[Report This]Date: November 15 2011 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 12: The First Time
great story. hope there will be more.
aaron
[Report This]Date: November 15 2011 2:16 PM Title: Chapter 12: The First Time
Rats! I thought sure she was going to take him with her (to real-world school).
[Report This]Date: November 14 2011 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 11: Master Plan
In other words, Jack is going to be taught how to charm the pants off Julia? Interesting mental picture!
;-)
Author's Response:
oh geez hehe well, to start, how about just charming her guard down?
[Report This]Date: November 13 2011 6:48 PM Title: Chapter 10: Sweat Sock Hop
awesome story. love the characters as well as the realism. an the fact that they have to tell julia about the baby. cant wait to seewhat happens next. im really into this story now.
aaron
[Report This]Date: November 13 2011 6:40 PM Title: Chapter 3: Misbehavior
It's pretty good writing, I'm following the action, but it's hard to be attracted to mathematics lessons from a gigantic teenage girl. What's with her fixation on class lessons?
Author's Response:
well, first of all, everyone has their own attraction, so if this isn't your thing that's fine, but the point then isn't even on the lessons, it's on her unique madness and how controlling she is
[Report This]Date: November 13 2011 6:38 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
I would've liked a little more attention to Jim's experience, slipping from the glass into Julia's mouth. It went kind of quick!
Author's Response:
i think you entirely missed the point of jim; he was meant to give a crash course in what julia was willing to do, the main and important characters are the ones being focused on now
[Report This]Date: November 13 2011 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 10: Sweat Sock Hop
this story is excellent. thank you for the effort and creativity youve put into it thus far, you are talented
Author's Response:
thanks for reading
Date: November 13 2011 1:25 PM Title: Chapter 10: Sweat Sock Hop
P.S.---sorry. I sometimes get long-winded with better-than-average stories.
Author's Response:
an interesting theory; really, though, the tossing is meant to imply very different things: annoyance for brian and her attraction to jack
[Report This]Date: November 13 2011 1:24 PM Title: Chapter 10: Sweat Sock Hop
The same way she tosses Jack around, huh? Maybe he no longer has a monopoly on her affections, then. Maybe she's become interested in Brian _because_ she can get a more immmediate response from him (even if its incorrigible defiance). Or, could she really be trying to make Jack finally take notice of her by _pretending_ Brian is her new favorite?
Date: November 13 2011 7:42 AM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
This was one of your finest chapters.
The Bratiness came through beautifully as the did the humiliation of the task. Well done.
[Report This]Date: November 12 2011 9:32 AM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
Good story, I liked the vore scene. I think it would be interesting to know how Julia got the shrink-ray. Do they live in a time when that technology is available, or is there some other explanation?
Author's Response:
it's a time where the tech is available, although expensive (which julia can handle b/c her parents are rich). this probably raises the question of "well, wouldn't this kind of thing happen a lot more often, then?" to which i would answer, don't think about it too hard ;)
[Report This]Date: November 12 2011 8:13 AM Title: Chapter 9: Second Detention
This proves just how modest Jack normally is. He doesn't notice what was perfectly obvious to everyone else(even me!), regarding the source of Julia's concern for his "skinny-ness."
[Report This]Date: November 11 2011 3:21 PM Title: Chapter 8: Volatile Situation
Like shrimp, huh? I wonder if Julia would christen such a delicacy "tiny human cocktail?" On second thought; nah! It doesn't have quite the same ring to it. ;-)
[Report This]Date: November 11 2011 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 7: Almost Someone's Lunch
This girl has more issues than a doctor's waiting room. :-(
[Report This]Date: November 10 2011 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 7: Almost Someone's Lunch
great chapter. please comtinue with this story.
aaron
Date: November 10 2011 3:37 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
I have to say this is an excellent stop over while waiting for the escapes of Carly and hopefully down the line Alison...
I enjoy the fact you added the bit of realism with the pregnancy as taboo as it is in a fetish format it adds a bit more sympathy to the two characters directly involved especially Brian.
Excellent work.
Author's Response:
thanks! i felt like it would be an interesting risk to take to toss in that part of the story. carly will return soon. alison i'm not so sure about; i'm not sure if there's a ton of interest there for people
[Report This]Date: November 09 2011 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 6: System Failure
great story. even though it will probably be awhile before there is more. i cant wait.
aaron
[Report This]Date: November 09 2011 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 6: System Failure
Now, THAT is a brilliantly unexpected cliff-hanger. Bravo!
Date: November 09 2011 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 5: Bath Water
Well, let me put it this way. If Julia were to devour him first, I wouldn't consider him an irreplaceable loss to Humanity.
[Report This]Date: November 09 2011 12:17 PM Title: Chapter 5: Bath Water
When (and I don't mean "if") Julia does to Brian what she did to Jim, I will silently cheer. He sounds like the type of impatient coward who would've dressed in drag to get off the Titanic (alongside the women and children), first!
Author's Response:
yikes sounds like you want brian voted off the island. and by "the island," of course, i mean "not in julia"