A fun short story.

Vore really isn't my thing (digestion even less so), but this was nicely done. The pacing was solid and the flashes of worldbuilding were whimsical and amusing. 

There were some minor places for improvement: namely a few surplus commas, a couple patchy sentences, and a somewhat disjointed dialogue exchange (following "why did you pick me up?"), but this was very well-written overall.

Given that this was a short story, it's understandable that the characterization was somewhat minimal, but I'd love to have more of that in the future.

Keep writing! You're in a very good place already, and you'll only improve with practice.