Reviewer: HectorVanDyne Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2016 8:57 PM Title: Girl, You’ll Be a Woman Soon

Sounds like Lina didn't know how bad things were between Tom and Janine. I mean, i think she knew Janine was rough, but not that rough. 

Author's Response:

Eye opening to say the least...

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 27 2016 5:38 PM Title: Girl, You’ll Be a Woman Soon

While I'm not a fan of these back to back weepy chapters, I kinda liked this one over the previous one.

I enjoyed the conversation about how Janine used Tom. I was wondering if Lina was going to tell Janine about her experience, you know, to share ideas. Like when Lina was doing sit-ups, she had Tom inside her the whole time.

Part of me still feels that Janine is acting, just so Lina feels the need to comfort her and let her guard down. I still have a little grudge that Janine still has bits of evil in her.

Good point. Lina has to hide Janine while Raphaella shows up. Haha! I wonder how that will work. (Isn't Lina rich enough to afford few nights at a hotel for Janine? I think that can work.)

I bet if Lina didn't show up to Cassidy's place, Miss Harwood would be there instead. Then we can have round 2! But since Lina is driving there, that means that another conversation has to take place.

Lina and Cassidy. What a lovely combination. In fact, these 2 women were the nicest of the bunch. They treated Tom nicely and communicated fairly.

I think Tom knows Lina is careful and will be ok with her holding him. I don't about Cassidy though. I think Cassidy will be all over Lina thinking, "why are you here!!!!" and reject her like Jessica and Janine. But in the end, it's Tom's choice.

I wodner what Lina is going to do over at Cassidy's. She can't really take Tom. Cassidy is the nurse and he still needs healing. What is Lina going to talk about? Apologizing for Jessica and the deal? Well, she can apologize, but the deal is off. No way will Cassidy negotiate with a Lindholm again.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Time to come at this from a different angle.  To say Cassidy is leary is an understatement. Things are moving quickly now :)

Reviewer: geeman Signed [Report This]
Date: June 24 2016 11:30 PM Title: Lina

Wow, so it looks like Janine is having some actual character development! I never expected character developmemt much less of Janine in a story like this.

Author's Response:

Hopefully it adds to the flavor of the story.  Now the million dollar question is it real or just another scheme? :)

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20 2016 7:55 PM Title: Catlike Reflexes

Wow! I thought this chapter was never going to come. Last chapter I believe was on Wednesday. I know I shouldn't even bother criticizing on the rare you upload, but I just got worried when I saw nothing the last few days.

Ok, now let's get back to the chapter.

As soon as I saw the title, I thought, yay, he is saved. (Of course.) but then u threw in a twist. You actually had Janine miss the catch and Tom goes spiraling out of control and into the floor. That fruit metaphor was very effective. Made me shiver at what was left of Tom.

I totally agree with Geeman. Janine is no better than Jessica. Like what does Janine know about being careful and concerned for others? Jessica just showed how messed up the Lindholms truly are. (Except Lina. She is still a sexy gentle Milf.)

So how will this recovery affect the story? I hope Cassidy does some super healing thing where she discovers that Tom's body heals at a faster rate than a regular sized person.

Cassidy could also take advantage of this situation. She can have Tom make a full recovery but fake it to everyone and say that he still is injured. That way she can have Tom all to herself. (And Katie of course.)

Lina is going to be pissed now that her plan to get Tom has another dilemma. I wonder if Lina is still allowed to see Tom after all that. (I'm sure Tom approves.)

Wow, never seen Cassidy erupt like that before. She really cares for Tom. However, I'm still thinking she thought "my sex toy got hurt!" Instead of "Tom for hurt!". Well, we know Miss Harwood would've thought sexy toy > Tom. Haha!

Maybe Miss Harwood has this skin perfecting cream that she uses for her flawless body and let's Tom have some to heal him up. (I know it's a stupid idea, but hey, shrinking works, so why not this. )

Part of me feels like this is a great way to focus on certain characters over others. Now Janine and Jessica are out of the picture, which means more time with Cassidy! Hooray!

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

Been pretty busy with school wrapping up and work and stuff so updates were put on hold. this twist at least didn't leave you hanging at the end with the "Is tom dead?" notion again. Trying to keep it interesting without replicating story elements too many times. How many times have i told you, never ever ever count Janine out. Most everybody intensley dislikes her because she is ruthless in her use of tom. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: geeman Signed [Report This]
Date: June 20 2016 5:28 PM Title: Catlike Reflexes

How can Janine criticize her sister after all she's done? She almost swallowed the poor guy on purpose just to see what it'd feel like! She's a horrible person just like her sister if not worse! Anyway, I think Tom should stay far the he'll away from Janine or any of her kin if he knows what's good for him! Maybe Janine has had an epiphany about what a shitty person she is but if I was Tom I wouldn't risk it! Pretty much every girl in this series has been rough with him too, this guy has limits no matter how cocky he gets!

Author's Response:

Thanks for the read and review geeman! It's like the pot calling the kettle black, right? The only one who hasn't mistreated Tom was Tess, ALL the rest of them to some degree have exploited his stature to varying degree, to which Janine has been by far the most domineering (and maybe Miss Wingnut Addison and her collection of fairy figurines!). We'll explore some of the recent character displays in the next few chapters as thing countdown to the arrival of tom's mother. 

Reviewer: Hyperdrain Signed [Report This]
Date: June 17 2016 6:53 PM Title: Baby, I’d Fall For You…

Hey, just wanted to comment on the fact that this story has gone far past the scope of the description, as the party has long since been forgetten.  Not a huge problem or anything, you may just want to update it.  Been reading since this story being about 5 chapters, and I've all but forgotten about the party at the beginning, and the description makes it seems as though the story will take place mostly at a girls only party, not the adventure it has become.  Great story though, and congrats on chapter 100 from a first-time commenter.

Author's Response:

Your right, this story has evolved far passed the party and developed a life all its own. Thanks for the reviews and the heads up! 

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: June 16 2016 8:19 PM Title: Baby, I’d Fall For You…

My point precisely, Hec, How is Lina going to keep Elle from instituting a police manhunt after a week of no word from Tom? Especially, if she wants to find out what Tess meant by "small?" Short of Lina getting her hands on Grandpa Wentworth's shrink ray, there's no feasible way to keep Elle a virtual prisoner in the Lindholm residence. Ergo; abduction of Elle en route to same

Author's Response:

Interesting discussion, tee hee

Reviewer: HectorVanDyne Signed [Report This]
Date: June 16 2016 12:06 PM Title: Baby, I’d Fall For You…

I'm so happy Raphaella is finally getting involved. I guess Lina underestimated her love for her son. 

Also, it seems like she'll learn about Tom's condition sooner than Lina wanted.

Author's Response:

So many moving parts, you know soemthing has to spin out of control somewhere, just not sure yet,what or who...

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 15 2016 6:45 PM Title: Baby, I’d Fall For You…

Here it is. The legendary chapter 100!

What I was impressed about was the length of this chapter. Hoping to see longer chapters in the future. I don't expect it, but I would be glad to see that.

Yeah. You are right. I was one of those people expecting some super sexy showdown but it turns out that it was actually a "who gets Tom" showdown.

Wow, this chapter made me agree with licktoy's review. Jessica does seem childish. It's like she found that toy that she never wants to let go. (Insert "Let it go" song.)

I didn't expect Jessica to be that desperate to hold Tom. She seems almost crazy. At first, she was asking for permission to touch him, then all of a sudden, bam! She grabs him with no regard for Tom's life!

I thought you are going to describe Jessica beautifully but instead you downplayed her by instead complimenting Janine as she stands next to Jessica. Was this to make us like Janine again? If yes, it worked. Despite Jessica's age, she lacks the maturity that her younger sister has.

So Tom is airborne falling to the ground. The next desperate person is Janine so I imagine that she will catch him. Then Cassidy sees Tom in Janine's hand and is worried that Janine may take Tom away. Then, to Cassidy's surprise, Janine hands back Tom to Cassidy. I'm guessing Jessica will be too scared to do anything realizing that she almost killed Tom. Might even apologize a bunch of times. Expecting a lot of sorrys.

Are Donatella and Raphella supposed to be based of the ninja turtles? Lol, I can't believe I never noticed that before.

Seriously Lina? You are trying to separate a mother to her son. Not as easy as you thought, huh? And that story was so bizarre anyway. Btw, I miss the Lina that was one step ahead of everyone.

Now Tom's mom is coming soon. Oh boy. And Tess, you got some explaining to do. Also, Tess, just say that "small" was a typo. Just take that word out and it's a normal text. No biggie. Yet she screws up by not answering. Just txt her now Tess, says its a typo! It's not too late!

Speaking of typos. I thought "je nes sais quoi" was a typo. I have never, ever heard that word (or phrase?) in my life. Had to look it up to understand it.

Well, deep chapter. I can't wait for the next one!

Reviewer: licktoy Signed [Report This]
Date: June 12 2016 2:34 PM Title: Wednesday Morning

I just can't wait for the anniversary chapter 100!

I am really not sure about Jessica. She is kind of childish which turns me off. But maybe we will be surprised.

Author's Response:

I know right! While I would like for chapter 100 to be epic...Two points of view two cliffhangers. Hmm in the end it will be up to the reader's whether or not it lived up to the billing.