Date: September 24 2016 10:29 AM Title: Introduction
a another good chapiter.
Can't wait for next one bcz If Caitlin comeback to "finish things off" with Jack like Nostory said there're no courtroom drama saga probably.
Author's Response:
You'll have to wait and see!
[Report This]Date: September 24 2016 7:23 AM Title: Introduction
Really can't wait to see what happens next. I know Jacks plan is to stay out of school for a few days but I don't know how he will acheive it. Also I can't wait to see where the story and Jacks romatic life goes from here.
Author's Response:
I'm delighted you're so eager to read more, I'm just sorry I can't update more regularly; tends to be very intense periods of writing separated by long periods of thinking about it in the back of my mind and building the story. Still a long way to go...
Date: September 24 2016 7:19 AM Title: Separation
Brilliant, love the whole story but I can't help but feel Caitlin will find Jack again to finish things off. I don't know if she will get whats coming to her but she'll definitely show up.
Author's Response:
I like your instincts...!
Date: September 24 2016 1:39 AM Title: Separation
Feels like the story is over. All these goodbyes, the memories, things back to normal. A guess a conclusion is coming up.
Let me guess. The final chapter is titled: "Completion".
Right? I know there's a lot more words out there that can fit, but I think this fits best.
Or it could be "satisfaction" since we are all satisfied with this ending.
I will miss Penny. She was good for this story. A symbol of hope, a protector and a sign that not all Alphas are bad. She gave Jack a new chance at life and I wish them all the best.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
If this were a trilogy, this would be the end of the first film... or something like that. I'm still not entirely sure how long it will be, or exactly how things will pan out, but there's a lot of ideas and scenarios being worked through and this is just the end of the beginning, in some respects.
[Report This]Date: September 23 2016 6:00 PM Title: Separation
Masterfully poignant interlude.
Author's Response:
Why thank you!
[Report This]Date: September 23 2016 12:16 PM Title: Connection
Penny should surprise Jack. She should get a picture of Caitlin, enlarge it, print it, then wear it like a mask and scare the shit out of Jack. Then she takes of the mask and hugs and kisses him repeatedly(not on the lips) all over his face.
I don't know why I thought of that but I just think it would be a thrill for Jack.
Also, being in the friendzone is better than the Beta toy zone like with Caitlin. Jack is so desperate for love that he sees his only female friend as a lover.
Maybe Penny will change her mind. Maybe her time alone will make her think that Jack is all that she needs and she will start seducing Jack. (I know it won't happen, but just a thiught.)
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
That would be so mean! I don't think she particularly wants to give him heart failure. You're also absolutely right about the (apparent) friendzone, even if he feels like a lovesick fool and pines for her, she's very kind and supportive of him, and that's a big deal in a world of apparently uncaring giants.
Date: September 22 2016 10:11 AM Title: Introduction
poor Jack gets friendzoned direct but after he went through he can't think straight!
Great chapiters, but I don't get your decision to have "...tion" in each chapiter title. Can you keep this to the end.
Author's Response:
You'd be majorly overwhelmed with how many words end in -tion. Some of them are pretty pretentious, but I'm that kinda guy!
[Report This]Date: September 21 2016 8:37 PM Title: Connection
Thanks for the head's-up. And, no problema. Even I go through George Lucas Syndrome, every once in a while!
Author's Response:
Ugh - George Lucas syndrome... I hope I didn't inadvertently ruin anyone's childhood or anything. I just reached a point in the story where I thought 'that rounds off the Chapter ok', but then, when I started writing some more, realised it would be way better to end it the way the start of the next Chapter was shaping up.
Probably shouldn't rush so much...
[Report This]Date: September 21 2016 8:10 PM Title: Introduction
Let us take a moment of silence for our brother Jack as he is sent to the friend zone......
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Really great to finally see this story continue once again. I would have reviewed it sooner if I wasn't working. I can't wait to see what happens as the story continues and jack makes his way back to school eventually.
Author's Response:
It does feel an awful lot like he's been trapped in the glass prison of the friend zone, spinning through space for all time... but he's a tired and emotional chap, and there's still a little ways to go yet.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2016 5:05 PM Title: Connection
I see, abit better way to end the chapter. Not like it changes things drastically or anything but it leaves on a more thoughtful note. As always, I'm looking forward to updates!
Author's Response:
Cheers - I just felt like I rushed the end of the Chapter a bit, and when I started writing the continuation I felt like it would be much better to end on that note, than start on it.
Date: September 21 2016 12:13 PM Title: Connection
For a second there you had me fooled with Caitlyn finding Jack! I suppose it could still happen...Anyway, kinda sucks about Jack being friend zoned tho, but it makes sense, he's a tiny, would he be able to protect and provide for someone like Penny? Good stuff, I look forward to more updates!
Author's Response:
*EDIT* I've added a short section at the end of Chapter 21, so it ends slightly differently. Apologies - please check it out.
RE: Ha - I'm glad I almost fooled you, was worried it was waaaay too obvious! Friend-zoning is an unpleasant ordeal at the best of times, let's see how it all pans out.
Date: September 21 2016 12:09 PM Title: Acclimatisation
Awesome! I'm glad this story came back! Right now Jack is a lucky guy no? I guess it's only fair considering what he went through! I still think he should have gone to the police! He's got evidence, the emails, witnesses, and more! Can Caitlyn really get off Scott free with so much proof and considering what she's done? Well whatever. Anyway, I'm glad u came back!
Author's Response:
Caitlin can arguably counter his evidence (it's just some messages he wrote so she could claim it's to smear her), provide her own witnesses and intimidate or disincentivise those Jack would rely upon - it appears to have happened before and she has the resources and connections to make things go away - so it would still be a really difficult and protracted thing. Obviously, if we're really getting into it, they might be able to trace the messages back to her iPad, but let's say there's a way for Caitlin's people to muddy that particular avenue of investigation, and play up the absurdity of the claims based on a previous attempt to defame her character, and with her Father's money greasing the wheels of the machine... it would not be as clear cut as it should be. Obviously I'm no law expert, this is just a story that's hopefully relatively realistic, and from a story point of view, as of right now, it makes no sense to have Jack start litigation against the Reids when he basically doesn't want people to know, and wants to move on with his life and forget it ever happened... OR DOES HE? (He kinda does, it's just very complicated for him, lots of conflicting emotions on the go.)
I also want to foster a sense of injustice about what happened, about her getting away with it, or not, and what Jack himself does within his own means to cope. As soon as I start to involve his parents, the Police, make it into a courtroom drama, all of the intrigue of the GTS parable goes out the window - at least that's how I feel about it. I need to keep the cast and the scenarios small until there's a reason for it to break out, if you know what I'm saying.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2016 7:38 AM Title: Connection
Poor Jack! It's not like he's _intentionally_ viewing Penny as a scapegoat. But, the sad fact is, PTSD still takes a pretty long time to get over.
Author's Response:
*EDIT* I've added a short section at the end of Chapter 21, so it ends slightly differently. Apologies - please check it out.
[Report This]Date: September 20 2016 9:54 PM Title: Acclimatisation
Ah, yes; SOME LIKE IT HOT. The original gender-bender. A laugh-riot with what Leonard Maltin describes (quite accurately, as far as I'm permanently concerned) as the greatest closing line in film history!
FYI: when George Raft snatches away the coin being flipped by Edward G. Robinson, Jr., demanding to know where the latter "learned that cheap trick?" It's an in-joke reference to George Raft's character having the same tendency in the original SCARFACE!!*
*That's right, folks. Al Pacino's version was a loose remake.
Author's Response:
Nobody's perfect.
[Report This]Date: September 20 2016 9:18 PM Title: Acclimatisation
This is getting good. I hope it gets cozy.
Next thing you know, Penny pulls Jack up into her and they cuddle up and she hugs him like a teddy bear. Then she falls asleep with her legs on top of Jack and he can't escape with her legs wrapping him up.
I'm really excited like Jack too because I have felt a similar experience. It started in class when most of the seats are filled up and there is this one seat next to you and a hot girl shows up and takes that seat. Class activity is to talk to the person next to you and we start talking. As the class goes on, she gets more friendlier and playful but I doubt she is interested in a relationship with me and I was too shy to ask her out. I loved being friends with her and I didn't want to jeapordize it by asking her. Soon, we got assignments together and we have to go places. One place, we had to go get food there was one table left with one chair. She tells me to sit down and then she just sits down on my lap afterward. I was so "aware" as Jack put it, but this girl just acted as if it was normal. It's these little things that I love and makes me relate to Jack.
I hope Penny accidentally just sleeps on top of him. I bet Jack would be so aroused and doesn't want to wake Penny up. Even if there is some pain from her weight, he can't deny that he feels great being under Penny. (That's my take.)
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Nice ideas - I like the way you think!
Date: September 20 2016 7:26 PM Title: Acclimatisation
Nice to see a new chapter to this story, one of my favorites. I feel rather sorry for Jack. In a world where he is undersized, and not at all respected. N even Penny seems to truly respect him and does not even notice him as the same age as her.
I do wonder how Jack will be able to have a normal life. Caitlin and Amber is still out there. It would not be hard for Caitlin to kidnap him again if she ever sees him at school or even out in the street.
If Jack does go back to school, he will need to make sure that Caitlin does not catch him alone/
Really nice story and look forward to what happens next.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the feedback!
Date: June 11 2016 6:46 PM Title: Capitulation
Great continuation! I really enjoyed the interactions.
Even though it was not really put into detail and in turn noticeable, I liked that Caitlin kept Jack naked from this scene onwards. It accentuates the "pet" and owner relationship.
Author's Response:
Indeed - earlier on, the nudity is accentuated as Jack feels exposed and humiliated - as he gets wearier and further away from normality, the fact that he is naked becomes the least of his worries and isn't mentioned as prominently. It definitely reinforces the pet/owner dynamic, I tend to think that in this scenario, the giantess being clothed represents power disparity/control, and the stripped Beta exaggerates vulnerability and powerlessness.