Reviewer: Xander1995 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 28 2025 1:15 AM Title: Sunday 6:00 pm (Rear Content)

I would like to take a minute to share my feedback on this story.  As a quick disclaimer, this is just my personal opinion and any negative criticism should NOT be taken to mean I dislike the story.  Quite the opposite, I absolutely loved this story, and as far as vore-theme fetish stories go, this was one of (if not THE) best one I've read.  That being said, there was one element to the story I've found to be common in your stories that I'm not a fan of...

First, what I liked about this story:

I LOVE when the pred taunts and plays with their victim.  The way she constantly talked to him about where he was going to end up and making a show out of it.  I love when authors make the prey's fear seem genuine, when the reality of their fate sets in but they know they can do nothing to stop it.  Specifically I loved the final chapter when she talked about "the rest of {her} breakfast would join him" after her shower really degrades the victim and makes them feel helpless and insignificant.

Now, the one part of the story I dislike, and I would like to reemphasize that this is just my personal opinion, is the descriptions of physical pain.  I'm all about humiliation and degradation, and implied death is fine, but it takes a lot out of the erotic experience for me when I'm being reminded how much pain the victim is in.  When you describe limbs snapping, and bones breaking, I find it a bit hard to focus on the erotic humiliation of the experience.  Perhaps fewer mentions of victims being physically harmed, and more mentions of the fear that grips the victims as their fate becomes reality.

Overall, this story was very well done and I'm a fan of your work.  Keep it up!  9/10!

Author's Response:

Thank you for your thoughtful  response! It was genuinely helpful and I'll keep it mind in any future stories