[Report This]Date: April 03 2013 1:12 AM Title: Prologue
I love how paige doesn't even have to threaten him she just is really, really persuasive..
Author's Response:
Thats one of her best qualities, rather than threatening Kevin when he disagrees she instead uses kindness and patience in addition to her physical power to mentally dominate and manipulate him into a position of submission.
[Report This]Date: April 03 2013 12:51 AM Title: Unlikely Friendship
I love and adore Paige so much.
Author's Response:
As do I. She has been one of my favorite characters to write I really feel like I portrayed her well and I'm definately going to bring her back in future chapters
[Report This]Date: April 02 2013 10:04 PM Title: Unlikely Friendship
Getting better! I'm still loving this story so much! Impressive descriptions and improved dialogue.
I chuckled when you added
"Psychological Drama next chapter"
Author's Response:
Thanks dudeman I'm glad to hear i'm doing better. I have learned to control my overactive imagination and only explain the most importaint details as opposed to earlier chapters.
Ah yes! about the psychological drama, I'm thinking about finally making Kevin fall down the crazy tree and hit all the branches on the way down
Author's Response:
Thanks dudeman I'm glad to hear i'm doing better. I have learned to control my overactive imagination and only explain the most importaint details as opposed to earlier chapters.
Ah yes! about the psychological drama, I'm thinking about finally making Kevin fall down the crazy tree and hit all the branches on the way down
[Report This]Date: April 02 2013 9:13 PM Title: Prologue
Most of this isn't very erotic for me, I really don't care for feet. My tastes lie more in butt, insertion and breasts. The chapter with Priya was really good. I prefer the dominant aspects, but the past relationship with angela is interesting. I'll definatly keep reading to find out whats actually going on because it's bugging me, lol.
Author's Response:
I totally understand your sentiment and don't worry future chapters will have a greater diversity of erotic material including insertion and breasts. Also you reminded me that I have not included any butt material yet so I'll get into it in the next erotic part.
As for Angela she's not going anywhere and will return back into the story shortly
Date: April 02 2013 8:05 PM Title: Prologue
Not bad at all. You have some detailed descriptions during the "action" scenes that are quite effective and your dialogue for the most part works very well. The introduction of different giantesses gives it nice variety. There are a smattering of technical errors I found in terms of grammar and punctuation, particularly in your early chapters that I think you could probably go back and clean up with some revision, but it's not a huge issue. Keep it up, I like what you've got here so far.
Author's Response:
Well thank you very much Jacksmith I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Also I do plan on re-writting the first two chapters and the prologue once I finish up some things in later chapters.
[Report This]Date: April 01 2013 4:23 AM Title: Prologue
This is a good story although I REALLY wanna know whats going on, so yeah...I kinda want to know more than any sexy stuff, truly your mystery is good enough to drive me nuts everytime I read a new chapter without any info. Keep it up, I can safely say I'm hooked.
Author's Response:
Thanks for commenting Gadget. And rest easy as I now have a good idea as to where I want to take this series so expect the plot to finally arrive.
[Report This]Date: April 01 2013 1:29 AM Title: One Last Time
Originally I really liked this story. Then you added the prologue. Before it was a simple, his friends shrunk I assumed probably sold him or somthing. But you added the new first chapter where theres kevin. Now they shrunk josh instead of kevin because they were told to. Then theres the whole don't say your josh your kevin now.
Now I am interested it's definatly got me thinking and wondering whats happening. So keep it up can't wait to learn more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for supporting my story stargate1990 It's good to hear that your really interested into whats going on.
I'm really sorry about all the confusion It's just that this story is part of a series i'm writting and as I'm still planning said series I can't risk throwing to many plot details out there and then have to live with them throughout the entire series.
I can tell you that I will start getting more in depth as to why he was shrunken, taken, and saved and for what reason(s) in about two more chapters. i just gotta finish things up with Paige first.
Look foward to reading a comment from you again.
[Report This]Date: March 31 2013 10:47 PM Title: The Pool and Paige
Ah, yes... "she lectured down to him in a disappointed tone", that's much better, and feels better too. (Her being a GIANTESS, she wouldn't have to ever, 'Scream.')
You didn't have to go back and change it on my account though, I hope that I didn't effect the outcome, or the direction, of your work. Don't ever let anyone 'Change', your original 'Idea', or ideas.
It's a great story, and I really like it!
Author's Response:
Normally I don't go back and change things but I felt that screaming was really unlike Paige's character, and don't worry although I consider the opinions expressed in every comment I don't allow them to guide my writing
Thank you for commenting again wildcatman I have really enjoyed your support
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 10:02 PM Title: The Pool and Paige
Hey Wordsmith, just realized I haven't reviewed since (2), so I Thought I'd chime in! :')
How BIG was that flippin' needle? My god! No wonder Kevin was freakin' out!
"What the hell is wrong with you" Screamed Paige at him,..... That would kind of blast his tiny ear drums out , I would think? If she was holding him inside the palm of her hand.....
The discription a little out of place, (maybe if she had"excitedly", or "Alarmingly" yelled out at him, ) Ya know? Just sayin", That's the only thing I really noticed though, just thought I'd give ya my 2 cents.....
Author's Response:
Thanks for checking in wildcatman I hope the story is to your liking.
As for the needle its part of a device designed to extract blood from a tiny person for reasons I will explain later.
you are right about the screaming thing, I'll go back and re-read it and see how I could change it. and thank you for the two cents I will spend them wisely
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 4:03 PM Title: Prologue
Realized I hadn't reviewed yet.
So anyway, I'm really liking Josh's character. (He's gonna remain Josh to me. The name they start with is the name that sticks with me.)
And if you said a lot of more girl's are going to be introduced then hey, keep em' coming!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing again Dudemanguy your one of my best supporters.
Also I'm working on several characters mostly high school and college aged, but I think what this story needs is a MILF perhaps a teacher or a parent. Maybe Angela's mother?
When I write the giantesses the thing is though (I'm posting this so that people can see part of my writing style and perhaps tell me whether its a good thing or not or even borrow it themselves) I start by selecting two or more emotions or sensations that will color the characters interactions with them.
Angela= glorious and dreamlike.
Priya= Exotic and dangerous.
Paige= Friendly and passively dominant.
sorry for putting that plug into the reply I just wanted to tell somebody that
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 10:32 AM Title: The Pool and Paige
Kevin-nee-Josh sounds like he's finally gone off the Deep End.
Author's Response:
Idk I think he's a little too sane for my tastes needs a little more self-doubt and psychopathic tendencys will fix that lol.
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 10:18 AM Title: A New Goddess A New Experience
*Postpones reviewing to drink some ICE water.*
Author's Response:
*Prepares for review with great anticipation*
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 1:35 AM Title: The Pool and Paige
It's pretty cool to be honest.
The mysteriousness of his situation and the girls origons gives it some staying power.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing and I agree entirely. I feel that when the reader learns as the character does it puts them into the story, and hopefully makes it more erotic, but also interesting to read
Date: March 18 2013 12:36 AM Title: Prologue
I like the story but im waiting to read why they shrunk him. I understand why u have not shared that info and im not trying to rush u at all. Im just not a fan of giantess bitches. I am looking forward to the feet ch.
Author's Response:
I'm sorry about keeping info a secret its just that this is part of a larger series and I havn't fully planned out where this story fits into it. that and the suspense makes the main characters dive into insanity have more of an impact. I want the reader to discover as he does whats going on.
But since you have been such a loyal fan I shall spoil some thing for you.
Angela and Paige are not bitches what they are doing is for a greater cause, and they hold no negative feelings towards the main character. As for Priya... well yeah she's a bitch, but she isn't a bitch for the sake of being one she has a reason, a really screwed up reason, but still a reason.
Date: March 18 2013 12:02 AM Title: Prologue
Not bad, not bad at all.
Author's Response:
I suppose that not bad is at least somewhat good :D
[Report This]Date: March 08 2013 7:46 PM Title: Friendship and Betrayal
I've read the first 3 chapters and I'm liking the suspense so far. I think I can guess who he will end up with and I love where your going with this
Author's Response:
Yay double comment :D
[Report This]Date: March 08 2013 7:46 PM Title: Friendship and Betrayal
I've read the first 3 chapters and I'm liking the suspense so far. I think I can guess who he will end up with and I love where your going with this
Author's Response:
Thank you for your comment Mr E its an honor to be positively reviewed by the man who wrote Christmas Eve at My Cousins Feet (one of my favorite storys)
Date: March 08 2013 2:40 PM Title: Prologue
Well I read it and now I really dont like them at all. Its fun till kill, thats twisted
Author's Response:
Im not really sure what you mean but I guess you trying to say you don't like the fact that somebody died and if thats the case I apologize but thats the direction this story is taking. but if this is about Josh then I should inform you that he's alive and well, the person who died in the prologue is not the Josh/ kevin of later chapters.
Date: March 08 2013 12:45 PM Title: Friendship and Betrayal
What I meant by insertion is in the end notes for this chapter is this:
"By the way the next chapter is all about Priya so look foward to plenty of mouthplay, breastplay, and insertion."
Author's Response:
Ouch a lot of criticism today, but I understand you mean well. Yeah i was planning on squeezing all of that into one chapter and then it just didn't turn out like that sry ill remove that line as it is misleading btw almost done with the prologue.
[Report This]Date: March 08 2013 12:17 PM Title: A Quickie and A Message
Perhaps your difficulty in writing this chapter was due to misspelling the word "massage?" ;-)
Author's Response:
oops thanks for catching that ill fix it as soon as I can, and the difficulties were caused mainly by the fact that im new at this