Date: March 08 2013 10:39 AM Title: A New Goddess A New Experience
I didn't think it was very believable that she would suddenly put him in her mouth after only just meeting him. I thought she would have asked him how she got there and there would be more about how Josh got to where he is.
Author's Response:
In addition to adding a prologue I could go back and add a few dialogue lines to help make it seem more realistic, also she's not really meeting him for the first time and I probably shouldn't reveal this but she knows who he is and why he was shrunk.
Thanks again for providing me with your support I will definitely consider what you have told me and try and improve in the future, also I need to know if my erotic scenes are good or not could you get back to me on that one.
Date: March 08 2013 10:31 AM Title: Friendship and Betrayal
This story is really confusing me. I'll see what the next chapter holds, though I'm a bit worried about the insertion you mentioned.
Author's Response:
I wanted to keep people reading by not revealing much and letting it slowly come into view, but I see now that all I have been doing is frustrating people so I will explain a bit more from now on. Also I don't understand what you mean about the insertion could you explain that last part to me?
Date: March 08 2013 10:24 AM Title: One Last Time
There could have been more build up but I'm sure everything will be explained. Maybe a prologue would have been a good idea?
Author's Response:
I would first like to thank you for commenting and helping me improve my first story. And upon re-reading the story I realize that it definitely needs a prologue to explain their motivation as well as flesh out the world a bit
[Report This]Date: March 08 2013 2:09 AM Title: One Last Time
OKAY... I can already tell this is going to be one of those stories when im more intrested in wtf is going more than the erotc scenes. Im going to strain myself and ignore this story till there are Alot more chs. so I dont have to be on the edge of my seat try to figure out these girls motives.
Im highly confident that this will turn out to be a highly successful story.
I cant wait till I marathon this story!
Author's Response:
I am going to reveal a bit about there motives next chapter and also add a prologue to help put things into context. Anyways I don't want to sound like I'm begging but i'd appreciate it if you stuck around for a while
[Report This]Date: March 07 2013 9:51 PM Title: One Last Time
"This chapter was difficult for some reason"
Weeelll, it was insertion so...
Anyway, as always I loved the chapter. Priya's already shaping out to be a nice giantess indeed. But will he ever convince them that he's Josh? Or will he forever be Kevin? I'm fine with either, just wondering though.
Love the story so much!
Author's Response:
Thanks again for you continued support dudemanguy without you this story would not be nearly as good. as for Josh/Kevin i haven't decided whether they will recognise him yet or not. Also there is a sequel planned for this story just thought i'd let you know
[Report This]Date: March 05 2013 9:10 PM Title: One Last Time
Just to clarify, is josh alive, or was he killed and brought back? I really do like this story, I hope you continue it!
Author's Response:
I can't reveal that little gem, but it's just Killing Me On The Inside that I can't disclose the truth to you. I hope you stick around because im going to really ramp things up in later chapters and also bring in additional tinies for the giantesses to screw with. And don't worry I will continue the story as writing this has made me A Whole New Person On The Inside to the point in which I Can't Even Regonize Myself Because Im So Different From How I Was Before writing this. ;)
[Report This]Date: March 04 2013 11:10 PM Title: One Last Time
Wht the hell? Is going on. Do they really not recgonize (kevin) they killed him right? I swear this story and charachters confuse me in...but in a good way. Im really intrested in why they killed him, he was their best friend right? This is why i never hung out with freshman girls lol they will kill u.
Author's Response:
thank you for commenting again afroking Unfortunately I can't tell you if they really recognize him or not, but I can tell you that he was not shrunken by them out of cruelity.
and also I agree with you, screw freshmen girls there the worst lol. :)
[Report This]Date: March 04 2013 8:55 PM Title: A New Goddess A New Experience
Dear goodness this story is somehow reaching me like no story ever has before. Please, PLEASE continue this! I cannot wait to see how far his sanity is stretched, before he either makes them recognize him, or he breaks, utterly, entering in the realm of the insane, from which nobody has ever returned the same person.
Author's Response:
Oh believe me I fully intend to. Josh or Kevin as he is going by now will not have a single sane thought left in his head as he is slowly molded into the perfect slave by a number of people (I don't intend to stop with just Angela and Priya) there will be other goddesses to explore and there will be blood :)
Date: March 03 2013 1:20 PM Title: One Last Time
Wow dude this is so awesome.
I would like to say that its nice to have another author who works on details a lot...Do you take requests? If so...Can you like shrink the guy to very small like smaller than a speck and keep it either at feet,insertion,mouthplay etc.And also add more nasty things like toejam,smelly sock lints,saliva,sweat,bits of dirts etc.Ijust gave some tips and requested some stuff.I hope you consider it.Would be so glad,wAiting for next chapter.
Side note:Micro can be really enjoyable if you keep high quality details,emotions of the shrunken person,helpless movements,humilation of the giant girl and the enjoyment shes having while torturing the shrunken person.
Author's Response:
Thank you for commenting Lolwat I'm glad that my attention to detail was able to please. and upon reading again I think your right that this story does need more emotional imput from the character and more gritty details lol.
as for the size changing idea im sure you'll be happy to know that i'm currently planning another story in which the main characters will be speck sized.
[Report This]Date: March 02 2013 11:15 PM Title: Friendship and Betrayal
Wow. That was extremely unexpected way for this to turn out to me. Good sotry, really interesting way you incorporate stuff.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you enjoyed it Ghost
[Report This]Date: March 02 2013 9:53 PM Title: Friendship and Betrayal
Damn, this is really, really, really good. Why is Josh acting like this? Hm, intriguing stuff man. Is Josh really alive? Or is he dead?
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing again dude Its great to know it pleased you, as for Josh we will see how far from sane I can get him
Date: March 02 2013 9:36 PM Title: Friendship and Betrayal
Angela clearly has more issues than a subway news stand.
Author's Response:
hells yeah she does I can't wait until later chapters I have so much planned for her
[Report This]Date: March 02 2013 8:55 PM Title: Friendship and Betrayal
Damn! Keep Going DUDE!
Author's Response:
Oh trust me I will
[Report This]Date: March 02 2013 6:37 PM Title: One Last Time
Cool story. Loved the weed usage. Just don't know why she's gonna kill him. Hope that you put out another part to this story because it's quite entertaining.
aaron
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing, and rest assured this will be a loooooonnnnnngggg story my friend. I have no intentions of allowing Josh to die for a long time
Date: March 01 2013 11:12 PM Title: One Last Time
shit I wished I had dreams like you. Im yet to have a dream with a giantess :(
one dream gave u this story idea? thats to cool lol
Author's Response:
It was not just a dream it was a lucid dream. I was not only aware that I was dreaming I also had partial control over myself as I was in the dream (until Angela came along). honestly it was one of the most graphic and detailed dreams I ever had. It felt so real, everything from the sight of her body to the pressure on mine felt to me as if it actually happened. Even now days after the dream occured I can recall almost every detail. Such an awesome experience
[Report This]Date: March 01 2013 11:08 PM Title: One Last Time
Good discriptions, and slow build-up to the realization.......
I don't know where your going with this, but I like it so far.....
Very passionate... keep going, it can only get better!
Author's Response:
Thank you for commenting I'm glad that my use of descriptive language was pleasing I can only hope that my sanity remains intact as writting this can sometimes become mentally straining
[Report This]Date: March 01 2013 11:07 PM Title: One Last Time
Da fukk? you cant end ch. like this unless u have another to immediately follow. Now im going to be checking every few hrs for more (like always lol) of this story.
What the heck is going on first his bully gave him a cryptic message, then his best friends some how shrink him, then his best friend is going to kill him for an unknown reason?
FUKKK!
no but seriously do continue soon this story already got my interest.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your comment It's great to get so much support. Don't worry chapter 2 is soon to be uploaded because I started working on it as soon I uploaded this chapter. hopefully it will be as good as the first.
[Report This]Date: March 01 2013 10:30 PM Title: One Last Time
I don't know why, but this story struck me in the way very few ever have. You certainly have put a lot of passion into this.
Author's Response:
Thank you Dude I'm glad you liked it, and I am honored to have you as my first commenter ever. Its strange this story was actually inspired by a lucid dream I had a couple of nights ago and Angela was the girl in the dream and I was Josh I supose the reason its so passionate is because in a way this actually happened to me