becca's shoulders and choices of defiance of
submission.”
I think most of us knew the workshop was inevitable… but I
really liked how it unfolded here. Annabel at the end of her rope, Rebecca
refusing to give even an inch. There’s a massive size difference between them,
sure, but not when it comes to will.
(And honestly, Rebecca’s is much stronger.)
“I knew common sense wise we wouldn't lose Becca via Anna
but a small part of me thought this might be the moment where a line was
crossed we couldn't undo...especially after Amber just agreed to spend another
week on the tours with her mother leaving Becca helpless once more even after
the nagging guilt. Becca is not out of the woods yet and maybe Anna puts all
her focus from now on getting Naomi back possibly full time as her charge given
how shitty the system of order seems to be in this world letting her fall
through the cracks is not an option for Anna at this point or any other.”
That would have been something, Annabel actually
crossing that line and crushing Rebecca outright. But then… where does the
story’s moral center go without our little Rebecca? Cooler heads prevailed this
time, thankfully.
“Despite all the cruelty brought upon the tinies of this
world, you somehow managed to make the scariest of all thus far giant on giant.
Truly harrowing stuff seeing Victoria's fraying mental stuff on full display
for all to see. Naomi managing to escape with -only- a few cuts and bruises is
FUCKING MIRACLE in itself.”
That section was intense to write. I genuinely paused at
points wondering if I’d gone too far… even for this site. But in the end, I do
think it enriches the story. Erotica is absolutely the bulk of what I’m doing,
but these characters are whole enough to justify moments like this. I just hope
readers are taking something real away from it.
“The new wrinkle of now Naomi as well loving Becca will
surely do great things to quell the raging fire that will be Amber once she
returns and finds out. I don't expect Naomi to get the full brunt as she was
responding to genuine kindness shown to her for the first time in her life but
Anna is most definitely getting some fire.”
Oh, things are definitely about to get complicated now that
Naomi and Annabel are part of Rebecca’s world. And once Amber comes back? Yeah…
that could be interesting!
“Becca like Celine is a rare unicorn in the fact they
have all the fire in the world but sadly when faced with the uphill battle of
tiny physiology they are helpless to defend themselves against their new
natural instincts. It makes perfect sense given how easily Becca overlooks so
much of Amber's -tendencies- even with other tinies, she can't fight off her
primal instincts when she literally couldn't find off a mouse.”
True… but I do think there are meaningful differences
between Celine and Rebecca. Celine is imprinted, full stop. With Rebecca,
Annabel strongly implies something else is going on entirely with the idea of
her being a “natural slave.”
What that actually means is still unfolding, and I think that
distinction is going to matter a lot as the story moves forward.
“I understand Becca's self loathing of what she is as we
all have that but her escaping her stepfather while being her mother's rock all
taken away from her on top of her self defense and autonomy via the shrinking
but I also in some way envy her ability to be loved and cherished by the larger
folks around her, it's a hard life but she in turn gets protection, love and
maybe not as important but all the feet she can handle.”
That’s a really interesting way to look at it, and one I
honestly love. She’s lost her physical strength and a huge amount of her
agency, but in exchange she’s loved and protected by beings who are, relative
to her, practically gods.
…and yeah, all those feet definitely don’t hurt ;)
“That might be the darkest thing you've ever
written...hell one of the darkest things I've even seen contributed here.”
Damn… given how long the site’s been around, that actually
means a lot. It was genuinely difficult to write, so I’m glad the darkness I
was aiming for came through. That said, there won’t be many segments
that go quite that far haha
“Burning the drawings as morbid and depressing as it was
for Naomi kind of felt like she was letting go of a piece of herself, the piece
that bound her in fear and submission to her past life and mainly her mother.
It will hurt her in the short term but in the long run I think it will make her
stronger and allow her to finally cut all ties as soon as she can.”
That’s a great read on it. At that point there’s really
nothing tethering her to her mother anymore… except, of course, Rebecca. But
yeah, if she ever manages to get Rebecca back, she’s finally free to run and
never look back.
“Becca is gonna need a long shower after this ordeal.”
Yeah… that was not a clean experience for her. Being
dominated by Victoria like that is about as bad as it gets.
…at least we hope!
“That said if I had to root for -anyone- to shrink in the
final wave it would be Victoria, she truly is irredeemable at this stage even
if you slip in a bit about her backstory to soften her a bit as with Helena and
others. There just does not seem to be a light at the end of her tunnel unless
it is massive semi filled with her rage barreling down on poor Naomi.”
I try very hard to write multi-polar characters with
conflicting traits, but yeah… I agree. Victoria feels irredeemable at this
point. There’s no real light there anymore.
“I also think little by little we are seeing a shift in
the younger group vs the older. I could be wrong and reading into it but
Amber's hesitant to subject the pedicurists to her feet earlier and Naomi's
warming to Becca after learning what she did for her makes me think the Amber,
Scarlett and now Naomi line could be unlikely allies in the fight vs Helena,
Victoria, The Sisterhood and maybe even Domica that Becca and Trevor never
fully expected...well outside of Amber/Scarlett at-least”
Damn, you’re setting up an MCU-scale showdown here. But I
really like that line of thinking: forces slowly aligning against the
Sisterhood.
Of course, if the Sisterhood is right, there won’t be much of a battle
once everyone opposing them shrinks.
Horrible for the world.
…but very hot to read.
“The segment did it's job, she might be a monster but
Anna cares for Naomi and her well being knowing what she went through as a
kid.”
She really does care about Naomi, doesn’t she? Annabel has
her methods, but it’s rare (and telling) to see her care about something with
her whole heart.
“One of the rare times I rooted against Domica a little,
she's great fetish wise and really sells the power well but that felt over the
line for the little ones involved and that's a lot coming from a sub leaning
person like me.”
It’s okay to root against Donnica… just don’t let her
know! :o
“Becca crawling out of Anna's nylon was hot yes, a
wonderful showing of power and indifference.”
Glad to hear it. That’s been a personal fantasy of mine for years,
so it’s really satisfying to know it landed… especially coming from another
foot enthusiast!
“Again it makes sense given that Becca has to stand up to
people like Amber whilst Anna for all her power as a breaker is a sub herself
at heart. She willingly gave herself to Domica living under her whims and going
too far almost for her and not even herself when you really dig into it.”
I love this take on Annabel… and you’re not the first person
to see her that way. A sub at heart, even with all that power. Guess she and
Rebecca might be more alike than either of them wants to admit.
“1. We already knew how fucked up Victoria was, you just
finally ratcheted up her terror level from say Little Nightmares to Silent
Hill.”
Yeah, this was the moment where her true self is finally revealed.
We all suspected it, but now it’s undeniable, in all its horrifying glory.
Let’s just hope she doesn’t push awfulness even further… for everyone’s sake.
“3. Becca hates what she is because she's showing
weakness at times to monsters like Victoria or women like Anna who want to
control her and/or destroy her for simply daring to exist. She spent her life
being strong and now can be easily silenced by a teenager's reeking foot, so it
has to weight heavy on her during her moments of clarity.”
Fantastic take. Rebecca is incredibly strong-willed, but now
that will is constantly overridden by simple physical reality. Her mind resists
the loss of agency while her body is starting to accept it… and that clash is
going to create some serious internal conflict as time goes on.
“5. The cab ride was fine, it did what it needed to do
though I wasn't expecting the full on horrors you had prepared once it arrived.
I expected something, maybe a minor altercation towards the end during Naomi's
escape but nothing like what we got.”
That’s exactly how I hoped it would land. The cab ride and
arrival was meant to be a slow burn, a creeping sense of dread, so when things
finally break it feels like the floor just drops out from under you.
Mission accomplished… I guess!
“7. Victoria being an absolute savage in bed much like
Domica being a spoiled brat checks for her character, I would've been more
shocked after all that if she was a gentle caring lover.”
Exactly. Victoria has shown us exactly who she is.
The real question now is whether Rebecca can survive long enough to be saved.
“9. The chapter landed like a hammer which seems to be
how it was intended.”
That’s great to hear. I knew this chapter was going to be
intense, and I was a little nervous about how it would be received, but the
feedback’s been really encouraging. They won’t all hit this hard, but sometimes
the story needs moments like this to really shake everything loose.
And seriously… thanks as always for the deep, thoughtful review. I always look forward to these!




[Report This]Date: January 10 2026 8:40 PM Title: PART 38
Second segment of this incredible chapter this time we leave Annie and Rebecca to spend some quality time with Amber and Donnica, and I have to say I’ve been waiting for this for a while. It was worth every single minute.
Something really enjoyable is the relationship between Donnica and Amber. It’s so well done on so many aspects. We can feel how much effort Donnica puts into making things work with her daughter, even learning from her own mistakes like the one she made during the Crownridge College visit. We can feel how important it is for her to truly connect with Amber, and seeing her be a mother to Amber is fantastic. On a more personal note, I really loved this softer, kinder side of Donnica for example, her phone call with Trevor in the previous chapter.
I also enjoyed Amber a lot, especially all her contradictions during this segment. She has such mixed feelings, which perfectly show how difficult her relationship with her mother has been for so long.
Then we have the core of this segment: the pedicure time. And I have to say everything is perfect we can really feel how hard you worked to make every detail flawless.
A little detail I loved is Amber being anxious about the smell of her feet. It’s interesting because before, they wouldn’t have cared at all. We can clearly see the influence of Rebecca and Scarlett here. But when she mentions it to her mother, Donnica simply tells her it’s okay and that she shouldn’t worry about it… and Amber listens.
The little detail about the icon on the phone for the Tiny Protection Service is a nice touch hinting at what’s coming next. Speaking of details, the idea of the box and the designated mat is such a good way to show how the world has evolved for tiny people. It’s exactly this kind of small, thoughtful detail that makes me love DAW even more. This attention to every little thing makes it so much better to read.
And then the two tinies arrive and introduce themselves: another mother-daughter duo, Branda and Nicole. I really enjoyed that because, at the end of the day, with a bit less luck, it could have been the opposite Amber and Donnica doing the nails of Branda and Nicole. But sadly, for this tiny duo, the coin didn’t land on the good side for them, so they have to work at the feet of our two beloved Goddesses. I also loved the detail about their faces and clothes the perfect contrast with the other duo, who wear fancy pajamas that probably cost more than these two tiny women could earn in their entire lives, even working as tiny pedicurists forever.
I also liked the little detail that the daughter has only been doing this for a few weeks — it adds even more cruelty to the entire segment. After this short introduction, the duo tries to escape after realizing the feet of both women haven’t been cleaned before the appointment. Sadly for them, they soon realize the Cernovich women and especially Donnica are not classic clients. Most of the time, mentioning the rules or the hotel would be enough, and in the worst case, they could rely on the security system thanks to their clicker… but this time it doesn’t work. The system fails. No protection. No escape. They will have to do everything the giantess bitch orders them to do and she certainly won’t go easy on them. That moment is fantastic, especially with Branda acting strong until she finally realizes she is doomed.
And after that, everything becomes even more perfect for me as a foot lover: all the descriptions of the smell, the power of it, the humiliation of the two tiny women — it’s fantastic. Also, Amber being a bit scared adds some cuteness; we see her getting worried for her mom, but of course Donnica risks absolutely nothing. She has enough connections in this hotel to do whatever she wants.
Then comes the wine moment, and it’s perfect. I love Donnica’s comments it’s shows that even if she wasn’t there enough for Amber in the past, she still knows things about her. But my favorite part is probably the unspoken reality: the two tiny women suffering horribly while the two giantesses enjoy their expensive wine.
Something I loved is that Branda is more pissed off by the fact that the two giantesses completely ignore her and Nicole than by the work itself. It’s so interesting. I’ve always felt that this is probably the worst part of slavery: being ignored, seen as nothing more than a tool — like you mean nothing, you’re not even human anymore. I loved that the story brings this out. It’s something a lot of giantess stories miss: the worst part about being shrunk isn’t just the punishment — it’s the complete dehumanization that comes with it. And we see this a lot in DAW.
Sadly, for the tiny duo, Donnica is far from finished with them. When Amber says she’d rather have red polish instead of green, Donnica first makes a mad Nicole start all over again… and then asks Branda to do the same.
After that, we still get a bit of mixed feelings from Amber. She asks her mom if it’s okay to make them do that even if they hate it, but Donnica tells her it’s simply their job. The wine and the good moment eventually make Amber agree with her mom. This is something I loved a lot about this segment: Amber having such mixed feelings, yet still going all in to enjoy the moment with her mother.
They talk about Trevor, the love of tiny people, the need of worshipping, and of course the status quo I feel like this conversation will be important in the future.
Then it’s time for Donnica to ask her daughter if she wants to spend one more week with her. Amber says no… at least this time. The fact that she refuses partly for Rebecca, but also because she’s so used to saying no to her mom, is very interesting. I also loved Donnica’s reaction. The fact that she genuinely wants to make things work with Amber is so wholesome — and it’s the complete opposite of another mother we’ll sadly meet later in this chapter.
After that, there’s still time for more pedicure work, and sadly for the tiny duo, Donnica isn’t ready to let them go. She makes them do and redo as many pedicures as she pleases and she is not easily pleased.
Finally, after hours, the duo is freed… but when they realize Donnica doesn’t even give them a tip, Branda loses it and makes a remark. Sadly, Donnica doesn’t take it well and decides to punish them one more time. So she sits on the box, revealing her perfect ass to the women, and unleashes the most powerful fart ever on the poor duo.
Damn, this moment even if I’m not the biggest fart enjoyer it’s perfect. From the description of Donnica’s ass to the fart itself and how powerful it is (the supernova comparison is incredible, I loved it so much), to the description of the impact inside the box it adds even more humiliation and despair to the situation of our little pedicure crew. The description of the duo’s suffering shows just how powerless tinies are: a single fart from a powerful woman can ruin their entire world, and Donnica could have even killed them if they had stayed on the box just a little longer. That’s how powerful she is compared to them.
“There’s your tip,” she said, voice thick with triumph as she turned and walked away, her chin lifted, her back straight, her hips swaying with elegant pride as she rejoined Amber without a glance back.It’s so perfect — it adds so much more cruelty. Maybe one little thing I would have loved is Amber giving them a tip of her own. It would have closed the circle beautifully: from being nervous about the smell at the beginning to clearly torturing them at the end. But it’s just a small detail that doesn’t change the perfection of the scene— just me being a bit greedy. Even if her little comment shows she doesn’t really care anymore; her mom farting on two tinies just makes her laugh and becomes a joke between the two powerful goddesses.
They also have a talk about the future of Amber and Donnica comes up with an idea Amber already had and wanted to cheer with her mom, turning what could have been an uncomfortable discussion into something easy for both. It shows once again Donnica’s will to make things work with Amber and be a better mother than before. After that, we get a wholesome moment: Amber finally agreeing to spend one more week with Donnica, making her so happy. They also talk about why the tiny girls’ clickers didn’t work, and we learn that most of the systems use “password” as the password, making it ridiculously easy for any giantess who knows this little fact to disarm them. Of course, Donnica knows. It’s so funny… but also sad, because it’s the same kind of thing that happens in our world. And finally, this fantastic segment ends with Amber thanking her mom for that moment.
In conclusion, a perfect segment with Amber and Donnica. I’m really happy to finally have one I asked for it so many times, and you gave me this masterpiece. Thank you! Now I’m just waiting for the moment Amber will tell Donnica about the abuse she faced in her past.To speak more about the segment in general, the things I enjoyed most are Donnica (so wholesome), the huge amount of effort she puts into making things work with Amber, learning from her mistakes and not repeating them. I also loved her duality throughout the entire segment: the kind mom with Amber vs. the dominant, cruel giantess toward the tiny women. As I said every time, the attention to little details makes it so much better. The quality of the descriptions is once again fantastic. And the character of Amber, who never really knows what to do or say, is great. We can feel she’s caught between two very different worlds: her mom who wants to rule over tinies, and Rebecca & Scarlett who look for equity between both sizes. She’s at a crossroads I can’t wait to see what she’s going to do. Now that this segment is done, time to go back to our sweet Rebecca during these really difficult times, far from the amazing time her girlfriend just had.
Author's Response:
“Second segment of this incredible chapter this time we
leave Annie and Rebecca to spend some quality time with Amber and Donnica, and
I have to say I’ve been waiting for this for a while. It was worth every single
minute.”
I’m really glad to finally have delivered some proper
mother–daughter time with Donnica and Amber. I told you it was coming ;)
“Something really enjoyable is the relationship between
Donnica and Amber. It’s so well done on so many aspects. We can feel how much
effort Donnica puts into making things work with her daughter, even learning
from her own mistakes like the one she made during the Crownridge College
visit. We can feel how important it is for her to truly connect with Amber, and
seeing her be a mother to Amber is fantastic. On a more personal note, I really
loved this softer, kinder side of Donnica for example, her phone call with
Trevor in the previous chapter.”
I really liked showing Donnica growing from her past
mistakes. First we saw everything blow up at Crownridge, and afterward she was
genuinely reflective and regretful about the choices she made. So it felt
earned to show her here actively trying to do better. To me, it’s a natural
progression of the character rather than a sudden shift.
And yeah, we’ve definitely been seeing a softer side of
Donnica lately… although that softness might harden up a bit once the two
tinies enter the scene haha
“A little detail I loved is Amber being anxious about the
smell of her feet. It’s interesting because before, they wouldn’t have cared at
all. We can clearly see the influence of Rebecca and Scarlett here. But when
she mentions it to her mother, Donnica simply tells her it’s okay and that she
shouldn’t worry about it… and Amber listens.”
It’s sort of the same thing happening with Amber here like
Donnica above, isn’t it? She’s grown since the start of the story… but at the
same time, Donnica telling her not to worry about her smelly feet is basically
saying that little people’s opinions don’t matter. So while Amber is maturing
in one direction, her mother is subtly pulling her back in another. That was
something I really wanted to set up here: yes, Amber is repairing her
relationship with her mom, but it comes at the expense of her belief in tiny
rights.
“And then the two tinies arrive and introduce themselves:
another mother-daughter duo, Branda and Nicole. I really enjoyed that because,
at the end of the day, with a bit less luck, it could have been the opposite
Amber and Donnica doing the nails of Branda and Nicole. But sadly, for this
tiny duo, the coin didn’t land on the good side for them, so they have to work
at the feet of our two beloved Goddesses. I also loved the detail about their
faces and clothes the perfect contrast with the other duo, who wear fancy
pajamas that probably cost more than these two tiny women could earn in their
entire lives, even working as tiny pedicurists forever.”
That’s a great point. These tinies were probably once big
themselves (though some are born small), and it really highlights how cruel and
arbitrary fate can be in this world. If the coin lands the wrong way, like you
said, you might end up under a giant foot. That kind of whimsical, unfair fate
(and the humiliation that comes with it) is something I find incredibly erotic
to write about.
And I love your observation about the silk pajamas. The idea
that Donnica and Amber are casually wearing something worth more than Branda’s
and Nicole’s entire lives combined is so true… and kind of hot!
“And after that, everything becomes even more perfect for
me as a foot lover: all the descriptions of the smell, the power of it, the
humiliation of the two tiny women — it’s fantastic. Also, Amber being a bit
scared adds some cuteness; we see her getting worried for her mom, but of
course Donnica risks absolutely nothing. She has enough connections in this
hotel to do whatever she wants.”
As a fellow foot lover, this was incredibly fun to write! I
love hearing that it landed as perfectly for you. I’ve been waiting a long time
to do a tiny pedicure scene, and this just felt like the ideal moment for it.
The situation, the power dynamics, the characters… it all lined up naturally.
“Something I loved is that Branda is more pissed off by
the fact that the two giantesses completely ignore her and Nicole than by the
work itself. It’s so interesting. I’ve always felt that this is probably the
worst part of slavery: being ignored, seen as nothing more than a tool — like
you mean nothing, you’re not even human anymore. I loved that the story brings
this out. It’s something a lot of giantess stories miss: the worst part about
being shrunk isn’t just the punishment — it’s the complete dehumanization that
comes with it. And we see this a lot in DAW.”
Yes! This is something I absolutely love exploring in this
fetish space… not just the loss of agency, but the loss of recognition.
Becoming a literal object to a being so vastly larger than you. I didn’t even
realize this was something many giantess stories miss; to me, it feels like one
of the richest aspects of the dynamic. So I’m really happy DAW delivers on that
for you.
“After that, we still get a bit of mixed feelings from
Amber. She asks her mom if it’s okay to make them do that even if they hate it,
but Donnica tells her it’s simply their job. The wine and the good moment
eventually make Amber agree with her mom. This is something I loved a lot about
this segment: Amber having such mixed feelings, yet still going all in to enjoy
the moment with her mother.”
Yeah, that was really the heartbeat of this segment. Amber’s
belief in tiny rights quietly eroding under the warmth of reconnecting with her
mother. I’m really glad you picked up on that, because that internal conflict
is exactly what I wanted readers to be sitting with.
“After that, there’s still time for more pedicure work,
and sadly for the tiny duo, Donnica isn’t ready to let them go. She makes them
do and redo as many pedicures as she pleases and she is not easily pleased.”
Haha, nope… she definitely isn’t. That poor tiny
mother–daughter duo ended up slaving away for hours. We’ve seen a softer
Donnica recently, but it was also fun to let “goddess Donnica” come out again
and remind us who she really is >:)
“Damn, this moment even if I’m not the biggest fart
enjoyer it’s perfect. From the description of Donnica’s ass to the fart itself
and how powerful it is (the supernova comparison is incredible, I loved it so
much), to the description of the impact inside the box it adds even more
humiliation and despair to the situation of our little pedicure crew. The
description of the duo’s suffering shows just how powerless tinies are: a
single fart from a powerful woman can ruin their entire world, and Donnica could
have even killed them if they had stayed on the box just a little longer.
That’s how powerful she is compared to them.”
I loved the supernova comparison too, so I’m really happy to
see you call that out :D
I wouldn’t call myself a dedicated fart guy either, but I do
think it’s such a strong tool for humiliation when it fits naturally. I don’t
go out of my way to write them… the opportunities just present themselves. And
honestly, the way you broke down why it worked so well was incredible, so thank
you for that.
“They also have a talk about the future of Amber and
Donnica comes up with an idea Amber already had and wanted to cheer with her
mom, turning what could have been an uncomfortable discussion into something
easy for both. It shows once again Donnica’s will to make things work with
Amber and be a better mother than before. After that, we get a wholesome
moment: Amber finally agreeing to spend one more week with Donnica, making her
so happy. They also talk about why the tiny girls’ clickers didn’t work, and we
learn that most of the systems use “password” as the password, making it
ridiculously easy for any giantess who knows this little fact to disarm them.
Of course, Donnica knows. It’s so funny… but also sad, because it’s the same
kind of thing that happens in our world. And finally, this fantastic segment
ends with Amber thanking her mom for that moment.”
One thing I was really curious about is whether people would
think about how Amber extending her trip actually puts Rebecca in a more
precarious situation. At this point, we know Annabel has her, and there’s this
underlying question of when (or if) Amber will return to save her. I was hoping
this segment would create mixed feelings: happiness over Amber reconciling with
her mother, but dread because we know it’s happening at Rebecca’s expense…
something that gets even worse as the chapter continues.
“In conclusion, a perfect segment with Amber and Donnica.
I’m really happy to finally have one I asked for it so many times, and you gave
me this masterpiece. Thank you! Now I’m just waiting for the moment Amber will
tell Donnica about the abuse she faced in her past. To speak more about the
segment in general, the things I enjoyed most are Donnica (so wholesome), the
huge amount of effort she puts into making things work with Amber, learning
from her mistakes and not repeating them. I also loved her duality throughout
the entire segment: the kind mom with Amber vs. the dominant, cruel giantess
toward the tiny women. As I said every time, the attention to little details
makes it so much better. The quality of the descriptions is once again
fantastic. And the character of Amber, who never really knows what to do or
say, is great. We can feel she’s caught between two very different worlds: her
mom who wants to rule over tinies, and Rebecca & Scarlett who look for
equity between both sizes. She’s at a crossroads I can’t wait to see what she’s
going to do. Now that this segment is done, time to go back to our sweet
Rebecca during these really difficult times, far from the amazing time her
girlfriend just had.”
I was genuinely excited for you to read this segment,
especially since I know you’ve been asking for it for so long. Hearing you call
it a masterpiece honestly means a lot. I had an absolute blast writing it… Donnica
and Amber getting pedicures from two unwilling tiny women is a scenario I’ve
had in my head for a long time, and I’m really happy with how it came together.
And yeah, Donnica’s duality is on full display here. That
contrast between caring mother and cruel goddess added a lot of tension, and it
really fueled the erotica as well.
As for Amber, you nailed it. This is very much a battle for
her soul, and we’re starting to see the scales tip toward Donnica’s worldview.
Whether that’s just a single night of connection, or something much more
lasting… is still an open question.
Amazing review, man. I can’t wait to see what you think of the next three segments!
Date: January 08 2026 9:44 PM Title: PART 38
Neat chapter.
1. Out of curiosity how many people work at Donnica’s firm?
2. Why would Victoria even have a registry network?
3. Honestly how many Tinies did Victoria eat? I know she ate one at the island. She seemed quite eager to eat Rebecca.
Author's Response:
1. It’s a mid-sized elite firm, so I’d estimate somewhere in the 70–90 personnel range.
2. She doesn’t have a formal registration network. Instead, there are opt-in home networks that connect to larger registration systems. It functions like a layer of security that alerts you when a registered tiny enters the premises, while also protecting the tiny by creating a record of their location. I see it as a moderately affordable security add-on... something you’d include with an existing home security package.
3. As far as we know, Victoria has only eaten one tiny so far: little Lucia on Azurea Isle. That said, she does seem quite intent on eating Rebecca if Naomi doesn’t comply :o




[Report This]Date: January 08 2026 12:48 AM Title: PART 38
New chapter, and what a heavy one,one of my favorites, but also the hardest to read, especially the last two segments. But we’re not there yet; let’s start with S1.
This one begins with Annabel completely drowned by her temporary position, and I have to say I loved your approach to it, focusing on all the little details that make it so difficult. From an outside view, we might think the hardest part is dealing with the huge case, but no, it’s all the petty office conflicts.
Annabel has many to deal with two of them with Alice, after Annabel refuses an expensive coffee machine for her department, and then with Lillian, who wanted a day off to help her sisters. But Annabel had already offered that day to Alice to calm her and her department after the previous issue. I loved it in an office like Donnica’s one with all the projects that will impact countless lives, yet they still act like this.
I love the permanent contrast between the giant and the tiny: while some try to survive, others only care about meaningless stuff. It really reinforces the messed-up world of DAW.
It’s also interesting because I feel like this segment reinforces Donnica’s character even more being able to deal so easily with all of that is impressive.
Soon after, we realize what’s really disturbing Annie is not that meaningless conflict in the office is the fact Naomi isn’t there. Shitoria learned she had a week off from school and wanted to keep Naomi home with her, and Annie knows that can only mean one thing, Naomi will go through hell again.
After that, she tries to focus on something more fun for her: the breaking of our sweet Rebecca with her potent feet. And I’ll say it again, the work on the descriptions is, another time, stunning. All the details on the aspect and the stench of Annabel’s feet is perfect; it feels like the smell is alive, like a monster waiting to eat Rebecca. But no matter the stink and the dirtiness, it was useless, Rebecca was still standing strong she have been through so much in her life to surrender to a weak woman Like Annabel who have only her size for herself.
She was ready to face everything Annabel had prepared for her; she even mocked her, saying she wouldn’t bow to someone who can’t even earn the respect of her own secretary. It’s so funny, Rebecca is such an incredible character. Sadly for her, even if she knows how to use words like a dangerous blade, at the end of the day she is still tiny, and she will suffer even more inside Annabel’s nylons, directly under her disgusting, unwashed feet.
I really enjoyed the moment Rebecca realizes she fucked up, it’s made me smile. It feels like those moments when you insult someone stronger: you feel powerful in the instant, and then suddenly realize you fucked up really bad. That’s exactly what happened to Rebecca.
Afterward, she puts her foot back on to continue her own torture in the office, where she controls nothing, and even her pride as a breaker is hurt by Rebecca’s comment. It almost feels like she’s a shadow of herself, perhaps because she misses the light she found in her life: the broken Naomi.
In conclusion, a great opener for what’s coming in this chapter. I really enjoyed the struggle of Annie, all the descriptions of her feet and their stench, the rebellious Rebecca who can’t keep her mouth shut for her own safety, and of course Naomi. I loved the fact that it’s Naomi who makes things so difficult for Annie, even as she tries to focus on Donnica. But I feel like she’ll realize soon that someone may be more important than her goddess mother, someone who could really need her help.
Author's Response:
"This one begins with Annabel completely drowned by
her temporary position, and I have to say I loved your approach to it, focusing
on all the little details that make it so difficult. From an outside view, we
might think the hardest part is dealing with the huge case, but no, it’s all
the petty office conflicts."
Yeah, I loved that you picked up on that. Donnica’s office
might be the place where some of the worst anti-tiny laws are pushed, but
underneath all of that it’s still just an office… full of petty squabbles and
rivalries. They might see themselves as goddesses, but at the end of the day
they’re still just catty women.
"Soon after, we realize what’s really disturbing
Annie is not that meaningless conflict in the office is the fact Naomi isn’t
there. Shitoria learned she had a week off from school and wanted to keep Naomi
home with her, and Annie knows that can only mean one thing, Naomi will go
through hell again."
LOL at you using the name “Shitoria,” but great catch on Naomi. Even
as far back here in segment 1, we see Naomi’s absences having a real effect on
Annabel… even if she doesn’t consciously realize it yet. That thread becomes
painfully clear as the chapter goes on.
"After that, she tries to focus on something more
fun for her: the breaking of our sweet Rebecca with her potent feet. And I’ll
say it again, the work on the descriptions is, another time, stunning. All the
details on the aspect and the stench of Annabel’s feet is perfect; it feels
like the smell is alive, like a monster waiting to eat Rebecca. But no matter
the stink and the dirtiness, it was useless, Rebecca was still standing strong
she have been through so much in her life to surrender to a weak woman Like
Annabel who have only her size for herself."
You can say it again and again… I’ll always appreciate
praise for the descriptive work, because so much time and effort goes into it
:)
And yeah, Rebecca might be small, but she’s survived some huge
things in her life. Annabel definitely had her work cut out for her here.
"I really enjoyed the moment Rebecca realizes she
fucked up, it’s made me smile. It feels like those moments when you insult
someone stronger: you feel powerful in the instant, and then suddenly realize
you fucked up really bad. That’s exactly what happened to Rebecca."
I loved seeing this side of Rebecca again. She always had a
sharp mouth when she and Amber were clashing too, and that same trait keeps
getting her into deeper trouble. Probably not the best habit to have when
you’re surrounded by giants…
But it definitely makes for interesting reading!
"In conclusion, a great opener for what’s coming in
this chapter. I really enjoyed the struggle of Annie, all the descriptions of
her feet and their stench, the rebellious Rebecca who can’t keep her mouth shut
for her own safety, and of course Naomi. I loved the fact that it’s Naomi who
makes things so difficult for Annie, even as she tries to focus on Donnica. But
I feel like she’ll realize soon that someone may be more important than her
goddess mother, someone who could really need her help."
Oh, I’d say there’s definitely another person in Annabel’s
life who’s becoming almost as important to her as her goddess-mother… her
little goth apprentice. And we’re going to see just how important she is
in the coming segments (and chapters!)
Thanks as always for the review, man. This is a heavy
chapter, so I’m really looking forward to your deep dive into the rest of it.
Date: January 07 2026 2:08 AM Title: PART 38
Another fart scene!!! PHENOMENAL!!! Finally the divine queen herself does it as casually as she can to punish ungrateful tinies. Absolutely love the way you write out the fart scenes. Perfect mix of humiliation and stink to it. Especially how you’ll describe the asshole if it’s visible.
The whole part between Rebecca and Annabelle was intense too. Having a Breaker unable to break a tiny, especially one with such great significance to the ones she’s so close too. Desperate enough to the point she was going to crush her even if it ruined said relationship but ending up being defeated and just going to bed. On point.
And then here comes Naomi. Some more insight in her horrible home life. And how she escapes briefly to the safety of Annabelle. I had surely thought Rebecca was going to get crushed until Naomi recognized her. And then the heart to heart between the three of them. Perfect.
Also love Annabelle’s realization that you cant force Rebecca to be the little submissive pet, you have to ease her in, not fight her in it, let her breathe you in on her own terms.
Now Victoria… oh cruel Victoria. In sure she’s an absolutely stunning MILF and I know she offsets it by her horrible attitude and behavior. The way she treats Naomi is awful. And the way the scene played out? The only reason Naomi and Rebecca went back was for the binder and yet that BITCH had to find Rebecca and hold her over her maw and threaten to consume the little one, making Naomi throw and burn all the things that make her Her. And in sure Rebecca is not enjoying the forced new sex toy position with this horrid woman. All I can hope is that Annabelle barges in and saves her before Victoria’s drunk ass actually eats her. Trevor and Amber would be PISSED!
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the feedback on the fart scenes, haha. They’re not really my thing in terms of pure fetish appeal, but I am absolutely LOVING the humiliation they can create. I’m not even forcing them into the story... they just have these perfect, organic moments where they slot right into the narrative. So yeah, there may definitely be more coming.
And yes, it was awesome to finally have Rebecca and Annabel face off. Despite the size difference, they both have this strange resolve and almost equal presence in Donnica and Amber’s household, especially considering they didn’t even know about each other until fairly recently. Seeing them finally clash was a blast.
"Also love Annabelle’s realization that you cant force Rebecca to be the little submissive pet, you have to ease her in, not fight her in it, let her breathe you in on her own terms."
Oh yeah, that whole idea of Rebecca being a “natural slave" was really fun to write, and I do wonder how much truth there is to it. Annabel seems pretty certain Rebecca is more than she appears. I guess we’ll find out just how right she is as things continue!
And I definitely agree: Rebecca is probably NOT enjoying her new role as... ugh, let’s say Victoria’s new bedroom toy. And yes, a woman as horrible and volatile as Victoria? It feels like only a matter of time before she does something truly awful. Let’s just hope something (or someone!) can rescue our tiny little Rebecca before that happens.




[Report This]Date: January 06 2026 1:12 AM Title: PART 38
Holy fuck!!!! …… THREE FART SCENE IN A ROW AND THE BEST ONE YET WITH BEST AND WORST GIRL EVER!!!!!
it was epic enough for her to have the first burp scene ( hopefully we get more of that to lol) but she had the best fart scene in the series so far
Rebecca once again showed why she should be the MC ( for the tiny side of things) and not Trevor !!!! And she did the most and prove she has more value than Trevor but I’ll admit she does have the weaknesses of submitting to the girls…. Well some of them but either way she’s mvp no doubt
Annabel …..she’s growing on me I hope she face justice for her crimes but she is a good person to some degree at least she better than Victoria
Naomi needs to be protected…..granted she’s a killer as well but she’s deserved better than what her mother is providing.
overall great chapter
Author's Response:
Haha, I’m so happy you enjoyed Donnica’s big moment with her ass! She really let those two tiny women have it. I’m having a lot of fun writing scenes like that, so it’s great to hear they’re landing with you guys.
As for Rebecca, I’ve always considered her a co–main protagonist alongside Trevor, but she’s ALWAYS had the “true north” moral compass of the story... and that alone makes her incredibly easy to gravitate toward.
In fact, she’s so strongly morally aligned that even women like Annabel and Naomi can come off as heroes when they’re aligned with Rebecca ;)
Thanks for the feedback as always, man. It really means a lot.




[Report This]Date: January 05 2026 10:42 PM Title: PART 38
Finally, I was waiting this one so much after the end of the last
Author's Response:
Yes... but now you’re waiting VERY intensely for the next one :D




[Report This]Date: December 28 2025 11:11 PM Title: PART 37
Last segment of this amazing chapter, we’re with Trevor again, but only briefly before switching to Rebecca.
First, I really enjoyed the little description of the apartment Trevor has inside the estate. It’s hilarious to see such a stark contrast in the same place: cages built into the kitchen where tinies can be crushed, tortured, and forced to live like abused animals, and then there’s this kind of place with tons of comfort and even perfume to make things better for the tiny. I loved it, it really feels like there’s an entire city inside the estate.
For Trevor, none of that luxury matters much. He’s trapped in his head with everything that’s happened to him, especially what Kassandra told him about Helena, Celine, and herself. The fact that he genuinely cares about Kassandra is beautiful, she needs someone to listen to her in this dark time, even if she doesn’t fully realize it herself.
Now it’s time for the phone call with the lovely Donnica, and I absolutely loved it. It’s so nice to hear such a joyful tone from her after all the darkness in this segment. It’s refreshing to have someone genuinely happy. I also appreciate that she immediately senses something is off with Trevor, you can really feel how deeply she loves him, even if she sometimes struggles to express it properly.
The little tease about “mom-daughter time” is fantastic too, I can’t wait to see their journey and hope their relationship improves. I’m looking forward to seeing the moment when Donnica finally learns the truth about Amber’s past. But that’s for later, so let’s focus on this segment.
Something I loved so much is how Donnica balances being both the lover and the protective mom who wants to call Helena just to make sure Trevor is okay. That part was perfect.
Another great element is Trevor’s inner struggle, we can really feel how rough the last few days have been for him. Putting him through the status-C dilemma is brilliant. I love the evolution: at first he wanted the status-C as a gift to reassure Donnica and help heal her wounds, but now he needs it too. He needs to feel her protection. It’s such an interesting development, early in the story Trevor was a bit reckless, ignoring the dangers, but now he realizes his life is far more fragile than he thought, and after his talk with Kassandra he understands how quickly everything can change and how much he needs to feel loved.
On a funnier note, I really enjoyed Donnica teasing him about pleasing her, being careful not to say too much because Amber is there, but still dropping just enough to fluster Trevor. The rest of the conversation felt casual, like normal couple talk, and it was exactly what we needed, a moment to breathe before the tension ramps up again. And it comes fast when Amber gets on the phone and drops another problem.
Damn, I feel bad for Trevor. The guy has been punished by Severina, locked in a cage, forced to spend time with disgusting tinies, farted and peed on by Lorelei, learned the heartbreaking truth about Kassandra, Helena, and Celine, and now he has yet another issue with Rebecca. Let my guy breathe for God’s sake, lol.
Amber tells him that Scarlett had to leave town with her mom’s for a while, leaving Rebecca alone without enough food or water, and she needs help. Unfortunately, Trevor is stuck in the estate. If he asks for help from the outside Donnica will learn everything, which would make it impossible for Rebecca to stay in the house, or worse, she might end up given to Donnica.
So he has to find another solution. After some thinking and blaming himself for not protecting Rebecca better and making sure she was truly safe, he comes up with one even if it’s far from ideal. It’s the only option: call the devil herself, Annabel.
When he tells Amber, she can’t accept it at first, but there really is no other choice.
With that, we leave Trevor and switch to Rebecca, who’s been waiting for Scarlett, who should have been there hours ago. Before diving into this part, I want to say I loved the echo of the first segment. It’s really interesting to put Rebecca in a similar situation, but with an outcome that will be way different and far more uncomfortable for her.
The second half of the segment is masterful, the buildup through Rebecca’s thoughts, the fear, the hope, the rationality, until the door opens and she realizes something is wrong because those aren’t Scarlett’s footsteps.
Once again, the descriptions in this chapter are perfect. The level of detail is fantastic: Annabel’s footsteps, Rebecca’s terror, every nuance of Annabel’s face and gaze, the fact that she waits until she’s fully inside Amber’s room to take off her shoes so Rebecca gets the full impact of her foot smell after a long day, and then the description of that smell and its overwhelming power, it’s beyond perfect. Also, Rebecca’s struggle to stay strong in front of Annabel… everything comes together beautifully.
On a more personal note, I’m happy to finally get a stinky-foot moment with Annabel, even if I’d have preferred that moment with another tinies instead of the sweat Rebecca .I loved how you showed the massive power imbalance, just the smell of Annabel’s feet is almost enough to make Rebecca surrender.
For Rebecca it’s a desperate fight; for Annabel it’s just casual fun after a long day. She enjoys it because she knows exactly how weak Rebecca is to her. The smell alone could break her, but that’s not enough, Annabel wants to make sure she’s completely beaten.
Rebecca tries the same tactic she used on Scarlett in segment one, standing her ground and asking her to leave, but she’s not facing the same giantess. One is sweet like sugar, a goddess of kindness; the other is far crueller and more dominant. Annabel isn’t just going to walk away. She’ll take Rebecca with her, not gently in her purse after making sure she’s safe and sound, no—she’ll put her inside one of her shoes, right under her stinky foot, forcing her to breathe nothing but that smell. And that’s how this incredible chapter ends.
In conclusion: a fantastic segment. I can’t wait to see what Annabel does with Rebecca, though I don’t think it will be that awful. I even suspect they might get along, especially since they’re the only two people who truly cared about Naomi. I’d love to see them become friends, gossip about Trevor, or maybe even fall for each other to complicate things further and put Rebecca between the possessive Amber, the kind Scarlett, and the crazy Annabel. This last segment makes it clear it’s impossible for Rebecca to keep living in Donnica’s house like this. Can’t wait to see which direction you choose for her. Also, going back to Trevor’s part, that little phone call with Donnica was amazing a little time to breath before another big change for the story .To wrap up the whole chapter: congratulations again, this one was absolutely fantastic and will change the story forever in so many ways. Can’t wait to read chapter 38 in just over a week. Thanks again, bro, for your work. Love ya.
Author's Response:
"First, I really enjoyed the little description of
the apartment Trevor has inside the estate. It’s hilarious to see such a stark
contrast in the same place: cages built into the kitchen where tinies can be
crushed, tortured, and forced to live like abused animals, and then there’s
this kind of place with tons of comfort and even perfume to make things better
for the tiny. I loved it, it really feels like there’s an entire city inside
the estate."
Not only is there an entire city inside the estate… there’s
a whole kingdom ;)
Building the estate into this sprawling place that can
support all these mixed-size relationships, societies, and adventures has been
a blast. I can’t wait to show off more of what’s hiding there.
"For Trevor, none of that luxury matters much. He’s
trapped in his head with everything that’s happened to him, especially what
Kassandra told him about Helena, Celine, and herself. The fact that he
genuinely cares about Kassandra is beautiful, she needs someone to listen to
her in this dark time, even if she doesn’t fully realize it herself."
Yes! I loved finally showing Kassandra needing Trevor… or
maybe “letting herself be vulnerable” is the better way to put it. Up to now,
she’s always been the one steering the ship, so it felt right to flip that and
have her be the one who needs someone. And I think it was nice seeing Trevor
actually take that to heart, as we watch him reflect on everything he’s
learned.
"Now it’s time for the phone call with the lovely
Donnica, and I absolutely loved it. It’s so nice to hear such a joyful tone
from her after all the darkness in this segment. It’s refreshing to have
someone genuinely happy. I also appreciate that she immediately senses
something is off with Trevor, you can really feel how deeply she loves him,
even if she sometimes struggles to express it properly."
Yeah, that was my favorite part about their conversation…
Donnica picking up immediately that something was wrong. When someone knows you
well enough to sense that just from a phone call, that says a lot. They’re
messy, but Trevor and Donnica’s relationship has sturdy legs under it.
"The little tease about “mom-daughter time” is
fantastic too, I can’t wait to see their journey and hope their relationship
improves. I’m looking forward to seeing the moment when Donnica finally learns
the truth about Amber’s past. But that’s for later, so let’s focus on this
segment."
Oh, you’ll be seeing plenty of Donnica-and-Amber time soon ;)
"Another great element is Trevor’s inner struggle,
we can really feel how rough the last few days have been for him. Putting him
through the status-C dilemma is brilliant. I love the evolution: at first he
wanted the status-C as a gift to reassure Donnica and help heal her wounds, but
now he needs it too. He needs to feel her protection. It’s such an interesting
development, early in the story Trevor was a bit reckless, ignoring the
dangers, but now he realizes his life is far more fragile than he thought, and
after his talk with Kassandra he understands how quickly everything can change
and how much he needs to feel loved."
I love that you pointed this out! It felt like the right
moment for Trevor to finally see Status-C from a place of vulnerability instead
of power. It complicates how he views his own size, and it shows him reaching
for love and protection when he’s mentally at a low point… even if, like you
said, Donnica’s version of “protection” isn’t always perfectly placed.
"Damn, I feel bad for Trevor. The guy has been
punished by Severina, locked in a cage, forced to spend time with disgusting
tinies, farted and peed on by Lorelei, learned the heartbreaking truth about
Kassandra, Helena, and Celine, and now he has yet another issue with Rebecca.
Let my guy breathe for God’s sake, lol."
Trevor might finally get a little downtime next time we see
him… maybe!
"So he has to find another solution. After some
thinking and blaming himself for not protecting Rebecca better and making sure
she was truly safe, he comes up with one even if it’s far from ideal. It’s the
only option: call the devil herself, Annabel."
I really loved how this worked out! I think most readers
assumed Annabel and Rebecca would cross paths again... but what I enjoyed was
making it happen because she was asked back. Literally invited into the room
with Rebecca. It’s a small detail, but I love moments like that (just like when
Donnica asked Annabel to take Trevor into the workshop... again we assumed that
Trevor might end up in the workshop but having it done that way, Donnica
asking, was a neat twist). Those little setups are some of my favorite things
to play with while writing.
"With that, we leave Trevor and switch to Rebecca,
who’s been waiting for Scarlett, who should have been there hours ago. Before
diving into this part, I want to say I loved the echo of the first segment.
It’s really interesting to put Rebecca in a similar situation, but with an
outcome that will be way different and far more uncomfortable for her."
Great catch! I absolutely wrote those two segments to mirror
each other… the warm, hopeful anticipation of Scarlett against the almost
predatory dread of Annabel’s arrival. I’m glad that contrast landed for you.
"On a more personal note, I’m happy to finally get a
stinky-foot moment with Annabel, even if I’d have preferred that moment with
another tinies instead of the sweat Rebecca .I loved how you showed the massive
power imbalance, just the smell of Annabel’s feet is almost enough to make
Rebecca surrender."
Haha… I was actually thinking about you when I wrote that. I
knew you’d been waiting for Annabel foot content, but also that Rebecca is one
of your favorites, so I figured this might hit you in a weird place.
But yeah, finally letting Annabel kick off her shoes and
unleash those toes was so fun to write… and our star Breaker may not be done
yet!
"Rebecca tries the same tactic she used on Scarlett
in segment one, standing her ground and asking her to leave, but she’s not
facing the same giantess. One is sweet like sugar, a goddess of kindness; the
other is far crueller and more dominant. Annabel isn’t just going to walk away.
She’ll take Rebecca with her, not gently in her purse after making sure she’s
safe and sound, no—she’ll put her inside one of her shoes, right under her
stinky foot, forcing her to breathe nothing but that smell. And that’s how this
incredible chapter ends."
The big takeaway for me was that Rebecca refused to be
bullied like the first time. She remembered exactly how Annabel made her feel,
and it pissed her off. She stood her ground.
Unfortunately for her, she’s still tiny, so there’s only so
much ground she can hold before she’s shoved in a shoe… but hey, the
defiance is real!
"In conclusion: a fantastic segment. I can’t wait to
see what Annabel does with Rebecca, though I don’t think it will be that awful.
I even suspect they might get along, especially since they’re the only two
people who truly cared about Naomi. I’d love to see them become friends, gossip
about Trevor, or maybe even fall for each other to complicate things further
and put Rebecca between the possessive Amber, the kind Scarlett, and the crazy
Annabel. This last segment makes it clear it’s impossible for Rebecca to keep
living in Donnica’s house like this. Can’t wait to see which direction you
choose for her. Also, going back to Trevor’s part, that little phone call with
Donnica was amazing a little time to breath before another big change for the
story .To wrap up the whole chapter: congratulations again, this one was
absolutely fantastic and will change the story forever in so many ways. Can’t
wait to read chapter 38 in just over a week. Thanks again, bro, for your work.
Love ya."
I’m loving all the theories about what Annabel might do now
that she has Rebecca. Things are going to get… interesting next chapter, that’s
for sure.
And I’m really glad the Trevor/Donnica phone call stood out
to you, that little breather was so fun to write in the middle of everything
else crashing down.
…and I don’t think things are getting any less intense from
here :0
Thanks as always for the amazing review, it was such a great read, and the next chapter isn’t far off. Soon we find out the fate of tiny Rebecca!




[Report This]Date: December 26 2025 12:04 PM Title: PART 37
Time for the big segment of this chapter, and it’s a really important one that will change the story forever.
First, I really loved the fact that every time something bad happened to Trevor in the estate, he ended up in Kassandra’s office. It looks like she is his personal therapist, it’s always make me smile.
The way Kassandra deals with things is perfect; she always finds the perfect way to make people go in the direction she wants them to, without having to fight for it. And with Trevor this time, it’s like that again: when he threatens to tell everything to Donnica, she just tell him how it would only make things even more difficult for Trevor’s status-C issue, and she even makes him realize he is the one who put himself in this situation by provoking Helena. The moment Trevor realizes it but is too proud to say it to Kassandra was also fun.
Something really stunning in this segment is Trevor’s reaction to everything, fear, anger, and also disgust toward the other tinies. Even if he doesn’t say it or maybe even realize it himself, we can feel it. It was the same when Annabel showed him her slaves: he wasn’t sorry for them; he despised them for not being able to stand up for themselves and just accept their bad conditions.
When Kassandra tells him about them, we can feel it, he can’t accept the fact that they ended up like that. Naturally, he tries to find some sort of explanation like the torture of the goddess of this kind of stuff.
I also loved the rank stuff; even if it’s really messed up, I find it great in the context of DAW. The fact that there is a hierarchy even among the giantesses is good too, even if I don’t think it’s the best one. Considering the “goddesses” we’ve already seen, I’m not sure they are the best choices, for example, Penelope and Lorelei don’t feel like the best candidates to be goddesses, but that’s only my opinion.
Then comes the core of the discussion: the one and only Celine and the feelings Trevor has toward her. Juliette saw Trevor change when she was involved; I really loved that little detail. The fact that it’s Juliette who saw it shows she cares about Trevor. Kassandra wants to know what happened between them. The funny thing is Trevor doesn’t even know his real feelings toward Celine.
The fact that he realizes Kassandra knows her well and that there is obviously something between the two women is a fantastic teasing for the big revelation who are coming.
Before he can ask more questions, a giantess comes into the kingdom, and not just any random giantess, but the ruler of this place herself: the beautiful and powerful goddess Helena. And I have to say, the work on her arrival is stunning, one of the best in the entire story, and considering how good it has been all along, I don’t say that lightly. Every detail is fantastic; we really get the impression of a goddess descending from Olympus to the mortal realm. The fact that you added the reactions of the people in the kingdom to her arrival is a little detail that adds so much.
Something important is that she is not alone, she brings Celine with her, inside her cage, obviously. The way you represent it is also fantastic: Celine being exposed like some kind of treasure or some kind of beast, with Helena only looking at the cage and Celine as if there is nothing else in the place, it adds even more god-like vibes to the entire scene.
After that, we go back to Trevor, and once again he loses it and wants to free her, even though he has no chance at all. After all, he is no match for Helena, a single toe of hers is more powerful than Trevor’s entire body, but he still wants to go.
It’s really funny to see him lose it again after everything he’s already gone through. He is ready to risk it all; even Kassandra’s wise words can’t reach him, even logic can’t. I really loved this moment, he is fully in Donnica mode: no logic, no thinking, only action lead by his anger.
I also loved the way you show how Trevor cares about Celine with the little talk about Donnica and Annabel owning slaves, but she is not like them she is better she is worse to fight for.
Here comes the core of this segment: the revelation. For once, Kassandra puts down her mask and shows her weakness. For once, she is not the master of the situation; she doesn’t have any rational things to say to Trevor, only the truth about Celine’s story.
Kassandra is Celine’s sister, and it’s only the beginning of the revelations.
Before going into the details, I really loved how you set up all of that, it’s fantastic work as always. The number of little details is so well done; it adds so much depth to everything. Like for Kassandra, all the work on her expressions, the fact that she goes to sit near Trevor to tell him the whole truth adds so much more depth to the character.
We can feel Kassandra’s struggle, her pain and suffering, the same as Celine’s, but expressed so differently.
Now it’s time for the entire story, at least Kassandra’s view of it. We learn some things, even if some of them were already known to us, like the fact that Helena had a terrible childhood, her rivalry with Celine, and maybe even the love between them (even if we didn’t know that for sure, we could have guessed it). Even though we knew some of it, it’s nice to see glimpses of their past, and I really enjoyed the anecdote about the competition where Helena lost it after all the pressure she had been through her entire life, and Celine comforting her later instead of delivering the final blow who could have been disastrous for Helena.
It makes me remember earlier when Rebecca could have done the same to Amber but chose not to. It’s interesting because I see a lot of parallels between Amber/Rebecca and Celine/Helena, and this kind of memory shows it even more, even if I hope for Amber and my sweet Rebecca things will end up better.
Sadly, the story is far from over. Even if things look better for a little while, when the virus strikes, everything changes. And the worst is when Theodora got a version of the virus to kill within few month, leaving Kassandra and Celine alone in a losing battle, with the only choice being to give everything to Helena to protect it.
Sadly, the loss of Theodora changes Celine forever, turning her into a different version of herself, turning against everyone who loved and cared for her: Kassandra and Helena.
I really enjoyed the moment Trevor tells Kassandra it must have been hard for her, but she answers that it was way harder for Helena. And I really loved this part because since the beginning we’ve seen Helena through Trevor’s eyes, he doesn’t like her, so she was portrayed as the evilest woman ever. But with this, we see she is just beyond broken. She has lost the people she cared about most: the love of her life, Celine, who now acts like she took everything from her while Helena was just trying her best to save it for her even betraying her family for that. She also lost Theodora; even if she wasn’t her biological mother, she was the only one who acted like a mother toward her.
We also learn that the kingdom in its current form is Theodora’s vision, she truly believed in the hierarchy of the goddesses, and the entire place is designed for them and their power. Celine agreed with that; she even worked on the throne.
Sadly, when Theodora passed away, everything changed. Celine and Helena would never be the same again, turning their loss into pain and sorrow, turning Helena into a control freak ready to destroy everyone who challenges her, and Celine into a creature of hatred moved only by the will to destroy Helena.
We also learn why Celine is trapped: she is dangerous for the people inside the kingdom. She would never hurt the place itself, but she would hurt the people she considers traitors and thieves. And with that, we understand everything, and maybe even more: Trevor’s mission, and why even Juliette wants him in the kingdom to save Helena from the darkness she is surrounded by. Trevor is the only light left that can dissipate Helena’s darkness .
And the segment ends with a silent face-off between Helena and Celine, with this sentence that summarizes their current relationship: “A hate so pure, so refined, it could only have been forged in love.”
In conclusion, an incredible segment—maybe one of, if not the best of the story. Everything is perfect; it changes the entire perspective of the story and gives way more depth to many characters, especially Helena. We knew her life was difficult, but we can only truly realize it now. I loved the change in Celine’s character: since the beginning she was seen as the victim of Helena and the other goddesses, but if everything Kassandra said is true, she is far from a victim, we could even say she deserved to be locked up. The fact that you really add the human side to the characters is fantastic: your characters are not good or bad just for the story to move on; they all have a past that turned them into what they are. It’s interesting. Also Kassandra in this segment was perfect it was great but also sad to see the real Kassandra and everything she have to do and the moral conflict she is between her sisters Helena and the legacy of Theodora we can see she always make herself go after the others every time Trevor speak about how difficult it must have been for her she said it was harder for other, I find that really sad and I truly hope Trevor will be able to fix this situation.
I don’t know what more to say except well done, the story gets better with every segment; it’s incredible, even if it makes it even more difficult to wait for the next chapter. And now I can’t wait for the next meeting between Trevor and Helena since he knows the truth, hope it will be sooner rather than later. Thanks again, bro, for this incredible work.
Author's Response:
"First, I really loved the fact that every time
something bad happened to Trevor in the estate, he ended up in Kassandra’s
office. It looks like she is his personal therapist, it’s always make me
smile."
haha I wondered how people would take that! Trevor landing
there in back-to-back chapters right after something awful happens… she really does
end up acting like his therapist sometimes, doesn’t she?
"The way Kassandra deals with things is perfect; she
always finds the perfect way to make people go in the direction she wants them
to, without having to fight for it. And with Trevor this time, it’s like that
again: when he threatens to tell everything to Donnica, she just tell him how
it would only make things even more difficult for Trevor’s status-C issue, and
she even makes him realize he is the one who put himself in this situation by
provoking Helena. The moment Trevor realizes it but is too proud to say it to
Kassandra was also fun."
Yeah, that “soft power” is one of my favorite parts of her.
She may not match Celine’s raw intellect, but she’s incredibly socially
intelligent. She reads people and rooms instantly, and with Trevor she nudges
instead of pushes… and still gets exactly where she wants him.
"I also loved the rank stuff; even if it’s really
messed up, I find it great in the context of DAW. The fact that there is a
hierarchy even among the giantesses is good too, even if I don’t think it’s the
best one. Considering the “goddesses” we’ve already seen, I’m not sure they are
the best choices, for example, Penelope and Lorelei don’t feel like the best
candidates to be goddesses, but that’s only my opinion."
It really does feel like the Sisterhood believes some women
are simply born goddesses… and that personality almost doesn’t matter at
times. Unfortunately for the tinies, sometimes that “chosen one” ends up being
people like Lorelei and Penelope.
"Then comes the core of the discussion: the one and
only Celine and the feelings Trevor has toward her. Juliette saw Trevor change
when she was involved; I really loved that little detail. The fact that it’s
Juliette who saw it shows she cares about Trevor. Kassandra wants to know what
happened between them. The funny thing is Trevor doesn’t even know his real
feelings toward Celine."
I loved getting to slip that detail in, and that it’s Juliette
who noticed. It shows both her perception and (maybe quietly) that she actually
does care about Trevor. She may disagree with Helena at times, but she can
still see the value in her plan. (and in Trevor as well!)
"Before he can ask more questions, a giantess comes
into the kingdom, and not just any random giantess, but the ruler of this place
herself: the beautiful and powerful goddess Helena. And I have to say, the work
on her arrival is stunning, one of the best in the entire story, and
considering how good it has been all along, I don’t say that lightly. Every
detail is fantastic; we really get the impression of a goddess descending from
Olympus to the mortal realm. The fact that you added the reactions of the people
in the kingdom to her arrival is a little detail that adds so much."
Thank you so much for calling that out! Her entrance needed
to land. It’s the scene that sets the stage for everything that follows (all
the revelations!) so it had to feel monumental. And who better to do that with
than Helena herself?
"It’s really funny to see him lose it again after
everything he’s already gone through. He is ready to risk it all; even
Kassandra’s wise words can’t reach him, even logic can’t. I really loved this
moment, he is fully in Donnica mode: no logic, no thinking, only action lead by
his anger."
Haha, yes… I love that parallel. Moments like this show
Trevor and Donnica might be more alike than they’d ever admit. And honestly, if
Kassandra hadn’t stopped him, he might’ve been staring up at Helena’s foot real
fast.
"Before going into the details, I really loved how
you set up all of that, it’s fantastic work as always. The number of little
details is so well done; it adds so much depth to everything. Like for
Kassandra, all the work on her expressions, the fact that she goes to sit near
Trevor to tell him the whole truth adds so much more depth to the
character."
Great catch… that shift was intentional. Sitting beside him
was meant to show vulnerability, to signal how serious what she’s about to say
really is. For once, Trevor becomes the one comforting her. And that signals
something important in the story is about to happen!
"Now it’s time for the entire story, at least
Kassandra’s view of it. We learn some things, even if some of them were already
known to us, like the fact that Helena had a terrible childhood, her rivalry
with Celine, and maybe even the love between them (even if we didn’t know that
for sure, we could have guessed it). Even though we knew some of it, it’s nice
to see glimpses of their past, and I really enjoyed the anecdote about the
competition where Helena lost it after all the pressure she had been through
her entire life, and Celine comforting her later instead of delivering the
final blow who could have been disastrous for Helena."
I love that you phrased it as “Kassandra’s view of it.”
Makes you wonder how much of it is pure truth… and how much is framing. It
definitely sets up some interesting tension for the next time Trevor and Celine
talk.
"It makes me remember earlier when Rebecca could
have done the same to Amber but chose not to. It’s interesting because I see a
lot of parallels between Amber/Rebecca and Celine/Helena, and this kind of
memory shows it even more, even if I hope for Amber and my sweet Rebecca things
will end up better."
I really like that comparison… you’ve mentioned it before,
and it keeps fitting more. Celine/Helena almost feel like a warning for what
Amber/Rebecca could become if things twist the wrong way. A darker
mirror. Granted there are more tragic circumstances with the older pair, but still,
it is something of a cautionary tale of love turned to hate!
"I really enjoyed the moment Trevor tells Kassandra
it must have been hard for her, but she answers that it was way harder for
Helena. And I really loved this part because since the beginning we’ve seen
Helena through Trevor’s eyes, he doesn’t like her, so she was portrayed as the
evilest woman ever. But with this, we see she is just beyond broken. She has
lost the people she cared about most: the love of her life, Celine, who now
acts like she took everything from her while Helena was just trying her best to
save it for her even betraying her family for that. She also lost Theodora;
even if she wasn’t her biological mother, she was the only one who acted like a
mother toward her."
I’m so glad you highlighted Theodora loss. Losing her really
was like losing a mother for Helena, even if the story didn’t spell it out
directly. And yeah, seeing Helena from another angle softens her. She becomes
wounded, not just tyrannical.
Where she goes from here is going to be interesting…
"Sadly, when Theodora passed away, everything
changed. Celine and Helena would never be the same again, turning their loss
into pain and sorrow, turning Helena into a control freak ready to destroy
everyone who challenges her, and Celine into a creature of hatred moved only by
the will to destroy Helena."
Well put… we’ve now established the heart of one of the
story’s biggest conflicts. Helena’s cold heart against Celine’s rage. Their
grief poisoned everything. And the ripples have reshaped the entire Kingdom.
"We also learn why Celine is trapped: she is
dangerous for the people inside the kingdom. She would never hurt the place
itself, but she would hurt the people she considers traitors and thieves. And
with that, we understand everything, and maybe even more: Trevor’s mission, and
why even Juliette wants him in the kingdom to save Helena from the darkness she
is surrounded by. Trevor is the only light left that can dissipate Helena’s
darkness ."
I was really curious if readers would pick up on that note,
that Celine isn’t dangerous to the Kingdom, but to its people. It
puts her in a very different light… and makes her return feel all the more
loaded.
"In conclusion, an incredible segment—maybe one of,
if not the best of the story. Everything is perfect; it changes the entire
perspective of the story and gives way more depth to many characters,
especially Helena. We knew her life was difficult, but we can only truly
realize it now. I loved the change in Celine’s character: since the beginning
she was seen as the victim of Helena and the other goddesses, but if everything
Kassandra said is true, she is far from a victim, we could even say she deserved
to be locked up. The fact that you really add the human side to the characters
is fantastic: your characters are not good or bad just for the story to move
on; they all have a past that turned them into what they are. It’s interesting.
Also Kassandra in this segment was perfect it was great but also sad to see the
real Kassandra and everything she have to do and the moral conflict she is
between her sisters Helena and the legacy of Theodora we can see she always
make herself go after the others every time Trevor speak about how difficult it
must have been for her she said it was harder for other, I find that really sad
and I truly hope Trevor will be able to fix this situation."
What an amazing review… totally worthy of the segment. I’m
really happy the characters feel layered to you. Up to now, Celine’s been
almost unquestionably “the victim,” and shifting that perspective opens so many
interesting doors. And yeah, it’s great seeing how it really makes you want to
see some kind of resolution. I’m happy the revelations have been so well
received.
"I don’t know what more to say except well done, the
story gets better with every segment; it’s incredible, even if it makes it even
more difficult to wait for the next chapter. And now I can’t wait for the next
meeting between Trevor and Helena since he knows the truth, hope it will be
sooner rather than later. Thanks again, bro, for this incredible work."
Thank you for such a thoughtful breakdown… it was a
great read. I’m really glad the excitement for what’s next is still there. I
guess that means I’m doing my job as a writer haha
Not long now for the next chapter :D