Thanks for the review! Yeah, outlines are one of those things I really didn't appreciate when I was in high school, but gained a greater appreciation for later in college and as I started writing larger works, especially fiction. While they can help structure reports and essays in non-fiction, I find they're invaluable for setting things up and paying them off later to make a satisfying story. 

I'm currently writing two stories at once right now so I'm not sure when I'll next update this guide, but dialogue is one of the things I plan to touch upon. I'm not sure if I'll incorporate it into "flavoring your story" or give it a dedicated chapter to itself, but for what it's worth, I think the dialogue in Mega Laetitia is totally fine. Yes, it's a little simplistic, but I think that works well for your protagonist as she's overcome by lust and her primal instincts. I would even say the dialogue so far is very immersive in that regard. Flustered people in the midst of euphoria aren't exactly the wittiest of folks! You do a good job of changing her tone from her own perspective and that of the little people with the use of caps and I feel that the dialogue of minor characters has largely managed to facilitate the scenes where it's present. With that said, Mega Laetitia hits on a lot of tropes of the genre in all of the best ways. It's one of my favorite "classic gts rampage stories" and takes me back to my adolescence when I first started reading this stuff. Maybe I'm giving you too much credit and I'm wearing nostalgia glasses, but I've really enjoyed it. ;)

One thing I would stress with dialogue is that it's not merely spoken words; it's also the actions around the words. So consider what you are trying to impart to the reader and the tone of the scene. If you have a fast-paced action scene, give us the words quickly and with little flare so they have a minimal disruptive impact. Inversely, if you are trying to create a feeling of dread, give us vivid descriptions of what's going on around the spoken words to make the scene last longer and really immerse the reader while building suspense. I generally try to space out my reviews for stories, but since my last review was a little "short and sweet" I'll be happy to re-read your newest chapter (I already read it the day it came out XD) and give you more detailed feedback about what I feel you're doing well and also how it could be improved. That said, I still felt it was a five-star chapter and don't recall having any complaints. 

Also, if you want to have a bit more of a back-and-forth, you can find me on the GTSworld discord. I think you're already in there, so feel free to ping me (@Germanicus).