Hi! I just finished reading your story, and wow your writing is so rich in detail and emotion. I really enjoyed it! You have such a creative mind, and I think your story would make an amazing comic.

Would you be interested in discussing that idea? I'm a paid artist with friendly rates, and I love bringing stories to life through visuals. I'd be excited to take your story to the next level!

Feel free to reach out to me via Discord aeroo_draws Hope to hear from you soon

It's a monster horror type story and for that it's pretty good. There are moments of really good descriptions peppered throughout. There is some good dialogue throughout like the talk about ruining lives.

After being raped for days her say "I am the rapist now" is in very poor taste for a woman who was raped for days, she wouldn't ever want to be on the same level as them. But you can chock that up to the blanket statement 'She's insane now'.

Your wording is awkward in quite a few places sometimes words are skipped, it's a proofreading thing which is a pain in the butt. Your paragraphs often don't have a reason to stop and start a new paragraph. It feels random most of the time. As if it's, oh this is more than three lines, I better make a new paragraph kind of thing. Instead of a change in topic or a change in who is speaking causing new paragraph to begin.

Dialogue often feels too short and stunted, which makes the characters all appear to be less intelligent. So it prevents it from feeling like she is fully relishing her revenge and delighting in it. Then at the end where she says I am not a monster feels so stupid and doesn't match at all what she has done. Like it's just imitating story tropes like an AI would. She knows she is a monster but just what kind of monster does she choose to be, one who helps good people and punishes the bad, or one who is worse than the people who did this to her. The talk about ruining lives went there a bit to prevent her from becoming worse than who did this to her.

It's written in 3rd person, but reads like a 1st person story because we only ever see her thoughts and no one else's.

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