Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 06 2017 9:37 PM Title: Oliver the Tour Guide

Honestly, I would have said the exact same thing as Deacon if I was him. Once again, this guy is literally me. If a girl is that good looking I would praise her. Also, nice touch about panties. Most guys would say pants, but Deacon and I know the real deal.

I have been starting to watch more movies recently, but not enough to know many references. So if I had a code with roommates, it might be with sports, or maybe video games instead of movies.

I would have jumped out of my seat if Brooklyn touched Deacon. I would be so happy if she just touched him in a few more places. :)

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response:

I'm pretty sure Deacon's role will be expanding in the next little while, just saying. As for movies, dude, i love movies and quotes. I have a couple of friends we probably communicate more through movvie quotes than actaul conversation. A couple of favs - True Romance, particularly Christopher Walkne and Gary Oldman's scenes - amazing. Snatch, Lock Stock and two smoking Barrels, Departed, the list is virtually endless!

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: April 03 2017 9:48 PM Title: Preparations and an Unexpected Guest

Hey!  No fair!  Oliver plays with himself and misses important clues.  Sersi plays with herself and just intuits a problem?...guys have intuition too!

Oh! And Cam wasn't "happy enough" about his life being destroyed?!?!?!  I hope she dies in a slow, humilitating fashion.  Something involving weasels.

So...Queen Evil Skank might take a shine to Oliver?  Well, it might be impossible for Oliver to make his situation better with her over him.  So bad.  On the other hand...Ha Ha ! Screw You Sersi!

Really creating some intrigue here Duggernaut.  The web you've weaved really has me caught.  It reads like a Hitchcockian horror mystery and I'm just hooked.  Great, amazing stuff.

 

Peace,

 

PixL8Ed

Author's Response:

That because men are dumb beasts easily led astray, and as a man i own that.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: April 03 2017 6:25 PM Title: Preparations and an Unexpected Guest

Well....that's a plot twist for sure.

After all this time, we realize that Sersei might not even get to play with Oliver? Hmm. Obviously I'm a bit dissapointed becuase every time a new character is intrigued, they tend to change the plot somehow.

Hopefully, this works out in our favor and Sersie's.

I can't wait for the next chapter!

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2017 6:46 AM Title: The Night Before...

Just as Oliver's mother is out of town partaking in the ritual to steal some other poor sap's life away from him, these two crones are in town to have their fill of life energy to feed their ceaseless addictions.  As the line said, Oliver is a deer surrounded by wolves.  He is the guest invited to a dinner in his honor and he doesn't know he is the main course.  He being lead to the slaughter by the women who pretend to be his friends as they have to dozens before him.  Oliver's instincts are true, the red flags are being raised, but he still hasn't been able to put it all the pieces together.  Why hasn’t he pursued Bear’s disappearance?  Will Stan's visit be in time to intervene or will another step up to save our hero? This story is becoming my addiction.  More please…

Author's Response:

Exactly right. Oliver and Bear were never freinds, so thinking of the big fella in the hospital hasn't triggered anything in Oliver. Stan's visit is scheduled for the upcoming weekend, about three days aways....

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: March 29 2017 5:26 PM Title: The Night Before...

The thing is, Oliver doesn't even know he's doing "the dish of the day" for all these evil cows.

And yes, even their "little" jokes are evil.

I gotta say, everytime they get away with something it just plain bugs me.

That is why I'm hooked on this story.  It may seem like this is just some "cleverness" on the villains part.  But it's really adding to the suspense.  At least if you're rooting for Oliver.  Though, being an Oliver fan is starting to feel kind of like being a Cubs fan for the better part of the 20th century.

Great work Duggernaut, you set the standard.

 

Peace,

 

PixL8Ed

Author's Response:

Heh heh heh, Oliver being on the outside of an inside joke leaves him treading water with no bottom in sight, just black silhouettes circling the depths beneath his feet in the darkness below, anticipating the frenzy to come...

 

Thanks!

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: March 21 2017 5:00 PM Title: Oliver's New Roomie

In the worst light, Oliver looks like a good friend. As long as it's not partly-cloudy or something. He's literally pulling his pud while forgetting important clues. Phone call from NotCal anybody?

But first a little about me. I learned to read with the Encyclopedia Brown Mysteries. Sherlock Holmes? Read'em, not fair play mysteries. Star Wars came along and broadened my tastes, but mysteries were my go-to read. Later I had to special order Sexual Homocide: Patterns and Motives by Bob Ressler because my damn book store didn't just carry the damn thing. First season of Monk..fair play, I could solve them before the credits ran. My copy of the FBI Crime Classification Manual is looking pretty rough theses days.

It's frustrating for me to see Oliver with a real mystery on his hands and just kind of, well, not realizing it. See Oliver doesn't think like me. And yes, again, it's frustrating.

But that's the power of truly excellent writing.

Duggernaut has created characters that draw you in. Even when you don't agree with their priorities. When Jamie Lee Curtis hides in the closet (even though you're screaming “NO”) you don't get up and leave the theater, you're with her. You care. That's where we are with Oliver. Even when we're saying “get your head out of your ass” we still care about him. We never write him off.

And it's all due to Duggernaut's genius. There's not a lot of authors (even pros) who can create something both frustrating and satisfying as story.

 

On the chapter, the fact that Oliver isn't using the fresh set of eyes has me of two minds. Part of me is thinking he should just say “Hey Deacon, friend of yours goes missing. Last seen in the company of people you're sure use roofies. You get a text from his number from someone not him. How worried are you?”

Deacon would probably say “Pretty worried.”

“Ah, but here's the rub. One of those people is his sister.” Oliver points out.

“Uh, Oliver. You don't roofie people you love.” Deacon says, not adding “dumbass.”

On the other hand, the kid might not be reliable. He might blab to every 'mega twat he sees about Oliver's suspicions. Just trying to get their attention.

So, we have a bit of an impasse with the new guy. Just the kind of situation that is making this story so compelling.

 

Thanks again for sharing your amazing work with us, Duggernaut.

 

Peace,

 

PixL8Ed

Author's Response:

Hey PixL8Ed, thanks for the glowing review. I'm a extremely pleased this tale has you shaking with frustration knowing the fate that awaits oliver and the string of clue he has blissfully overlooked. Is there enough to overcome his enflamed blood or does this little lamb allow himself to be led to the slaughter? Next chapter will shed some light on his frame of mind as the noose tightens.  :)

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: March 20 2017 7:27 PM Title: Oliver's New Roomie

Heh! Oliver's wild guess is a lot closer to the truth than he thinks. As for Deacon? His being adopted makes me wonder if Omega Pi is getting a little more cold-blooded. Shrinking young men they think will _never_ be missed!

Author's Response:

It just might be that insidious, though adoptive records and screening are usually very thorough...but who knows who might be highly placed inside the department responsible for adoptions? If she's an Omega Pi, they just got a whole lot more sinister.

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: March 11 2017 11:20 PM Title: Stan

Okay, I figured it out.  Stan is the type of guy who sees what he wants to see in women. 

That explains how he can be taken in by an evil cow like Samantha.

Carycomic-thanks for the tip, but Min' never made much F/f content, which is the flaver of SW I prefer.  Think Sally Reynolds' "Slumber Party."  Great stuff.

Author's Response:

Stan has no reason to suspect anything untoward. the name of the sorority means zero to him as long as she is enjoying herself. don't we all see what we want to see and blind ourselves to other truths?

Reviewer: pixl8ed Signed [Report This]
Date: March 10 2017 7:06 AM Title: Stan

And another thing...in what universe does that psycho bitch have "innocent eyes."  She wouldn't even be able to generate a glamour to give the effect: she wouldn't even know what they look like.

Just sayin'.

God...so hooked on this story....someone make some nice SW porn that I don't have to think about.

Reviewer: Shrinkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: March 08 2017 9:37 PM Title: Stan

A thought occurred to me... If there are any fans of the original Star Trek out there, there was an episode called "Mudd's women".  In the show, there was something called the "Venus drug".  This drug, when taken by a very average looking woman, made her look like a perfect 10.  Is it possible that the harvest of the life energy of their victims has the same effect on the participating Omega sisters? Is this the reason they keep going back for more…? To maintain their beauty…? Like I said, it’s just a thought...

Author's Response:

Seems like someone has caught on to my little charade...