Reviews For The Fire within
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Reviewer: bbw liebhaber Signed [Report This]
Date: July 06 2016 5:51 AM Title: Chapter 1

Beautiful story would like to read more.

Reviewer: supernatural Signed [Report This]
Date: August 29 2012 7:31 PM Title: Chapter 1

i really like it so far. im gettihg tired of the crap stories on this site so please continue

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: May 07 2012 4:48 AM Title: Chapter 2

Amazing, you updated it! Hopefully Nastu won't die. What am I saying? Of course he won't die yet because that would be the end of the story.


I did notice a couple of errors, but not really too much to worry about:

“Well than I’m in your dept. Thank you!”

I'm pretty sure you mean debt.



again he fell into Belle hand.

It should be "Belle's hand".

Reviewer: jojomojo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 28 2012 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 1

Best story in the world

Reviewer: prophetofgreed Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2012 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 1

Good start to the story! Just try to edit some of the little grammical mistakes in the future.

Can't wait for where you go with this story!

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2012 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 1

I really, really like this story. It makes a welcome change from the usual crudness, and the description is alright. I did notice some minor errors in your writing, i.e. mixing in present tense with past tense in some places but I this is only minor, as I said and I didn't feel it derailed the story, though it is something to note for future chapters. The story is looking very promising, and I assuming the interaction is kept believable and everyone stays in character I can see this being added to my favourites.



Author's Response:

Wow! Thanks for the comments! This is my first story so I might have a few errors in it. As the story goes on I'll make it much better.

Reviewer: jojomojo Signed [Report This]
Date: March 28 2012 12:57 AM Title: Chapter 1

I loved this story please write more of it

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