[Report This]Date: December 01 2015 2:58 PM Title: Face off : Final part
Strongkobayashi85: I have not enjoyed a story so much as this one in quite some time. Keep it up... It's great!
Now for your grammar... Is your native language German? Some of your grammar seems similar to that found in that language. It would take pages to define most of the gramatical errors in your story, so I won't even try; but... do try to take an advanced course in English/American grammar so that you can reduce the confusion currently in your story. Do that, and the ratings for your story should rise dramatically!
Author's Response:
Damn man, sorry but I just saw your response. :(
No, sadly. Aside from what I still know from my school days, (which are quite some time ago...over a decade LOL) have I never further studied english. And I sadly dont have time to visit some english courses right now^^" Sooo I am afraid that you have to move on with my skills but I really try to make it better and make it understandable.
I sadly also have no one to go through it firsthand before I post them to point out the mistakes so again, you have to life with what I can am I afraid ^^"
I still hope that you continue to enjoy it even if the grammar is horrible and thank you for your response and again sorry for my late reply.
See ya ^^
[Report This]Date: February 15 2015 6:17 PM Title: Face off : Final part
I've loved this story since the start. I was excited to see it is still around and is being updated.
Author's Response:
thank you my friend, I am happy that you folowed it for so long ^^
I am already working on part 8.
I hope to finish this by the end of the weekend buuut I wont promise it since I'm a bit lazy XD
[Report This]Date: September 15 2013 4:55 PM Title: One step at a time
I can see your writing skills have improved Greyfox, and although I cannot tell which parts were re-written I felt that this version is better than the one you originally posted.
However I do have a sugestion. I believe the story would flow much smoother if you Condensed your sentences into structured paragraphs.
Welcome back Greyfox also known as Strongkobayashi85
Author's Response:
I will keep it in mind ^^
Well I overworked the entire first chapter added several things and kept some as it was just yeah wrote it again ^^
The other parts will follow soon and then I continue it then. I want to write in a few scenes I hadnt thought on before :)
Date: April 29 2013 12:56 AM Title: One step at a time
This sounds like a knock off of Terminator
Author's Response:
I wont lie about this since I am a huge fan of the movies but you have to admit that those machines were a pretty logical idea if you want to hunt humans :P
Date: March 07 2013 3:27 PM Title: The stage gets set
It was a nice chapter, although I felt that there was too much dialogue and not much description. I didn't really feel the emotion that was no doubt supposed to be there, especially towards the beginning of the chapter.
Author's Response:
your kinda right with the too much dialouge and less description but I feared that it would bore the readers even more out if I had added the details as well so I thought of leaving some out this time.
I mean sure does it add to the situation when you describe their facial expressions more or their surroundings a bit more but like I said was I worried that it woudl kill the interrest of the readers even more.
I try to make it better next time^^
[Report This]Date: February 27 2013 4:34 PM Title: The stage gets set
Da Fukk how have Ive not seen this story? Wht happened in ch. 3 shit went from peacefull to giant alien asskicking in seconds. Wht happened to sam and cathy? Personally I like this world u made. So many questions like why did the aliens invade? wht do they do with captured humans? why are the so sadistic?
Cant wait for u to update
Author's Response:
the next part will come soon with even more action in it ^^
Glad that you enjoyed it ^^
Date: October 17 2012 11:32 PM Title: Bad Dreams
I like the part where Sam is being nursed.
Author's Response:
I am sorry that I respond now ^^; The site just doesn't notices you when you get a comment on a story.
I'm glad that you enjoyed the part :)
Date: October 11 2011 1:09 PM Title: Bad Dreams
Since its been so long I had to reread the first chapter. It's good but I did notice quite a few errors, so should proofread your work. Although I did visit your devient art profile and I take it English may not be your first language. By the way, I remember adding this story to my favourites so I hope you can update this story more often because I would like to see the relationship between the main characters develop since the context is really interesting.
Author's Response:
Yeah your right English isnt my first language ^^; and I try my best to avoid too many errors in my text. Im still happy that people read them and enjoy them so thank you fo ryou comment :)
[Report This]Date: July 10 2011 10:34 PM Title: One step at a time
a good start. the plot to this story is remarkable. an i hope to read more.
aaron
Author's Response:
thanks and sorry for my late reply ^^ I try to get the next part done in the next couple of days
[Report This]Date: July 10 2011 10:44 AM Title: One step at a time
Oh hai,
Ah, my first review from my long break from giantessworld, sorry I'm in a wierd mood today. I don't come here as often as I used to/should do.
I'm really enjoying your story. There were a couple grammar mistakes I noticed but it's nothing to worry about. It sounds a bit like one of SolarCrimson's story where giantess aliens invade but one is traiter but unlike his I hope you find the time to regularly update it. I shall be adding you to be favourit authors because I have high hopes and I needed soem insperation. Speaking of irregular updates, I need to complete my own incomplete story.
If you want me to point out the errors I found I can proofread it for you but it's not that important.
Author's Response:
I'm sorry for my late answer.
I'm happy that people like this piece ^^ and yeah I know I have problems with the grammar ^^; But I hope they weren't so fierce that it killed the story.
I havent read the story you mentioned from Solar Crimson but I wil take a look at it and i try my best to post the next part in the next few days.
So then ^^ see ya around and thanks for the comment