Date: August 29 2026 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 1: Big Little Sister
Idea: have one of them force "Bubby" to lick the dog's feet clean.
Just a suggestion.
Author's Response:
Nice to know you like giant animal content as well. I might expand have Priscilla (The Family Dog) involved in more interactions later on including paw content.
Next chapter will be focusing on Ella's breakfast, like the commissioner wanted, which include lots of soft vore, pancakes and maple syrup!! It will be a big one :)
[Report This]Date: August 21 2026 12:46 AM Title: Chapter 1: Big Little Sister
After 84 long years, you're finally back!! Lol
This time you didn't write a story related to Antopia, Hook Up, or ants in general, but a completely original story (although, well, it is a commission).
I like that this story is set 150 years in the future, which gives us a scenario where the events of this world like the shrinking virus and tinies are already established. I liked the inclusion of the wild tinies; having been small their entire lives, they were forced to live in the wild and behave like urban tribes. I wouldn't be surprised if the concept of Borrowers also exist in this universe: tiny beings that live in the walls of human houses and only come out for borrow resources, like objects that humans wouldn't even notice are missing. If that's the case, I wouldn't be surprised if extermination agencies knew about it and had a protocol for releasing toxic gas in the walls or some kind of Mortain, though I don't know if they intend to use the opportunity to capture them alive and hand them over the large society.
This is the first time you've used the second perspective; it's good to experiment, but I have a problem with how you're introducing it. Since the character "Bubby" has already a past and a personality, it's difficult to put ourselves in his shoes or identify with him. Other authors, like Vortexfoods, have done the same, but they give their characters a vague backstory so we feel like we're inside their lives and the events. Even so, I'm curious to follow Bubby's story and see how it unfolds.
I can see the hint you made to Bubby's father, or rather, to our father. Suddendly disappearing while our mother was 6 months pregnant with Ella, he he he. Possibly, due to his past, as you told us, the mother decided to use him as protein for her 6-month-old daughter in her womb. If that's the case, I hope you'll later share the father's pov on his fate, as I appreciate your descriptions and how you detail everything.
You didn't miss the opportunity to show the cruelty of that world towards the tinies, like the barbecue and how they cook them alive like kebabs. Uncle Jack's words about that tribe of tiny savages being smarter than he thought give me the theory that in the future of this universe, the tinies will become more intelligent than humans because of having to live in the shadows and adapt.
I hope we see more of Uncle Jack and his niece, the one Bubby putted tinies in her salad on her back, to give us another perspective on how the bigs treat the tinies.
To be honest, I thought we will see an insect or wild animal in Antopia first confronting the protagonist. I mean, in "Honey, I Shrunk the Kids" we had a scorpion, and in "Ant-Bully" a toad, so it wouldn't surprise me if you followed that path in Antopia, but I liked the details you included about its body, like its weak points where it could attack.
I felt bad for Jasmine's father. I feel like she could have hurt Ella if she had attacked another spot, like her heel, causing a cut instead of aiming for her fingers.
I like how you always write kids like Lucy or those who tormented Anura in her dream behaving according to their age. For example, Ella squeezed Jasmine's breasts because it was the first time she'd seen a tiny, wild female, and she decided to examine and play with her feminine parts, which she didn't yet have. But if I'm honest, I thought she would eat Jasmine, since she would have thought that if she ate her, her breasts would develop and grow like hers in the future.
Although Ella didn't actually eat Jasmine, in a way, putting her in her pocket could have indicated the same thing, since when you eat somenthing, part of what you ingest becomes part of you. Ella didn't eat Jasmine, but in a way, it could represent the same thing, since swallowing her alive into her pocket in front of her belly could indicate that she's now a part of her.
I felt bad for Bubby when Ella decided to play hide and squish, as well as for her cruelty towards her brother. During that whole search, I felt like Bubby was an insect trying to escape a human who wanted to squash him, which makes me wonder how dangerous Ella would be if she had been born in the Antopia universe and was an ant-bully. I'm not sure if she would surpass Lucy or Monique in how twisted she can be, especially because of her obsession with taking pictures of the squashed bodies of the tinies she herself decides to squash.
I liked the detail that Ella has her own spot or place to crush the tinies she capture; it reminds me of how animals like to lure their prey to a specific place to kill them. It was a nice touch on your part to show us her predatory mindset and Bubby's prey position.
I don't usually into crush or feet, but I love the details you put into making the scene more traumatic and disturbing, like the disgusting state of Ella's foot and how Bubby's internal organs are crushed until his body just burst into a bloody mess.
I hope the next chapter comes out soon, and good luck writing the rest of this story.
Author's Response:
Hi thanks for reviewing :) What a long review!!
Yeah, the story being set 150 years in the future is a nice
touch that I actually came with since it gives a lot of time where the concept
the shrinking virus and shrinkies have already been established for at least 3
generations. Another way to look at this is to think about how much changed between
1876 and 2026, since it’s the same time frame.
The time frame also allows me to create the concept of wild
shrinkies, yeah people you have been born small and remain small for their
entire lives. 150 years allows at least 3 to 4 generations of wild shrinkies to
be established already while interacting with unfortunate shrinkies which are
people who were once normal sized but caught the virus and shrunk down,
allowing some unique perspectives. Yeah, wild shrinkies are very similar to
borrowers but in this world rather than exterminating them with pesticide as
was actually once done around 50 years ago, this party actually makes the normal
sized population have a taste for their flesh. Instead of being killed immediately
all shrinkies are hunted down like wild animals by government agencies and
captured to processed into food.
Writing in second person is the hardest thing to do. Yeah, I
decided to give Bubby more of unlikable personality because I always write from
nice, dorky protagonists so I decided to switch it up a bit and write from the
POV of a more asshole, jerk character who somewhat deserves his fate. I did
need to give a past to be honest though since this story primarily deals with
family members, rather than just random people. If it was random people, it
would be easier to keep his backstory vague. I am quite different from this character
myself, not being white and a bully. However, I think it is still possible to
imagine yourself as him which is why I deliberately kept his appearance vague
apart from being white. It might not work as well with female readers though,
since this is told from the male perspective lol.
The father’s fate will be revealed later on in the story and
it will shock you. Not revealing anything yet because spoilers lol.
Yeah, the main character is not a nice person, in fact he has
engaged in shrinkie cruelty himself, which is why I added details about him barbecuing
shrinkies alive for his ex-girlfriend. Jack saying wild shrinkies are more intelligent
that people give them credit for is like saying there are different types of intelligence,
like that Einstein quote about ‘If you judge a fish by his ability to climb a
tree, he will think he is stupid is entire life’.
The niece the main character bullied and tormented with
shrinkies in the salad prank will be mentioned more throughout the story, but
as for her uncle Jack, whelp you will see what will happen to him soon…...
The insect fight was actually the commissioner’s idea, to
set the scale of power and size dynamics in this world as well as the resilient,
hardy athletic nature of the wild shrinkie tribes.
As for Jasmine, when you are angry and heartbroken it the moment
you don’t always think logically and just act with blind rage.
Ella putting Jasmine in her pocket indicates that she is her
property now. I am going revisit Jasmine’s fate with Ella later on, at first,
she keeps her like a pet, since she is another girl and thinks she can bond
with her girl to girl, but quickly grows bored with her, like a child with a new
toy and decides to something else….,.
Ella playing ‘Hide and Squish’ indicates her childlike mind despite
being so bratty cruel with cruelty showing she lacks judgement and naivety due
to her age. The game ‘Hide and Squish’ is also a dark twist on the common game ‘Hide
and Seek’ which vast majority of kids play. This was actually another one of
the commissioner’s main ideas, to show her little ‘big’ brother’s lowly new status
as nothing more than his sister’s plaything.
Lastly yeah, Ella squishing shrinkies into a special spot in
the mud just for them into her footprint was another demonstration that in her
mind, it’s all one big game given her childish nature. Though obviously to shrinkies,
what is play to her, is death for them. Yeah, her brother technically isn’t
dead as you will see in the next chapter but it is very ‘rough play’ as they
say. The whole taking pictures of the shrinkies she squished wasn’t even her
idea, but her mother’s who wants to photograph her favourite child playing for
her digital photo album.
More story lore will be dropped in the next chapter into how this world actually works and we get an introduction to the mother, who you will see isn’t exactly the greatest parent…...