Date: July 08 2015 9:46 PM Title: Chapter 3: Post-Sister Stress Disorder
Really enjoying it so far. I was wondering when you'd get to his mom.
You've taken an brilliant angle with this. He's surrounded by sympothetic and nuturing women but he's so conditioned to be a slave that any trigger sends him straight into hell.
I always dig your stuff but Blackmail I think is your Heart of Darkness.
Author's Response:
Thanks, glad you like it. You've basically struck at exactly what this story will revolve around. While Jack is physically safe (at least for the time being), his mental state still won't let him rest.
[Report This]Date: July 06 2015 8:38 PM Title: Chapter 3: Post-Sister Stress Disorder
I like Dr.Fenton and i like that she clearly cares about helping Jack.
And man, It can't be easy for Jack's mom to learn what Carly did to him. I really hope we see more bonding there.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading! We'll see Jack interact directly with his mom later on in the story.
[Report This]Date: July 06 2015 6:05 PM Title: Chapter 3: Post-Sister Stress Disorder
See, Carly loves her little bro.
For a minute there I was expecting Jack's mom to somehow be or at least the beginnings of a certain aspiring political matriarch.
Author's Response:
Hehe. Well, do remember this takes place about thirty years before Time-Out. One Judy is plenty for this world.
Date: July 06 2015 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
Very nice
Author's Response:
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: July 02 2015 8:21 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
I was gone for a while, came back, and found this little gem waiting for me. Your writing has improved in bounds since the last time I've reviewed, at least in this humble writers opinion. But enough lauding for one day, I've got some questions!
Are you perhaps a psychology major or something? Because Carly's mannerisms remind me of someone I know IRL who suffers from histrionic personality disorder. Or is it narcissistic? Chances are I don't know what I'm talking about. I'm just a semi-buzzed guy trying to give some feedback, maybe figure out how to improve my own writing in the progress.
So yeah, in conclusion, excellent work as usual. Looking forward to the next installment.
Author's Response:
Thanks man, much appreciated.
I don't know the first thing about psychology, though I can see some parallels in Carly's behavior with HPD. As much as she does enjoy being the center of attention, though, it's less about needing it from everyone and more just needing an exceptionally heightened sense of it in a focused aspect of her life - this case, feeling Jack needs her as much as she needs him. She could care less about others at this point.
Date: July 01 2015 9:52 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
haven't checked in in awhile. so glad you're continuing with this story.
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: June 30 2015 8:07 AM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
Ive been asking more questions than reviewing, sorry about that, the story is great so far, and i just read toy teacher, and was wondering if any of those characters are gonna reappear? Like june or kayla
Author's Response:
Totally fine. Glad you're enjoying the story. I don't want to spoil anything yet, but there will be some definite connections with Toy Teacher characters.
[Report This]Date: June 29 2015 7:42 PM Title: Chapter 2: Littlest Sib
Ha, love how Carly can be manipulitive even when tiny, and I agree with AdamX, how dare that guard, lol. I think Adam and I are her only fans. Seems she will have to endure some hard times though, I would not have put together who that was who took her if you hadn't mentioned Toy Teacher, nice tie in.
Author's Response:
Haha. Carly doesn't have many fans, you're right. Thanks for reviewing!
Date: June 29 2015 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 2: Littlest Sib
I love the turn of events and now Carly is shrunk and a prisoner. I would love to see Carly suffer the same treatment under a woman's feet like she did to her brother
Author's Response:
Thanks! Carly is definitely in store for some experiences she won't be particularly fond of.
[Report This]Date: June 28 2015 8:03 PM Title: Chapter 2: Littlest Sib
I was correct, score one for me.
Also how dare that guard handle Carly in such a way, she must be dealt with.
Author's Response:
Hehe. Well, the guard definitely was dealt with in a way. Maybe karma for threatening Carly.
Date: June 28 2015 4:58 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
freaking amazing as always. Makes me wish they got ahold fo you to finish Micheal Critons "Micro". (which off topic doing a what if on that adaption, so thanks for the insperation again as always)
I'm excited how this will fit into the rest of the Shrunksmith-verse. I Hope Calrly gets her cumuppences soon.
Author's Response:
Thanks very much. If I'd finished Micro, though, it probably would've been a little jarring when it suddenly halfway through became fetish porn.
Date: June 28 2015 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
This chapter brought up a question i hadnt previously had intill carly talks about her hair. What about jacks hair? Did it gets really long or did carly fibd a way to cut it even though it was micro and super thin?
Author's Response:
Carly would probably have occasionally snipped Jack's hair with scissors, but it still would've been pretty shaggy.
[Report This]Date: June 28 2015 11:28 AM Title: Chapter 2: Littlest Sib
I wish we could have seen more of the female guard having fun with Carly and punishing her. I also like that while she doesn't know Jack personally she is still disgusted by what Carly did to him.
I don't know if it's what you intended but i ended up liking her and wishing she"d give Carly a taste of her own medicine.
Author's Response:
While it won't be with the female guard, there's certainly plenty of time left in this story for Carly to get a taste of her own medicine.
[Report This]Date: June 28 2015 10:50 AM Title: Chapter 2: Littlest Sib
I get the impression that Carly doesn't blame Jack for getting shrunk, at least not completely. It seems like she mainly blames Sophie or at least that's how it seems like to me.
Author's Response:
Right. Carly doesn't place blame on Jack. At this point she views him too much as a helpless little thing that needs her to exist, so it doesn't cross her mind to blame him.
Date: June 28 2015 6:55 AM Title: Chapter 2: Littlest Sib
I've no idea what happened but someone probably wants Carly out and free, perhaps even restored.
Author's Response:
You're definitely partially right. Thanks for reading.
Date: June 28 2015 6:46 AM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
Carly sucks as a character. She's not fun or likable in any way possible and the characters around her are dumb victim types. The smart move was to cut of her limbs and put her in een tank surrounded by mirrors and never talk to her. That's the way to hurt a psychopath/sociopath/narcissist and they can never take revenge on you again. I can't relate with these choices of the characters in this one.
Author's Response:
Well, Carly's not necessarily supposed to be liked; she just is what she is. I'm guessing this is just not the series for you though.
Date: June 26 2015 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
I know youre not into the butt theme but you should add some...maybe a relative or a doctor...just think about it
Author's Response:
The story's action is already planned out, but I will keep it in mind.
[Report This]Date: June 26 2015 11:54 AM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
Wow Carly is tiny?! What a pleasant surprise. I'm digging this so far but if the other blackmails are any indicator I should probably expect some cruel giantess humiliation. At least now Carly will get her comeuppance.
Great stuff Jack and I really liked how 'touch' ended. Well that whole story in general because it was unorthodox.
aaron
PS I'm still looking forward to a time-out sequel and with the possibility of the dad/ex-husband being tiny too with Judy well that's a win/win.
Author's Response:
Yep, Carly was shrunken at the end of Blackmail 3. You're right, there will be plenty of action in this one even though Jack is supposedly safe now.
Glad to hear you liked Touch as well.
Without wanting to spoil, we will definitely be meeting Scott's dad in Time-Out 7.
Date: June 26 2015 8:00 AM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
Wait, so is jack living in the birdhouse? Or is it like a little getaway
Author's Response:
The birdhouse is just so he can lounge outside without worrying about the elements.
[Report This]Date: June 25 2015 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 1: Life After Carly
Jacksmith, you are a very cruel man, making us wait to find out what happened to Carly! :)
So glad to see this continued, Carly is one of my favorite characters, I hope like crazy she regains the upper hand! Very interested to see how this unfolds because obviously, she will be the first person they look for if Jack goes missing, assuming she regains her height.
Great work, can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
I promise the wait won't be long. And I'm pretty sure wanting Carly to regain the upper hand makes you very cruel as well! Thanks for reviewing.