[Report This]Date: May 15 2025 5:58 PM Title: Interplanetary Peace Agreement Mission
we really could use more giga boy content and you did a decent job emphasizing Shion's overwhelming scale! lotta good attention to the unintentional and effortless devastation. that being said, I did personally find it a somewhat rough read due to bits of clunky sentence structuring, blunt delivery, and strange wording. the first two are understandable things early on and definitely keep using the same words if those are what get ya going, though there's better options at least in this reader's opinion
mainly the "dick cheese" and "fishy" scents make me gag a bit. the name for smegma is pretty interchangeable, but adjectives like "pungent" or "profuse" for smells allow more varied and potentially preferred interpretations for the reader while still getting the idea across. quite awkward to read cheese-based slang in the story's serious narration or recall a memory like opening a can of rotten anchovies in the middle of what was meant to be an arousing part
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the review! English isn’t my first language so I use dictionaries to find fitting synonyms. But I fear that some people won’t understand more niche and unpopular synonyms. I’ll definitely try to make my writing more diverse.