[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 10:19 PM Title: Preparation
Oh snap things are turning up. Awesome chapter.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 10:16 PM Title: Introduction
I just read the whole story through and I fucking love this. You have an unbelievable talent when it comes to writing out domination scenes with Catilin, they're so descriptive and sexy. I personally loved it when she uses her feet, as well as when she pushes Jack's head against her breasts.
Caitlin is by far my favorite character, she's like my dream girl come true. A giantess that can still fit in the bedroom, and do personal activities with you. She's incredibly tall, has red hair (I like red heads, their hair just looks so exotic and wild), she's muscular (always a turn one when you've got a giantess fetish), and she knows how to be domineering.
My only regret, however, is that she doesn't seem to have any redeemable qualities about herself. I understand why that is, sometimes you just need a bad guy to be bad. I just wish there was something more personal about her character that could redeem her in some way,and make her easier to sympathise with. I mean, hell, I'd worship her in real life the way she'd want me to. But only if I knew that she was doing it for our mutual enjoyment, and that she still saw me as an equal and not a lesser being. I understand that that won't happen, as Caitlin is set to be the primary antagonist and nothing else. I just wish I could like her for reasons other than her looks.
But hey, don't listen to me about that, I'm not trying to write your story. You write it the way you want it written man, cause it's coming out amazingly the way you've got it set up.
Author's Response:
I understand what you mean about wanting to find the redeemable qualities in a character who appears to be incredibly cruel and/or evil, it's a response I myself have to most protagonists like this, however in many ways it's a lot cleaner to simply make them irretrievably bad. As you've stated, if she was nicer, she would be incredibly desirable in a lot of ways - that's sort of the whole crux of the issue.
Not to give the game away too much, but some facts that will come to light that explain why Caitlin's is the way she is, though not for some time.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 8:26 PM Title: Introduction
I always enjoy comparisons in stories, especially when it is within a specific size range. Its just odd for me when a comparison comes in that is close but not quite there. Its just a trait of mine to pay attention to the smallest of details in stories I like. What you did with the protein bar was spot on as everything that is twice as big will have 8 times the volume. What caught me off guard was the dildo. For a beta girl it would be 1 foot long and 2.5 inch wide. That tells me that either 1) alpha males are hung like crazy or 2) the girl has an oversized dildo.
Its a wonderful story and I can't wait to read more of it.
Author's Response:
Your suspicions are correct regarding the dildo; Caitlin is just under 6' 7" in old money, so she's a big girl whichever way you look at it. I doubled up the size of a truly enormous real life dildo, so it's not unprecedented, but it is extreme for effect. Jack is also completely naive about this sort of thing so all it does is scare him, Jack doesn't know how hung Alpha guys are but this 'evidence' adds to his feeling of inadequacy.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 7:51 PM Title: Preparation
Wow, what a deep chapter.
It kinda reminded me of those 'escape' games where you have to find stuff and unlock things.
I have a feeling that Caitlin will discover the message that Jack sent. Maybe by fingerprints, smell of a beta, tablet position. I got that feeling.
I like the detail you put into Jack making a skeleton key and the part when he was trying to decode the tablet.
Caitlin is coming soon. I wonder what she will discover in the next chapter!
Date: May 28 2015 1:29 PM Title: Preparation
Buzz-killer!
;-D
[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 12:14 PM Title: Preparation
If she doesn't go near the hamper, why NOT hide there? In fact, why doesn't he put her dirty clothes underneath the T-shirt, then re-lock the wardrobe, before getting in the hamper?
Author's Response:
Some reasons why Jack won't risk hiding in there:
i) Perhaps the basket is empty because she threw all the clothes out to look for him when he first escaped to the bathroom. He doesn't know for certain that it is unused.
ii) Even if it's unused, the laundry basket is a very obvious place to hide, it's one of the first places she will check, and it was left empty without a lid on it, so if he covers himself in clothes it's even more obvious something has changed.
Also: if he puts dirty clothes under the t-shirt (presumably to create a Jack-sized bundle), at best it will delay her by about 2 seconds.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2015 12:06 PM Title: Desolation
Hmph! I thought the T-shirt was simply to cover him up. Although, admittedly, that'd be over-kill, seeing as he's locked in her wardrobe (which is probably too strong for him to break out of in his current condition).
Date: May 28 2015 7:57 AM Title: Preparation
Hey take your time man.
I liked this chapter, it revealed a lot about the world Jack lives in, from faking antique stuff for Alphas to monstrous dildos, you've put quite a bit of thought into this and it shows!
Good work there!
[Report This]Date: May 26 2015 9:53 PM Title: Desolation
Just read all 8 chapters! Amazing!
Its interesting to see a story with these size differences. Kinda refreshing.
I actually like Caitlin's use of tape, to make him bound and mute.
In this chapter, she locks him up in her wardrobe while he is still taped up. Does she really have to do that? I dont think so, unless her parents are back. (I hope so.) That would be a great plot twist. He might escape one giantess, but can he escape all 3?
Author's Response:
Caitlin locks him in the wardrobe, a) because it had a lock (!) and b) because she has stopped underestimating him. He tried to roll off the bed when she wasn't looking, and managed to escape and hide in the bathroom when she popped out of the room for just a moment, perhaps she's realised it's better to be safe than sorry? She also appears to spends several minutes making sure there is no way out of her bedroom and en-suite either, though you could argue that's because it's the first chance she's had to think about it since bringing him home. It was an impulsive act to kidnap Jack, so she's probably figuring this all out as she goes along.
From an author's point of view, I originally had her pile some clothes up in front of the wardrobe, but over time I thought that it was yet another example of Caitlin not taking proper precautions and making her character less plausible. This is a determined, irate girl who has knowingly kidnapped another person, she's not going to be half-arsed about it.
Also: just to get this out of the way - her parents are away until Sunday, and it's only Friday afternoon.
Date: May 26 2015 5:06 PM Title: Desensitisation
o shit nigga its back
thank u jesus
[Report This]Date: May 26 2015 5:01 PM Title: Desolation
It kind of sucks that the only woman that is sexually interested in Jack is a crazy person like Caitlin. Honestly, I'm sure if she was even a little nicer and less rapey about it, Jack would be willing to return the attraction properly. I wonder what the punishment for rape and kidnapping is in the world? If Jack were to get out would he rat her out?
[Report This]Date: May 25 2015 4:11 PM Title: Desensitisation
I had to do a quick re-read to remember the gist of this. But, it was worth it! Suitably arousing climax (no pun intended).
Date: May 25 2015 11:19 AM Title: Introduction
Fucking yes!!!!! This is my favourite story ever on this site, so happy you've updated it. CONTINUE IT PLEASE!
Date: May 25 2015 10:39 AM Title: Introduction
I log on to my account after years just to reply for this update.
This why I've been checking this site everyday. Finally an update! Hope this continues.
A little suggestion, whenever there is a NWO story, what I wanna see is how the hero interact with the world instead of just a few people around. That feels like something fall into the regular genre. Like it would be nice to see how hes parents interact with the alpha world, or in the school say his friends. I think that's an aspect I really want to see. That been said I still enjoy this story massively. and truly appreciate that you decide to pick it up again.
Author's Response:
Hey swkswk123, I'm very flattered you logged in just to comment on the latest chapter!
I understand your point about how including more stories from other aspects of the NWO, like looking at his parents or friends, would help flesh out the world, but the very basic answer is that if it doesn't help Jack's story move along, then I'm not going to write about it. The whole narrative thus far has revolved around a single main character and his trials and tribulations, I've tried to add as much context as necessary without going into overbearing detail, and there is a lot of thought that has not been put onto the page that may become clearer in future chapters. Ultimately, this is a complex world and I've attempted to be as logical, realistic and true as I possibly can be in what I've covered - I can't think of everything, but it has spent a long time bouncing around my brain and I've been able to answer some of my own questions about things you raise.
In terms of Jack's experience in this NWO, he is young and introspective - he feels like the Alpha world is a scary place and spends a lot more time obsessing about the pre-Growth Hormone era than facing up to the reality of his own era. Jack's parents, for the record, are uneasy with the way humanity is going but comfortable, they both have safe jobs in areas still suited to Betas (Dad works in electronics, Mum works with children). The two other Beta kids, Delon and Shen, get by for various reasons: Delon is tall for a Beta and isn't as intimidated or uneasy around Alphas, Shen is highly intelligent and therefore of use to the Alpha majority, so he isn't picked on. Jack doesn't appear to have, or feel like he has, any kind of desirable qualities either for a future career, relationship, etc - so he retreats into his own mind.
Hope that's a bit of info to help flesh out the context, it's not explicitly mentioned but the characters follow these kind of rules to make the world believable without explaining every permutation of the NWO.
[Report This]Date: May 25 2015 9:09 AM Title: Introduction
Christmas has come early. Glad to see this story will continue, looking forward to see how far Caitlin is willing to go to solidfy her control over Jack.
Date: May 25 2015 8:21 AM Title: Introduction
Glad to know this story continues.However, odds are not vwith Jack about escaping !!!
Date: May 25 2015 3:20 AM Title: Introduction
Oh boy Jack is in his own personal hell! Caitlin is like some Amazonian goddess , don't even know if he can escape on his own or he'll need some outside help.
Great to see you back, its been almost 2 years since this story got updated but it doesn't matter!
Date: October 25 2014 3:09 PM Title: Introduction
WORK! we beg of you!!
Date: September 23 2014 2:55 PM Title: Introduction
Really loved this story meets all my requirements for the perfect story write chapter 7 soon please
[Report This]Date: December 20 2013 10:32 AM Title: Introduction
Glad to see another chapter!
Maybe when this present arc ends, you might give us a little insight into what his parents do and how they're treated. Since they made a decision to keep him as a Beta, thus ruining any real chance of happiness and prosperity. Unless as I said in an earlier comment, he goes to the 3rd world. I'm still hopeful that something can happen between him and Penny.
Hopefully we'll see another chapter soon?